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1Shigemitsu Clan  Empty Shigemitsu Clan Tue Mar 26, 2013 1:20 am

Riyo

Riyo


D-rank
Symbol:
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Clan: Shigemitsu Clan

Kekkei Genkai: Color Ninjutsu

Elements: -

Specialization: Ninjutsu, Chakra Flow

Location: Scattered (Started in Iwa)

Clan History: The Shigemitsu Clan was a small, nomadic tribe that lived in the by the border between the Land of Earth and the Land of Wind. It was founded by Yoshihiro Shigemitsu, a legendary painter and prominent figure in Iwa History. Due to the volatile location in which the clan was situated, Yoshihiro was forced to move the clan closer to the main village, but within two years the clan had found itself under the direct protection of the Tsuchikage as one of the clans that composed Iwa.

During his time, Yoshihiro made a name for himself as a prominent artist in Iwa. His paintings of the natural beauty of the Land of Earth earned him critical acclaim throughout the world, but the man's other talent, the clan's darker secret, was one that few fully knew about. Under a separate identity, Yoshihiro worked directly under the Tsuchikage as per the agreement made in exchange for protection. Using his unique Kekkei Genkai, Yoshihiro frequently carried out covert assassinations for the Tsuchikage, becoming a member of an elite branch of the ANBU. This was a side of him that no one in his family would know about until his death - a part that the man was ashamed of, claiming that by using the beauty of art to destroy a human being, he was slowly descending into a darkness that he felt no one would be able to relate to.

Yoshihiro's legacy lives on in his art, and in his family. The clan is currently scattered due to the migration of its members to the various villages to do their art: Yoshihiro’s children, and his children's children were all blessed with immense ability with art, with many of them becoming world-artists in their own right, but the man's unique and powerful bloodline technique only recently resurfaced in his granddaughter, Riyo Shigemitsu.

Kekkei Genkai Description:
  • Gifted Artistry: Members of the Shigemitsu Clan are ‘born for the arts’, as many will describe. They are natural artists and can draw virtually anything with ease, resulting in a +1 affinity to art-based Ninjutsu (Gennin can use B-rank art-ninjutsu).
  • Chakra Globules: Those born with Yoshihiro’s bloodline have access to Color Ninjutsu as a result of a physiological mutation that results in the user’s body being able to mould and process their chakra into a unique form that will take on a color of the visible spectrum. Though, due to this lengthy process of constant chakra conversion, only one color can be used per post. Once the colored globule has been moulded, it can be expelled into the physical world (similar in concept to Chakra Chains) through the fingertips, but a more common practice by the clan is expelling the chakra through a brush, making it a requirement for those who use this bloodline to have Chakra Flow as their Secondary Specialization.
  • Color Ninjutsu: Those with the mutation are given access to seven colors (ROYGBIV) that each correspond to a specific power as a result of the way in which the specially processed chakra reacts with the specific wavelengths of radiation. More detailed explanations of the colors can be found in the Color Ninjutsu technique of the clan. As a general overview, the color red corresponds to high energy explosions that produce no heat but are essentially quick bursts of energy that produce a force equivalent to that of an exploding tag, orange globules solidify into fragile shock-absorbing barriers that shatter in one hit when a technique comes in contact with it, yellow corresponds to piercing damage that can range from the feeling of a pinprick to the feeling of a thick needle being inserted into the area in which yellow is painted, green solidifies into harder material suitable for temporary weapons and defensive blockades, blue produces weighted objects that become extremely fragile after it has come in contact with something once, indigo produces a dark gas that is highly effective in obstructing sight, and violet represents cutting damage. Colors painted on the target fade immediately after the technique has been activated, and only one color effect can be used at any time. Access to the colors is based solely on the user’s mastery of the clan’s Color Ninjutsu, which is given at a starting rank of D is trained in a similar way as a second specialization, though it serves as an independent branch of Ninjutsu and thus does not take up another specialization slot. This is trained and mastered up to S-rank in the same way other specializations are trained, and it must be trained independently from Ninjutsu – the word count still applies from D >>> S (D to C requires a count of 1500).


Drawbacks:
  • -1 rank to usage of elemental ninjutsu techniques (ie. Gennin can only use D-rank elemental ninjutsu in exchange for B-rank art-based ninjutsu)
  • The colors of color ninjutsu cannot be mixed to create new abilities as mixing is impossible – the processed chakra will only take one color. User can only generate the seven colors of the rainbow: Red, orange, yellow, green, blue, indigo, violet.
  • Pharmacophobia MUST be taken as a negative trait for members who possess the Shigemitsu Clan’s physiological mutation that allows its members to process their chakra into a form that can take on a color of the visible spectrum. Due to this mutation, their bodies react differently from healing which results in reduced effectiveness.
  • Chakra globules can easily be washed off by water techniques of equal rank, though by washing the color off of a surface, the color simply forms a layer on the water similar in appearance to oil in water. (Colored chakra globules don’t dissolve in water).
  • Effects of the colored chakra globules are nullified if intense light (ie. a direct ray of sunlight or artificial light/radiation (ie. lasers/cosmic rays) to an equivalent degree) is passed through them. This also applies to when the color is in water – concentrated light shining directly at the ‘color puddle’ will nullify it. When the ninjutsu is successfully nullified, the visible coloration of chakra globules will disappear.


Members: Riyo Shigemitsu

Kekkei Genkai Jutsu:
Name: Color Ninjutsu
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: D-S
Type: Offensive, Defensive, Supplementary
Element: -
Range: Close to Long
Specialty: Ninjutsu, Chakra Flow
Duration: Varies based on color - red, yellow, orange, indigo and violet are one-time-use only while green and blue can last 2-3 posts.
Cooldown: 2-8 posts - varying degrees of re-use. (Based on the color)
Description: Color Ninjutsu is a technique that has come about as a result of the presence of the clan’s rare and unique mutation that results in a physiological change that allows the user’s body to process their chakra into a form that more readily adopts a color from the visible spectrum. It is due to this long process of chakra moulding that each technique based on this style takes such a long time to produce (resulting in the 1 color/post limit). The globules can be ‘painted’ on virtually any surface, including in the air itself, thereby making the natural environment a canvas for their unique line of Ninjutsu. This is due to the fact that the chakra globules, when expelled, take on a visible, physical and tangible form.

The colors can be generated by the hands alone by sending the processed chakra to the fingertips to release the color-infused chakra globules, but when the user's chakra is channeled through a paintbrush (ie. chakra flow technique), the colors produced have greater power, of and there is more precision in terms what is created or painted. The characteristics of the globules change dramatically when finger-produced globules are compared to paintbrush-produced globules: paintbrush globules have a more paint-like consistency and coloration, with deeper hues that radiate with more chakra when compared to finger-produced globules. Finger-produced globules take on actual globular shapes that can be spread around with the fingers, though the more the glob is spread out, the thinner the chakra layer becomes. (Real life analogy: Paint brush stroke vs. putting a drop of paint on a flat surface and spreading it with the finger – the paint brush is more even, neater and prettier, while spreading color with the finger will eventually cause the paint to completely rub off or at least thin out excessively). As a result, there is a -1 Effectiveness for techniques when a paintbrush isn’t used (color used will drop one rank and suffer the consequences).

Users of Color Ninjutsu have access to the seven colors of the rainbow: red, orange, yellow, green, blue, indigo and violet. The colors correspond to a specific rank of the Color Ninjutsu specialization.
Indigo – D Rank:
Blue – D to B Rank:
Yellow – D to B Rank:
Violet – C to S Rank:

Green – B Rank:
Red – A Rank:
Orange – A Rank:



Last edited by Riyo on Mon Apr 01, 2013 1:07 pm; edited 17 times in total (Reason for editing : Formatting change, things rewritten.)

2Shigemitsu Clan  Empty Re: Shigemitsu Clan Tue Mar 26, 2013 2:34 am

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"Color Release" implies it's an advanced element. Is it? If so what is it made from? If you're apping a custom advanced element you're going to need a metric fuckton of detail on how it works, what it's strong against, weak against, and twelve other things. Even if it's not an advanced element you're going to have to touch on in detail what you mean:

"allows the user to manipulate color created from their own chakra which is expelled in its special form."

Sentence makes no sense.

" Each color corresponds to a specific, genetically pre-determined ability that can be activated through a single hand seal while causing the chakra that makes up the color created to fluctuate wildly and activate said color's ability."

You speak of each colour having a genetically pre-determined ability. You cannot state that every colour [god knows what you mean by colour. Are you manipulating blue things or are you creating colour? colour is just the spectrum of light an object's surface doesn't absorb] has an ability and then not touch on how they all work.

3Shigemitsu Clan  Empty Re: Shigemitsu Clan Wed Mar 27, 2013 2:10 am

Riyo

Riyo


D-rank
justkidding, format editing and updating things.

I've updated the clan based on the critique I've received, hopefully it makes more sense now, but I really appreciate your comments as they really helped in the creative process and the whole fleshing (isthistherightword?) out my ideas and whatnot. :]

I do realize how my explanations were kinda absolutelyterrible, I wasn't sure what was fully expected. Hopefully I made things a little more clear now: I envision Color Release/Color Ninjutsu as an advanced chakra nature, but moreso something along the likes of a physiological thing where the user can infuse a certain color into specially processed chakra. The more that I thought about it though, the less I saw it as a "release" and moreso as a single technique that has the potential of being a parent to other jutsu.

The whole 'genetically predetermined' thing was thrown in last minute as a half-assed attempt at saying only people with the clan's DNA can use it. (AKA I don't want the Sharingan to be able to copy it Dx, which was why I listed it as a KG in the first place)



Last edited by Riyo on Thu Mar 28, 2013 2:50 am; edited 1 time in total (Reason for editing : Changed my mind, stuff needs to be touched up.)

4Shigemitsu Clan  Empty Re: Shigemitsu Clan Fri Mar 29, 2013 2:32 am

Riyo

Riyo


D-rank
OKAY! Nooow It's finally ready for review. Hopefully I did things correctly this time Dx

5Shigemitsu Clan  Empty Re: Shigemitsu Clan Fri Mar 29, 2013 5:02 pm

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Looks a lot better!

I like that they're like N/A element, it's cool!



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6Shigemitsu Clan  Empty Re: Shigemitsu Clan Fri Mar 29, 2013 8:29 pm

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Your post does not belong here Ayakashi.

I'll read this in a bit.

7Shigemitsu Clan  Empty Re: Shigemitsu Clan Sun Mar 31, 2013 10:38 pm

Riyo

Riyo


D-rank
coughcough :P sewwwww....

8Shigemitsu Clan  Empty Re: Shigemitsu Clan Sun Mar 31, 2013 11:06 pm

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You cannot be incredibly vague with your kekkei genkai, especially one that's so...iffy and have it's explanation be based around a technique. Your techniques aren't reviewed at all until your kekkei Genkai is alright. For this reason I do not intend to read your color ninjutsu technique until the Kekkei Genkai information is adequate:

High versatility: Those born with Yoshihiro’s bloodline have access to Color Ninjutsu, allowing them to freely use seven colors of chakra globules (ROYGBIV) that correspond to seven different powers. Each color has its own rank and can only be accessed when the user ranks up and progresses through the training towards mastery of the technique.

Color Ninjutsu, as defined by you, gives the shinobi the ability to use seven types of different coloured chakra "globules" that each have their own unique powers tied to the colour. Touch on what the fuck these globules are, how they work and explain each colour in detail. "Each color has its own rank and can only be accessed when the user ranks up and progresses through the training towards mastery of the technique." How are these ranks moderated? Does this mean violet techniques are only A rank or does it mean like with specializations and elements you have to rank up colours?

Honestly I dislike the concept and can't see it getting approved but, I rule nothing out, let's see what happens.

[Yes, this is Tatsumaru]

9Shigemitsu Clan  Empty Re: Shigemitsu Clan Mon Apr 01, 2013 1:26 am

Riyo

Riyo


D-rank
Tweaked and edited.

A bulk of what you were asking for was actually explained in the technique itself, so I think I just put it in the wrong place. I expanded on the whole 'science' behind chakra globules and color ninjutsu, and attempted to clarify what I meant with the ranking thing. Hopefully this clarifies things a little more! >W<

10Shigemitsu Clan  Empty Re: Shigemitsu Clan Tue Apr 02, 2013 12:08 am

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Riyo wrote:Kekkei Genkai Description:
  • Gifted Artistry: Members of the Shigemitsu Clan are ‘born for the arts’, as many will describe. They are natural artists and can draw virtually anything with ease, resulting in a +1 affinity to art-based Ninjutsu (Gennin can use B-rank art-ninjutsu).
  • Chakra Globules: Those born with Yoshihiro’s bloodline have access to Color Ninjutsu as a result of a physiological mutation that results in the user’s body being able to mould and process their chakra into a unique form that will take on a color of the visible spectrum. Though, due to this lengthy process of constant chakra conversion, only one color can be used per post. Once the colored globule has been moulded, it can be expelled into the physical world (similar in concept to Chakra Chains) through the fingertips, but a more common practice by the clan is expelling the chakra through a brush, making it a requirement for those who use this bloodline to have Chakra Flow as their Secondary Specialization.
  • Color Ninjutsu: Those with the mutation are given access to seven colors (ROYGBIV) that each correspond to a specific power as a result of the way in which the specially processed chakra reacts with the specific wavelengths of radiation. More detailed explanations of the colors can be found in the Color Ninjutsu technique of the clan. As a general overview, the color red corresponds to high energy explosions that produce no heat but are essentially quick bursts of energy that produce a force equivalent to that of an exploding tag, orange globules solidify into fragile shock-absorbing barriers that shatter in one hit when a technique comes in contact with it, yellow corresponds to piercing damage that can range from the feeling of a pinprick to the feeling of a thick needle being inserted into the area in which yellow is painted, green solidifies into harder material suitable for temporary weapons and defensive blockades, blue produces weighted objects that become extremely fragile after it has come in contact with something once, indigo produces a dark gas that is highly effective in obstructing sight, and violet represents cutting damage. Colors painted on the target fade immediately after the technique has been activated, and only one color effect can be used at any time. Access to the colors is based solely on the user’s mastery of the clan’s Color Ninjutsu, which is given at a starting rank of D is trained in a similar way as a second specialization, though it serves as an independent branch of Ninjutsu and thus does not take up another specialization slot. This is trained and mastered up to S-rank in the same way other specializations are trained, and it must be trained independently from Ninjutsu – the word count still applies from D >>> S (D to C requires a count of 1500).

Color Ninjutsu: Those with the mutation are given access to seven colors (ROYGBIV) that each correspond to a specific power as a result of the way in which the specially processed chakra reacts with the specific wavelengths of radiation.

I won't bother to point out how that logic makes no sense.

As a general overview, the color red corresponds to high energy explosions that produce no heat but are essentially quick bursts of energy that produce a force equivalent to that of an exploding tag

Explosion Release. Yeahno.

orange globules solidify into fragile shock-absorbing barriers that shatter in one hit when a technique comes in contact with it

So...you make something orange that absorbs damage. What relevence does the colour of it have to do with it's ability to stop damage? This seems like a normal jutsu wiht a color.

yellow corresponds to piercing damage that can range from the feeling of a pinprick to the feeling of a thick needle being inserted into the area in which yellow is painted

So...You use a "Yellow" technique and someone wearing yellow bursts into pain? What?

green solidifies into harder material suitable for temporary weapons and defensive blockades

So...Steel Release? Yeahno.

blue produces weighted objects that become extremely fragile after it has come in contact with something once

What?

indigo produces a dark gas that is highly effective in obstructing sight

I assume the "Gas" part of it is non-toxic since poison is banned so: So...you make a smoke-screen. Anyone can do that, how is this a kekkei gankai, oh and how is it anything to do with this "colour manipulation"

violet represents cutting damage.

So...violet attacks cut things. Again, what does this have to do with colour?

Colors painted on the target fade immediately after the technique has been activated, and only one color effect can be used at any time.

So, we've gone to making physical globules to painting enemies?

Access to the colors is based solely on the user’s mastery of the clan’s Color Ninjutsu, which is given at a starting rank of D is trained in a similar way as a second specialization, though it serves as an independent branch of Ninjutsu and thus does not take up another specialization slot. This is trained and mastered up to S-rank in the same way other specializations are trained, and it must be trained independently from Ninjutsu – the word count still applies from D >>> S (D to C requires a count of 1500).

Yeah, no. How in god's name do you propose we track this? You cannot rank up your colours as though they're a specialization, it's madness of the highest calibre; especially since half of this stuff doesn't have anything kekkei-genkai about it except the appearance changing.

11Shigemitsu Clan  Empty Re: Shigemitsu Clan Tue Apr 02, 2013 12:29 am

Kita Akumasureiya

Kita Akumasureiya


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Eh, it's fine, I see how the clan just doesn't really fit in with the RP and the systems within the forum, and also the fact that the logic is just way out of the box. I'll just scrap the character and the clan and start from scratch. Can I make a member of Zenchi's CIA? She's going to have a different name though, so I might have to make another account for it unless administrators have the power to change usernames?

12Shigemitsu Clan  Empty Re: Shigemitsu Clan Tue Apr 02, 2013 10:54 am

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They do. Feel free to use the clan, and your name will be changed upon character approval.

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