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1Tsuchiki Clan Empty Tsuchiki Clan Sat May 30, 2015 5:30 am

Ryu Tsuchiki

Ryu Tsuchiki


D-rank
Symbol:


Clan: Tsuchiki

Kekkei Genkai: Kaminari no ​​Buraddo (Blood of Lightning)

Elements: Raiton

Specialization: Bukijutsu (Kenjutsu), Ninjutsu

Location: Scattered

Clan History: The Tsuchiki clan originated vaguely in the land of Iron, where a where the soon to be head of a small samurai clan decided to leave the land to embark across the other nations, trading his honor for adventure. Along his way out of the country, the samurai met a Ronin and they fell in love. To which they founded a clan that clashed the two life styles together, now known as the Tsuchiki clan. Upon creation, the two immediately moved out of the land of Iron to wonder the world. They gave birth to three children, which all strangely inherited the vibrant purple eyes of their mother. They where taught by their mother to wield chakra while being trained in the arts of the sword by their father. Later on in their lifes, they discovered that they all had an affinity for Raiton that was deeper than first thought of as they couldn't use Futon as it actually damaged their coils. During the third great shinobi war the clan decided to take up arms with Konohagakure, which they followed loyally until the break of the war, despite the lose of both the founders. Given permission to stay in the land of fire as a Ronin clan, the three ninja set up to build their clan to its farthest potential. These ninja where known as Renja, Kano, and Ryuudo Tsuchiki. Given lands a few mils outside of the village along with their guaranteed protection to build up their clan. It became established that all their offspring had the same issue as them with their affinity towards Raiton and the exact same vibrant purple eyes. After some years, which includes after they assisted in defending Konoha in its sieges before the forth shinobi war, the Akatsuki and allies declared war on the shinobi world. They along with many others jumped to join the shinobi alliance in an effort to defend their homelands and long time friends. The clan showed their use in many battles and became a renowned clan for their deadly control of Raiton and their original sword style Sandāsuu~eiku, which combined the fluidity of their katana with the power of Raiton, forming many kata's that is required for members of the clan to learn and that few outside of the clan have yet to be basic in due to its high level of control over raiton needed. After the defeat of the Akatsuki, the Tsuchiki clan allowed their shinobi to assimilate into the ranks of Konohagakure until it was fully repaired and recouped after the heavy fighting. Even though there are still some shinobi of Tsuchiki origin that are in the Konoha's ranks, most of the Tsuchiki's stay and are trained inside their own compound, which has grown vastly over the centuries of their founding. Though most of the clan is Ronin currently, a few individuals get additional training at the academy in Konoha and become one of their shinobi.

Kekkei Genkai Description: The Kaminari no ​​ Buraddo alloys the user to gather and mold chakra to an extent of their own power in the form of Raiton energy without the use of handseals. This can be anything from folding out small sparks of energy along the skin to creating walls of chaotic and powerful bolts of lightning that run rampant. Because of how strong their bodies are bonded to Raiton, they can not mold anything Futon based and have a very strong weakness to the element, and have trouble picking up and using other forms of energy.

Drawbacks: Because of their extreme affinity to Raiton, they cannot perform any kind of Futon jutsu, and suffer a +2 rank of damage of such a jutsu attacking them. They receive a penalty of -5 penalty cost of extra chakra usage when performing a jutsu of any other affinity.

Members: Ryu Tsuchiki

Kekkei Genkai Jutsu:
Raiton touch:
Kaosu hifu:
Kaosubāsuto:
Kami no yubi:



Last edited by Ryu Tsuchiki on Tue Jun 09, 2015 1:50 am; edited 8 times in total

2Tsuchiki Clan Empty Re: Tsuchiki Clan Sat May 30, 2015 6:44 pm

Ayakashi

Ayakashi


S-rank
just popping in to say that when this is ready to be modded, post in the clan req's thread stickied at the top of the clan section :)

3Tsuchiki Clan Empty Re: Tsuchiki Clan Sun May 31, 2015 6:11 pm

Ayakashi

Ayakashi


S-rank
KKG

Seems okay, I'm assuming that the lightning powers described is in their jutsu list.

Drawbacks

okay, just some wording stuff here, can't use fuuton is fine, double the damage, we tend to work in ranks here, so, saying they receive +1 rank of damage from fuuton techniques, or +2 if you want their weakness to be huge. As for the last one, 20% could get interesting, as the site mostly works in multiples of 5, so, saying non-raiton techniques cost -5 additional chakra, would be about the same. :)

Jutsu

1/ I'd like this to be B rank, and I would like you to describe what the burns you can do are, and how quickly they escalate? Is it first degree at a touch, then an additional degree of burn every 2 seconds of contact? For example. Also, chakra costs are largely set in stone, you don't need to state them :) (unless they're higher.)

2/ the maximum damage of burns at B rank is minor 3rd degree. You'll quickly find that the EMP is not needed, and you could remove it. It also needs a speed in which it projects outwards. Also, can you place it anywhere or is it around you? If so what is the size of the orb?

3/ this looks fine, but you need a speed on the beam,

if you're unsure on anything, check the jutsu rules here:

http://www.narutosaga.com/t11745-jutsu-rules

4Tsuchiki Clan Empty Re: Tsuchiki Clan Sun May 31, 2015 6:25 pm

Ryu Tsuchiki

Ryu Tsuchiki


D-rank
Ayakashi wrote:KKG

Seems okay, I'm assuming that the lightning powers described is in their jutsu list.

I was thinking it could also have other uses, for example putting alittle bit of raiton energy into a punch that could cause the enemy to contract muscle involuntary. Is this allowed, and do I have to list it in the kekkei genkai jutsu or not?

5Tsuchiki Clan Empty Re: Tsuchiki Clan Sun May 31, 2015 6:30 pm

Ayakashi

Ayakashi


S-rank
Ryu Tsuchiki wrote:
Ayakashi wrote:KKG

Seems okay, I'm assuming that the lightning powers described is in their jutsu list.

I was thinking it could also have other uses, for example putting alittle bit of raiton energy into a punch that could cause the enemy to contract muscle involuntary. Is this allowed, and do I have to list it in the kekkei genkai jutsu or not?

No, those are somewhat generic raiton jutsu, just remember that you would need to app them as jutsu, :)

6Tsuchiki Clan Empty Re: Tsuchiki Clan Sun May 31, 2015 6:36 pm

Ayakashi

Ayakashi


S-rank
KKG & Drawbacks

seem fine

Jutsu

1/ seems fine

2/ "or can be controlled in a 45 degree cone in a chosen area that can extend up to 65 meters." No. either reduce the range to the radius rules for an A rank jutsu, or remove this entirely. Also, you didn't add a speed. 40mp/s would be fine. (meters per second.)

3/ still no speed added 60mp/s would be fine here.

7Tsuchiki Clan Empty Re: Tsuchiki Clan Sun May 31, 2015 7:32 pm

Ryu Tsuchiki

Ryu Tsuchiki


D-rank
Ayakashi wrote:KKG & Drawbacks

seem fine

Jutsu

1/ seems fine

2/ "or can be controlled in a 45 degree cone in a chosen area that can extend up to 65 meters." No. either reduce the range to the radius rules for an A rank jutsu, or remove this entirely. Also, you didn't add a speed. 40mp/s would be fine. (meters per second.)

3/ still no speed added 60mp/s would be fine here.

I added the general usage as a jutsu, along with its scalable degrees. And the speed for the last jutsu is at the end. Sorry for making the process long

8Tsuchiki Clan Empty Re: Tsuchiki Clan Sun May 31, 2015 8:32 pm

Ayakashi

Ayakashi


S-rank
Its fine, but that jutsu is REALLY hard to read with that broken coding, can you fix that please?

9Tsuchiki Clan Empty Re: Tsuchiki Clan Sun May 31, 2015 9:19 pm

Ryu Tsuchiki

Ryu Tsuchiki


D-rank
Ayakashi wrote:Its fine, but that jutsu is REALLY hard to read with that broken coding, can you fix that please?
Fixed it, sorry I was on my phone when I did that. Does this mean its a go for my character profile and the clan is good?

10Tsuchiki Clan Empty Re: Tsuchiki Clan Mon Jun 01, 2015 8:07 pm

Ayakashi

Ayakashi


S-rank
Hiya, me again, first off with raiton touch, You're unable to have 2 S rank techniques on a clan, so, now you have to make the choice between the S rank application of this, and the S rank jutsu you have last. Remove one of them please?

With many of the burns you give two damages, which is fine, i would simply like you to state a condition for the light and the more severe. simple as saying 'deal' (light damage here) on contact and up to (heavier damage) with prolonged contact or repeated hits. Nothing too annoying, can you do this for each rank of the scaling jutsu please?

A rank: You say adapt not adept >.>

the rest seems okay, i will re-evaluate again when these changes are done.

Almost there, i promise <3

11Tsuchiki Clan Empty Re: Tsuchiki Clan Tue Jun 02, 2015 1:07 am

Ryu Tsuchiki

Ryu Tsuchiki


D-rank
Bumping with deleting the S level and adding extra info to all the other levels

12Tsuchiki Clan Empty Re: Tsuchiki Clan Wed Jun 03, 2015 7:34 am

Ayakashi

Ayakashi


S-rank
Potentially last thing,

the earlier thing you say (2 inches and 5 inches) when it comes to the electricity of your jutsu, that's describing the area it covers on 'you' correct? before it covers say your entire hand or foot.

I'd just like you to make that clearer.

Kaosu : B rank jutsu cost 20 to activate.

basuto: " and can create any where from 1st to even 4th degree burns and tissue damage based on how close the target was to the user, " at what ranges cause what damage? within the first four meters is it 4th? then decreasing by a degree for each 2m after that?

13Tsuchiki Clan Empty Re: Tsuchiki Clan Wed Jun 03, 2015 2:38 pm

Ryu Tsuchiki

Ryu Tsuchiki


D-rank
Ayakashi wrote:Potentially last thing,

the earlier thing you say (2 inches and 5 inches) when it comes to the electricity of your jutsu, that's describing the area it covers on 'you' correct? before it covers say your entire hand or foot.

I'd just like you to make that clearer.

Kaosu : B rank jutsu cost 20 to activate.

basuto: " and can create any where from 1st to even 4th degree burns and tissue damage based on how close the target was to the user, " at what ranges cause what damage? within the first four meters is it 4th? then decreasing by a degree for each 2m after that?

I made the edits, and I stated that it extends off the body that distance at the same it covers your hand or foot or portion of a limb, and I made other changes to add more detail. All in all I am learning to just add as much detail as possible in jutsu

14Tsuchiki Clan Empty Re: Tsuchiki Clan Fri Jun 05, 2015 12:15 am

Ayakashi

Ayakashi


S-rank
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