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1Jiendo Clan Empty Jiendo Clan Tue Apr 30, 2013 5:23 am

Blargles

Blargles


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Clan: Jiendo


Kekkei Genkai: Hakujou Bachi no Kyojin (Cruel Curse of Giants)
-Path of the Hidai or Path of the Gekido


Elements: Doton


Specialization: Taijutsu (Both Paths)
Ninjutsu (Path of the Hidai)
Medical Ninjutsu (Path of the Gekido)

Location: Scattered


Clan History: Long, long ago, before even the time when many of the clans had united under the various banners of the shinobi villages, many women very near to the area that would one day become Iwagakure began dying suddenly during childbirth. In almost all cases the child, sometimes suffering from varying deformities, all too soon followed the grim fate of their mothers.

For the children that didn't perish, some would say they suffered a far worse fate.

The children were born giants, many as heavy as eight or nine kilograms and in even rarer cases still, ten or eleven. Their skin was always a terrible dark grey, their eyes often a grotesque dull red. The mothers of such were often left sickly at best, sometimes far beyond the reach of any medical ninjutsu that could have saved them.

These births quickly became considered a great and terrible curse, perhaps brought on by horrific misdeeds in the past or some other as yet hidden secret. This led some to even kill their children during the first few years of their infancy, an act committed by only the most cowardly and low of the families in the area, an act often met with banishment or death as well.

Those who survived grew immensely large and strong at an alarming rate during the short years before their teens, causing extreme pain over several weeks at a time in a process villagers soon dubbed the "hidai". This process was only ever broken up by shorter periods of incredible and violent rage, requiring families to literally tie the children down until the growing pains returned.

After at least a year of this (sometimes longer) the process suddenly ended as soon as it had began. The children, now never anything less than at least six and a half feet tall (though more often seven or eight), quickly became scorned and hated by the villagers around them for both their looks and previous violent behavior. This eventually led to a great deal of animosity between the so-called "giants" and those who lived around them, even members of their own family.

To add to this problem the shortest members of what would one day become the Jiendo clan still possessed much of their childhood rage, ever lusting to spill the blood of those who would hate them. Only the larger of the group, those who rose to heights of seven or eight feet or more, were capable of curbing the anger bubbling away in their smaller comrades. Alas, this "cold war" state between the other villagers and the "giants" was not to last.

One fateful day a small group of people, intolerant of those who would differ from them and sick of living with what they deemed as "monsters", decided to "rough up" a lone member who had come to a stream to drink. When word of this reached the rest of the "giants", nothing could have stopped the rampage that followed. They quickly found and set upon the men who had committed this crime and reduced them to something barely recognizable as human, such were the giant's numbers and immense rage.

Of course, this was the final straw for those who had lived through the "giants" birth and subsequent childhoods. They rose up in great numbers and drove the Jiendo out of the area, chasing them far and wide until thoughts of returning would become but a distant memory.

In order to escape, the "giants" found themselves forced to move underground, to take shelter in caves and hovels unfit for even beats to lay. In time, as the refugees gathered and became older, they began to dig deeper underground, building a network of tunnels far beneath the watching eyes of those who would move against them. The earth became their home and for many years to come the clan grew and prospered underground, taking the name "Jiendo".

In the more recent years since the last great ninja world war the Jiendo have begun emerging from their caves, perhaps sensing the peace that had overtaken the land. They sought peace to those that would do them no harm, having learned many ways to overcome their blood lust and size in their years underground. The clan was accepted, at least marginally by the denizens of the world above. They were offered sanctuary, and in recent years many Jiendo have begun shinobi training, but they refused to move into any of the villages that offered it. The earth was their home.


Kekkei Genkai Description:
All Jiendo appear as grey-skinned, red-eyed giants, thus it is extremely rare for one to grow to be less than six feet. Characters in this clan must have these characteristics.

Path of the Hidai
Those who embrace the Hidai are usually the largest among the clan, standing at heights of seven, eight or even nine feet. They embody the painful growing phase each Jiendo must endure during childhood, using the memory of their pain to fuel their strength and endurance. Thickened skin reduces the effectiveness of enemy Taijutsu techniques by -1 rank. Extremely dense leg muscles allow for great leaps of up to 12 meters. Must take the positive special characteristic Stamina.

Path of the Gekido
Those who embrace the Gekido tend to be the shortest of their clan, usually standing at about six to six and a half feet, but this is not always so. They embody the hateful rage that flows through every Jiendo during the breaks between their growth, seeking to bathe in the blood of their enemies. Broken bones and open wounds greater than 3.5cm deep allow a +1 rank in effectiveness to own Taijutsu techniques. Insignificant cuts, scratches and any bruising do not initiate this ability. Must take the positive special characteristic Bloodlust.

Only one path can be chosen by any one Jiendo, mixing the two would only cause madness.


Drawbacks:
Path of the Hidai
Due to their size, those of the Hidai can often be cumbersome and one tier slower (both actual speed and reaction speed) than their actual rank. This issue also makes the use of swords or bows or other such weapons awkward and downright pointless. Must take the negative special characteristic Bulky. Kenjutsu and Kyujutsu cannot be used. Those along this path may only use the clan jutsu of their own path.

Path of the Gekido
The Gekido are brutes, truly alive only during the glory of battle. While their size allows more practical use of weapons, their immense inner rage makes them easily drove to rampage and gives them great grievance when trying to focus on two things at once. Cannot take a fourth element. Must take the special negative characteristics One Track Mind and Short Fuse. Those along this path may only use the clan jutsu of their own path.

The minds of all of the clan are fragile things, due to what they had to endure when they were younger. This hampers the ability to focus on certain abilities. All Jiendo, regardless of path, cannot use Genjutsu or Fuuinjutsu.


Members:


Kekkei Genkai Jutsu:
Path of the Hidai

Name: Doton: Kyousei Sukin no Iwa (Earth Release: Great Skin of Rock)
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: C-A
Type: Defensive
Element: Doton
Range: Personal
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 2 posts
Cooldown: 4 posts
Description: The user draws numerous small stones from the ground to cover the entire body, creating an effective bodily shield.

C Rank: The shield can handle two jutsu of its own rank but none higher. The user of this rank cannot jump at all and running and turning is difficult.

B Rank: The user draws more stones to their body, the shield can handle two jutsu of its own rank or one above. Several small, sharp protrusions of rock jut out from the users body, making it harder to get in close without risking injury. The user of this rank can now turn and run with only a small amount of extra effort, but jumping is still impossible.

A Rank: Even more stones are drawn to the users body, the shield can handle three jutsu of its own rank or one higher. A great many long, sharp protrusions of rock now jut out from the users back in addition to the ones present from B Rank, making a close combat assault from behind foolhardy at best. The user of this rank allows unrestricted movement while using the armor.

Name: Shoutou Genkotsu (Extinction Fists)
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: B
Type: Offensive
Element: N/A
Range: Close
Specialty: Taijutsu
Duration: -10 chakra per post for up to 2 posts
Cooldown: 5 posts
Description: The user drives the opponent to the ground and climbs on top of them before unleashing a barrage of chakra enhanced (a factor of x.5 their strength) hammer fists from above. The ferocity of this technique is capable of breaking bones and causing internal and external bruising.


Path of the Gekido

Name: Buraindo Gekido (Blind Rage)
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: C-A
Type: Supplementary
Element: N/A
Range: Personal
Specialty: Medical Ninjutsu
Duration: 3 posts
Cooldown: 6 Posts
Description: The user brings the full force of their anger to bear, then turns it inward to dull or remove their pain.

C Rank: The user is able to completely numb the pain from any bruising or cuts (4cm or less) on the body. Anything more serious can be dulled, to a small extent, but not completely numbed.

B Rank: All the effects of C-rank are still present, but now wounds as deep as 5cm are able to be numbed and overcome. A small healing effect also becomes present, capable of healing any bruise or wounds 2cm or less in depth over the duration.

A Rank: Any pain short of a fatal wound can now be completely numbed and overcome. The healing effect can now heal wounds as deep as 5cm over the duration.

Name: Tsuin Chi Dageki (Twin Blood Strike)
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: C
Type: Offensive
Element: N/A
Range: Close
Specialty: Taijutsu
Duration: 1 post
Cooldown: 2 posts
Description: The users blood boils with immense rage, giving it an acidic quality once exposed to the air. This acidic blood is capable of eroding clothes over time and inflicting second degree burns on the skin. The user makes several cuts across their knuckles, exposing their acidic blood to the air before rushing forward and delivering a series of blows with the intent of exposing the victim to this blood.



Last edited by Blargles on Thu May 09, 2013 12:25 am; edited 13 times in total

2Jiendo Clan Empty Re: Jiendo Clan Wed May 01, 2013 6:46 am

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  • No need to put those things in brackets

    Blargles wrote:((Deep wounds allow a +1 in rank to Taijutsu techniques. Insignificant cuts, scratches or bruises do not initiate this ability.

  • does this mean taijutsu attacks agaist them deal +1 damage, or their taijutsu does +1 damage to others?

  • also, when you say 'deep wounds', exactly how deep? e.g wounds deeper than [x] cm.

Blargles wrote:((The blood of the Gekido boils with their rage, when exposed to the air it takes on an acidic quality that burns the skin and erodes the clothing of their enemies. When sufficiently enraged, their anger is capable of overriding the pain centers of the brain, allowing ease of mobility when wounded.

  • How bad are these burns? 1st degree, second degree etc.?

  • What level of pain are they able to 'override'?

  • ^ these two things sound more like jutsus actually

3Jiendo Clan Empty Re: Jiendo Clan Sun May 05, 2013 9:49 am

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Edited.

4Jiendo Clan Empty Re: Jiendo Clan Sun May 05, 2013 11:39 am

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Blargles wrote:
Name: Buraindo Gekido (Blind Rage)

B Rank: A small healing effect also becomes present, capable of healing any bruise or wounds 2cm or less in depth over the duration.

A Rank: The healing effect can now heal wounds as deep as 4cm over the duration.

These parts would be Medical Ninjutsu (anything including healing)

Name: Shoutou Genkotsu (Extinction Fists)

For the duration, we're gonna need a lot more than N/A, especially for this type of jutsu. Is it the type of jutsu that you have to pay -5 or -10 chakra to maintain, or does it last 1 or more posts once activated?

5Jiendo Clan Empty Re: Jiendo Clan Mon May 06, 2013 12:55 am

Blargles

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Several edits made!

6Jiendo Clan Empty Re: Jiendo Clan Wed May 08, 2013 1:37 am

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~Bump

7Jiendo Clan Empty Re: Jiendo Clan Wed May 08, 2013 2:59 am

Takao

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Spoiler:
You only mention that "open wounds" of a certain depth employ the taijutsu bonus, but then mention "insignificant" bruises. What happens if a bone is broken, or heavy bruising damage is dealt without actually cutting them?

Spoiler:
How exactly do you intend to determine what enrages the character? This is easily exploitable, as the person could find any small thing enraging and gain an immediate +1 to speed.

Spoiler:
How hampered is "slightly"? Also, you mention that they can move more easily at B Rank, but make no mention of this drawback in the C Rank description.

Spoiler:
How enhanced are their "chakra enhanced hammer fists"? Having an ambiguous description of the technique's power won't pass. Is it only said the technique can crack the ground, or can the technique actually crack the ground? What damage is inflicted to the target upon being damaged by this technique? Also, how long does this even last? You don't have any specific duration, just a per post chakra drain. Could you do this until you run out of chakra?

8Jiendo Clan Empty Re: Jiendo Clan Wed May 08, 2013 4:08 am

Blargles

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Edits made, think I've addressed all issues. Wound up swapping the positives for the Hidai path into the Gekido path then making a new set of positives for the first one.

9Jiendo Clan Empty Re: Jiendo Clan Wed May 08, 2013 4:48 am

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Spoiler:
How much slower are they? Does this affect their reaction speed and such as well?

Spoiler:
There needs to be more drawbacks for the Gekido path. As it stands, it only limits what they can take for specializations, and forces them to take negative special characteristics. This isn't enough to warrant a +1 effectiveness in anything, so you'll need to add more.

10Jiendo Clan Empty Re: Jiendo Clan Wed May 08, 2013 5:13 am

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More changes made! I added that Gekido cannot have a fourth element. Is that enough, along with everything else, for the +1 boost?

11Jiendo Clan Empty Re: Jiendo Clan Fri May 10, 2013 1:42 pm

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Approved.

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