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1Saiyan Finished! Empty Saiyan Finished! Sat Oct 25, 2014 3:37 pm

Heero

Heero


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Clan: Saiyan

Kekkei Genkai: Kaio Ken

Elements: Writer’s Choice

Specialization: Ninjutsu, Taijutsu ( Can still learn others later. )

Location: Konohagakure

Clan History: Originally scattered, the Saiyan clan came dangerously close to being obliterated. The countless battles endured over century's had waned the Saiyan's down to just above a handful, with obliteration looking them dead in the face the clans leader at the time took on a daunting endeavor, to reunite the clan in one place. The clans leader was a bright young revolutionary known as Kayle. Threw massive effort and perseverance most of the clan was reunited in the shinobi village of Konohagakure. The coming together was only the beginning in the grand scheme of things as Kayle was bound and determined to never let his clan, no his family, to come so close to being wiped out again. Kayle foreseen more struggles coming there way and set out on a Crusade to be prepared the next time any conflict would arrive. He commissioned the invent of the clans battle armor in many variants as well as devices that would help them to gauge there opponent better. Many a Saiyan died trying to have fun or underestimating there opponents in a fight, to fix this the Scouter was made to read how much chakra a opponent had so that the Saiyan would at least somewhat know what they where about to get into. The years went on and the clans numbers grew exponentially. From a early age all new members of the clan where taught to fight and to make the best of there ability's.  The clan began to put out many young high ranking shinobi that some other clans showed resentment. The average rate of Saiyan shinobi making jounin rank was astounding, most only being twelve or thirteen. Saiyans have an inborn need to fight. Most Saiyans have spent their lives training to become stronger so that they could prove themselves in battle, this tradition has not been forgot. Where the Saiyans will become to rule the battlefield or fade to a distant memory remains to be seen.

Kekkei Genkai Description: Kaio Ken is a Kekkei Genkai born from extreme chakra control, so much so that members of the clan have a easier time controlling the chakra outside of the body. The Kekkei Genkai  allows the user to form various blasts/balls of chakra outside of the body without having to form hand signs, this in turn allows for less time taken up my forming signs. Due to the heavy training as children they get a +1 in taijutsu and a +1 in ninjutsu.

Drawbacks: Due to the intense physical aspect of there training, all Genjutsu and Bukijutsu techniques get a +1 effectiveness against them. The clan members also can never learn Bukijutsu, Genjutsu or Kugutsu due to there prideful nature. Also members must take Foolhardy as a negative trait and cannot balance it with a positive. Thanks to the the clans heavy focus on hand to hand combat and throwing chakra around as a weapon, any ninjutsu requiring hand signs are harder for them to learn causing a 20% increase in word count when learning them. Another drawback is thanks to there habit of throwing around chakra, chakra Sensory type shinobi have a much easier time finding them.

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Kekkei Genkai Jutsu:

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2Saiyan Finished! Empty Re: Saiyan Finished! Sun Oct 26, 2014 12:33 pm

Heero

Heero


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Bump for approval?

3Saiyan Finished! Empty Re: Saiyan Finished! Thu Nov 06, 2014 2:46 pm

Tame

Tame


D-rank
Specify +1 to usage in Ninjutsu and Taijutsu.

Increase the percentage increase to 20% or higher. It's not too difficult to circumvent given the fact that you are able to use a variety of techniques without hand seals because of the clan, anyhow.

Are those items free, or just unique ones able to be bought by clansmen?

Basic Chakra Blast: Totally fine. Just state if it causes bruising or anything (in accordance with Jutsu Guidelines).

Chakra Aura: No problem with this. 50% is vague though. Maybe 2 degrees of burns less, 2 inches less of cutting, or just plain 2 ranks lower in damage.

Super Saiyan: This should have some requirements, like either a player-character friend dying or paying to have an NPC do it. +3 to Speed or Strength (which I think you should choose upon unlocking and have it set, it shouldn't be dynamic) and +1 to Taijutsu techniques in exchange for -1 to Perception, 35 to activate and -10 per post.....this is unbalanced.

-First off, you can't have a passive +1 to techniques any more (or at least without a truly insane chakra cost); you can only have it be for the first technique used after the boost was activated.

-Your +3 would only be legal if the jutsu only gave the +3 to the stat, and then a drawback.

-I would like the chakra maintenance cost to be a little bit higher, for it to be able to be used indefinitely until chakra gets too low. (15 or 20)

-I think the afterburn effect should be a bit larger to be considered 'exhausted'.

Fix this up and you're on the verge of approbal, then!

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