Clan: Kazokuyaiba (Must choose which Dance, Sun or Moon in 'Clan' section)

Kekkei Genkai: Chakra Cloud

Elements:

Dance of the Sun:

Dance of the Moon:

Specialization:

Dance of the Sun:

Dance of the Moon:

Location: Scattered

Clan History: There were once two brothers fighting to take control of their village. Their names were Hisakata (Moon) and Taiyou (Sun). Hisakata wished to rule the village with an iron fist. Taiyou, on the other hand, wanted peace and prosperity and wanted the people to decide who would rule. So both brothers created dojos training people in their arts, which became Dance of the Moon and Dance of the Sun. Hisakata practiced Kyujutsu, while Taiyou practiced Kenjutsu.

They both trained in secret for 5 years with their pupils, each not knowing the other was doing the exact same. They each recruited members in secret to create a fighting force that would force the other into submission. After the 5 years of training and recruiting, they both felt they were ready.

Hisakata told his men to attack Taiyou's house by night, and take him by surprise. Taiyou, on the other hand, ordered his men to rush his brother's during the day, and not give him any more time to prepare. So by the time the attacks were ready, both brothers had men stationed at each other's houses. As Hisakata left for his village in the morning, he was cut down and killed. As Taiyou returned from the village, he was shot multiple times by bows.

As the men were returning to the dojo, they ran into the opposite person's men. Both sides later realized that not only their target, but their employer was killed. They decided they would never let this happen again and formed the Kazokuyaiba clan.

Kekkei Genkai Description: Chakra cloud allows you to saturate the air around you with chakra (Making a 'cloud' of sorts), making your moves more flexible as to where you can gather chakra. Instead of gathering chakra into a weapon in your hand, you can gather it 5 meters away as long as there is something to gather it on (Such as a weapon). It can affect up to 5 weapons at a time.

Drawbacks: Forced to take

Code:

[b]Name:[/b] One-Track Mind
[b]Type:[/b] Negative
[b]Description:[/b] The individual has a difficult time splitting their attention between different things. The individual is incapable of multitasking and has a very hard time combatting multiple tasks at once.

and

Code:

[b]Name:[/b] Pharmacophobia
[b]Type:[/b] Negative
[b]Description:[/b] This individual's body is resistant to medical based techniques. All forms of medical ninjutsu suffer a -1 when used on or by this individual. This ONLY applies to POSITIVE HEALING EFFECTS, not offensive medical techniques.

You may add a positive characteristic to only one of these. If you want 2 positives you must make a third negative.

Members: None (When I make my alt it will be clan leader)

Chakra Cloud:

Ok, lets look at this.

Your KKG is kinda vague. How do you add chakra to weapons from a range? Is the a distance limit? Can you do it to multiple weapons? Give me more details on tthis.

As for the jutsu, i want to know a distance cap as well.

Another note on the power jutsu, chakra cost for a C-Rank is always 15. Remove that.

Once these edits are made, we can move on.

Strafe Aisu wrote:Ok, lets look at this.

Your KKG is kinda vague. How do you add chakra to weapons from a range? Is the a distance limit? Can you do it to multiple weapons? Give me more details on tthis.

As for the jutsu, i want to know a distance cap as well.

Another note on the power jutsu, chakra cost for a C-Rank is always 15. Remove that.

Once these edits are made, we can move on.

Fixed.

Ok, the cloud of charka needs more details. Can you move the cloud? Do you use it before launching the ranged weapon or after?

Strafe Aisu wrote:Ok, the cloud of charka needs more details. Can you move the cloud? Do you use it before launching the ranged weapon or after?

Added more details to the cloud, plus made CREATING the cloud a jutsu. Added clarification on whether or not you launch it before using it.

Almost there, just one more thing. Can the cloud be destroyed/dissipated by enemy attacks? If so, how many and what kind?

Strafe Aisu wrote:Almost there, just one more thing. Can the cloud be destroyed/dissipated by enemy attacks? If so, how many and what kind?

Added.

The cloud is produced by a D-Rank technique. I can't allow it to withstand two attacks of higher rank without it being a defensive jutsu. Reduce it to 2 D-Rank and 1 C+Rank Jutsu.

Strafe Aisu wrote:The cloud is produced by a D-Rank technique. I can't allow it to withstand two attacks of higher rank without it being a defensive jutsu. Reduce it to 2 D-Rank and 1 C+Rank Jutsu.

Fixed.

Unapproved. Strafe, you got it wrong. 2 D ranks and 1 C rank is a purely defensive D-rank jutsu, not 2 C-ranks.

For your KKG Description....speed and power enhancement of weapons cannot be a Kekkei Genkai by themselves, as too many jutsu do this already for you to monopolize it.
The chakra cloud is confusing. I would like you to reword this to be remotely understandable in both KKG Description and the jutsu itself.

Your Speed and Power Enhancement jutsu should also be reworded.

'Takes a lot of chakra' is not a drawback.

Hodaka wrote:Unapproved. Strafe, you got it wrong. 2 D ranks and 1 C rank is a purely defensive D-rank jutsu, not 2 C-ranks.

For your KKG Description....speed and power enhancement of weapons cannot be a Kekkei Genkai by themselves, as too many jutsu do this already for you to monopolize it.
The chakra cloud is confusing. I would like you to reword this to be remotely understandable in both KKG Description and the jutsu itself.

Your Speed and Power Enhancement jutsu should also be reworded.

'Takes a lot of chakra' is not a drawback.

1. It isnt a defensive jutsu, it doesn't stop them, it just is dissipated. I changed it so that any ranked Fuuton or Katon jutsu can dissipate it.

2. I find your logic very valid, and for that reason I removed them as KKG jutsu, and will instead the 'Speed' one a hidden jutsu. I have found that the other one has absolutely no reason to be a KKG Jutsu, considering you are able to do it without it anyways.

3. I completely reworded the KKG Bio and the Chakra Cloud Jutsu, hopefully this time it is a little bit more clear.

4. As said before, I removed them from KKG Jutsu and all that is left is the Chakra Cloud.

Hopefully that is enough for it to be re-approved.

You are going to need more drawbacks than simply taking One-Track Mind. Also, can you app a positive special characteristic with One-Track Mind or no?

As for your jutsu, I'm confused on the range. You KKG section says 3 meters, but your jutsu says 5 meters. Is one of them referring to the radius of the cloud? Just give me some clarification. Also, I need you state if the cloud is able to effect multiple weapons or not.

Note: I am assuming that you are planning to app the other two jutsu as regular jutsu later on? Just making sure you aren't including their effects into this jutsu.

Once this is fixed, we can move on :)

Strafe Aisu wrote:You are going to need more drawbacks than simply taking One-Track Mind. Also, can you app a positive special characteristic with One-Track Mind or no?

As for your jutsu, I'm confused on the range. You KKG section says 3 meters, but your jutsu says 5 meters. Is one of them referring to the radius of the cloud? Just give me some clarification. Also, I need you state if the cloud is able to effect multiple weapons or not.

Note: I am assuming that you are planning to app the other two jutsu as regular jutsu later on? Just making sure you aren't including their effects into this jutsu.

Once this is fixed, we can move on :)

1. Added another negative characteristic, added whether or not you can app a positive
2. Fixed the range. I was really thinking, but when I wrote '3 metres' It was a 'for instance' kind of thing. Added clarification on multiple weapons.
3. I am going to app the other 2 as separate jutsus. They will, in fact, require this KKG, of course.