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1Kimura, Suutei [Jutsu Update] Empty Kimura, Suutei [Jutsu Update] Tue Apr 02, 2019 7:09 pm

Suutei

Suutei


B-rank

Old Jutsu
Name: Fire Style: Nova Bomb (カトン新星爆弾 ~ Katon: Shinsei Bakudan)
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: A
Type: Offensive
Element: Katon
Range: 15 Meters || 30 Meter Radius
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration:  Instant
Cooldown: 3 Posts
Description: A single shot technique of a condensed chakra field, infused with Katon chakra.  The user leaps 8 meters into the air and is shrouded in an orange sparkling aura. This is the beginning of the preparation of the technique.  The user brings back their arm in a bent fashion and thrusts their arm forward.  Once the arm is cocked back the aura that shrouds the user is focused into the hand.  The result of this is a large shroud surrounding a flare shaped orb the size of a beach ball, traveling at 40 m/s, covering a distance of 15 meters (20 meters if an extra post of preparation is taken).  The orb travels in a linear projectile motion towards its target and upon contact the orb detonates creating a make-shift explosion, affecting a 30 meter radius dealing: 4th degree burns 5 meters from the detonation spots, 3rd degree burns 6-14 meters from the detonation spot, and 2nd degree burns 15-30 meters of the detonation spot.  People immediately suffer from bone breaking if they are 0-10 meters within range of the blast, and random fractures 11-20 meters.  This concussive force is generated by the shroud of chakra when that surrounds the orb after being thrown.
Animation:






Updated Jutsu
Name: Fire Release: Grave of Flames | 火遁・実火墓死 Katon - Mikaboshi
Origin: Custom
Rank: A
Type: Offensive
Element: Katon | Fire
Range: 100 Meters
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 1 Post
Cooldown:
Hand Seals: Snake →  Tiger → Dragon → Bird → Ox → Dog → Boar
Description: The user weaves their chakra into a softball sized singularity of fire. Once the user fires the singularity it scales 5m in size every 10m but maintains it's the speed of 20 m/s. The singularity occupies the same area while traveling, but a 10m radius of visibly radiating and glowing heat surrounds it, growing 10m for every 5m it travels. This radius causes Major 2nd degree burns on-contact. Upon detonation, the singularity causes Minor 4th Degree Burns to anyone within 40m of the blast zone, and enough force to fully break bones to anyone caught within 80m of the blast zone.


Old Jutsu
Name:  Tempest Glide (嵐の流れ ~ Arashi no Nagare)
Canon/Custom:  Custom
Rank:  C
Type:  Supplementary
Element:  Futon
Range:  Self
Specialty:  Taijutsu
Duration:  Maintainable
Cooldown:  Duration + 3
Description:  Suutei gathers his chakra allowing the wind nature to flow from within his body.  The chakra is slowly expelled from his body, as this process occurs his body begins to levitate 3 inches from the ground.  This is due to the wind chakra expelling from his body, like exhaust vents.  With the wind nature at his full disposal Suutei may perform acrobatic, and even mid-air maneuvers more efficiently.  Suutei is able to glide at speeds of up to 25 m/s, and ascend up to 10 meters into the air.  The jutsu also allows Suutei to hover while in air, up to a maximum height of 10 meters.  Suutei must pay 5 chakra for every post the jutsu is active.






Updated Jutsu
Name: Oya's Blessing (おやの 擁する ~ Oya no Yōsuru)
Origin: Custom
Rank: B-Rank
Type: Supplementary
Element: Fūton
Range: Self
Specialty: Nintaijutsu
Duration: 2 Post(s)
Cooldown:
Hand Seals: Tiger→Dog→Snake→Dragon→Ox→Bird→Monkey→Hare→Rat→Boar→Ram
Description: Channeling the Wind Nature chakra from within the user body acts as a ventilation or exhaust duct forcing them to levitate half a meter from the ground. Because the user is levitating above the ground, they are physically unaffected by terrain (chakra and non chakra) based ailments, aside from this the user is able to ride the waves of the wind. This makes the users Speed, two tiers higher than their Speed Stat, but decreases their endurance by two tiers due to the increased buoyancy. (i.e not using technique User's Speed is B-0 and Endurance is B-2, but while using the technique Speed becomes B-3 and Endurance becomes C-2)


Old Jutsu
Name:  Tempest's Barrage (攻撃の嵐 ~ Kōgeki no Arashi)
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: C-Rank
Type: Offensive
Element: Futon
Range: 0-5m
Specialty: Taijutsu
Duration: Instantaneous
Cooldown: 3 Posts
Description: Suutei charges at the target with intentions to strike and before landing the hit he leaves an afterimage of himself in front of the target.  Suutei then attacks from a different angle with a chance to leave a second after image if needed.  A maximum of 2 afterimages can be created. The force behind each attack depends on the level of strength Suutei has.  Each afterimage requires 15 chakra.






Updated Jutsu
Name: High Speed Movement (高速ムーブメント ~ Kōsoku Mūbumento)
Origin: Custom
Rank: C-Rank
Type: Supplementary
Element: -
Range: 0-5m
Specialty: Taijiutsu
Duration: 1 Post(s)
Cooldown:
Hand Seals: Movement or Voluntary Motion
Description: The user is able to move to any point within a 5m radius of themselves. The user does so by moving at 55 m/s in one single motion which is beyond their own capabilities, and traditional sight alone is unable to track this motion. When the user moves from point A to point B, an after image is left behind, and these afterimages are visible to someones traditional sight.



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2Kimura, Suutei [Jutsu Update] Empty Re: Kimura, Suutei [Jutsu Update] Thu Apr 25, 2019 9:50 am

Hika

Hika


D-rank
Suutei wrote:

Old Jutsu
Name: Fire Style: Nova Bomb (カトン新星爆弾 ~ Katon: Shinsei Bakudan)
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: A
Type: Offensive
Element: Katon
Range: 15 Meters || 30 Meter Radius
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration:  Instant
Cooldown: 3 Posts
Description: A single shot technique of a condensed chakra field, infused with Katon chakra.  The user leaps 8 meters into the air and is shrouded in a orange sparkling aura. This is the beginning of the preparation of the technique.  The user brings back their arm in a bent fashion and thrusts their arm forward.  Once the arm is cocked back the aura that shrouds the user is focused into the hand.  The result of this is a large shroud surrounding a flare shaped orb the size of a beach ball, travelling at 40 m/s, covering a distances of 15 meters (20 meters if a extra post of preparation is taken).  The orb travels in a linear projectile motion towards it's target and upon contact the orb detonates creating a make-shift explosion, affecting a 30 meter radius dealing: 4th degree burns 5 meters from the detonation spots, 3rd degree burns 6-14 meters from the detonation spot, and 2nd degree burns 15-30 meters of the detonation spot.  People immediately suffer from bone breaking if they are 0-10 meters within range of the blast, and random fractures 11-20 meters.  This concussive force is generated by the shroud of chakra when that surrounds the orb after being thrown.
Animation:






Updated Jutsu
Name: Fire Style: Nova Bomb (カトン新星爆弾 ~ Katon: Shinsei Bakudan)
Origin: Custom
Rank: A
Type: Offensive
Element: Katon | Fire
Range: 100 Meters
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 1 Post
Cooldown: 2 Posts
Hand Seals: Snake →  Tiger → Dragon → Bird → Ox → Dog → Boar
Description: The user weaves their chakra into a softball sized singularity of fire. Once the user fires the singularity it scales 5m in size every 10m maxing out at 50m in radius, but maintains it's speed of 20 m/s. Upon detonation, the singularity causes Minor 4th Degree Burns to anyone within a 15m radius of the blast zone, and enough force to fully break bones to anyone caught within 40m of the blast zone.


Old Jutsu
Name:  Tempest Glide (嵐の流れ ~ Arashi no Nagare)
Canon/Custom:  Custom
Rank:  C
Type:  Supplementary
Element:  Futon
Range:  Self
Specialty:  Taijutsu
Duration:  Maintainable
Cooldown:  Duration + 3
Description:  Suutei gathers his chakra allowing the wind nature to flow from within his body.  The chakra is slowly expelled from his body, as this process occurs his body begins to levitate 3 inches from the ground.  This is due to the wind chakra expelling from his body, like exhaust vents.  With the wind nature at his full disposal Suutei may perform acrobatic, and even mid air maneuvers more efficiently.  Suutei is able to glide at speeds of up to 25 m/s, and ascend up to 10 meters into the air.  The jutsu also allows Suutei to hover while in air, up to a maximum height of 10 meters.  Suutei must pay 5 chakra for every post the jutsu is active.






Updated Jutsu
Name: Oya's Blessing (おやの 擁する ~ Oya no Yōsuru)
Origin: Custom
Rank: C-Rank
Type: Utility
Element: Fūton
Range: Self
Specialty: Nintaijutsu
Duration: 8 Post(s)
Cooldown: 12 Post(s)
Hand Seals: Tiger→Dog→Snake→Dragon→Ox→Bird→Monkey→Hare→Rat→Boar→Ram
Description: Channeling the the Wind Nature chakra from within the user body acts as a ventilation or exhaust duct forcing them to levitate half a meter from the ground. Because the user is levitating above the ground, they are physically unaffected by terrain (chakra and non chakra) based ailments, aside from this the user is able to ride the waves of the wind. This makes the users Speed, two tiers higher than their Speed Stat. (i.e not using technique User's Speed is B-0, but while using the technique Speed becomes B-2)


Old Jutsu
Name:  Tempest's Barrage (攻撃の嵐 ~ Kōgeki no Arashi)
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: C-Rank
Type: Offensive
Element: Futon
Range: 0-5m
Specialty: Taijutsu
Duration: Instantaneous
Cooldown: 3 Posts
Description: Suutei charges at the target with intentions to strike and before landing the hit he leaves an after image of himself in front of the target.  Suutei then attacks from a different angle with a chance to leave a second after image if needed.  A maximum of 2 afterimages can be created. The force behind each attack depends on the level of strength Suutei has.  Each afterimage requires 15 chakra.






Updated Jutsu
Name: High Speed Movement (高速ムーブメント ~ Kōsoku Mūbumento)
Origin: Custom
Rank: C-Rank
Type: Utility-Stealth
Element: -
Range: 0-5m
Specialty: Taijiutsu
Duration: 4 Post(s)
Cooldown: 6 Post(s)
Hand Seals: Movement or Voluntary Motion
Description: The user is able to move to any point within a 5m radius of themselves. The user does so by moving at such a high speed beyond their own capabilities, traditional sight alone is unable to track their movements at this speed. This technique may be used in close quarters combat, or to dodge another jutsu that is within this jutsu's range. When the user moves from point A to point B, an after image is left behind, and these afterimages are visible to someones traditional sight.

Nova Bomb - Can you detail whether the singularity does damage as it expands? This seems to be the point, but the wording only implies that it deals the burns when it detonates. Additionally, the radius range maxes out at 50m - this can be increased to 60m to properly align with the mid-effect value. It looks like you're using the "Min value of 2 ranks below" drawback to give another max value, so this ends up fine.

Oya's Blessing - Half a meter isn't much at all, and there are many jutsu that still can catch you either by your movement or because .5m isn't high at all. However, I think it's more of a max effect on a B-rank jutsu rather than a mid effect (as it toes the line on Sustained Flight).

High Speed Movement - Needs a speed value. I can surmise that you're using the "invisibility only" stealth effect from C-rank and a utility effect to create the afterimages, but your movement still doesn't get to be undefined/instant.

3Kimura, Suutei [Jutsu Update] Empty Re: Kimura, Suutei [Jutsu Update] Fri Jun 28, 2019 2:23 pm

Eishun




C-rank
Suutei wrote:

Old Jutsu
Name: Fire Style: Nova Bomb (カトン新星爆弾 ~ Katon: Shinsei Bakudan)
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: A
Type: Offensive
Element: Katon
Range: 15 Meters || 30 Meter Radius
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration:  Instant
Cooldown: 3 Posts
Description: A single shot technique of a condensed chakra field, infused with Katon chakra.  The user leaps 8 meters into the air and is shrouded in a orange sparkling aura. This is the beginning of the preparation of the technique.  The user brings back their arm in a bent fashion and thrusts their arm forward.  Once the arm is cocked back the aura that shrouds the user is focused into the hand.  The result of this is a large shroud surrounding a flare shaped orb the size of a beach ball, travelling at 40 m/s, covering a distances of 15 meters (20 meters if a extra post of preparation is taken).  The orb travels in a linear projectile motion towards it's target and upon contact the orb detonates creating a make-shift explosion, affecting a 30 meter radius dealing: 4th degree burns 5 meters from the detonation spots, 3rd degree burns 6-14 meters from the detonation spot, and 2nd degree burns 15-30 meters of the detonation spot.  People immediately suffer from bone breaking if they are 0-10 meters within range of the blast, and random fractures 11-20 meters.  This concussive force is generated by the shroud of chakra when that surrounds the orb after being thrown.
Animation:






Updated Jutsu
Name: Fire Release: Grave of Flames | 火遁・実火墓死 Katon - Mikaboshi
Origin: Custom
Rank: A
Type: Offensive
Element: Katon | Fire
Range: 100 Meters
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 1 Post
Cooldown: 2 Posts
Hand Seals: Snake →  Tiger → Dragon → Bird → Ox → Dog → Boar
Description: The user weaves their chakra into a softball sized singularity of fire. Once the user fires the singularity it scales 5m in size every 10m maxing out at 50m in radius, but maintains it's speed of 20 m/s. The singularity occupies the same area while traveling, but a 10m radius of visibly radiating and glowing heat surrounds it, growing 10m for every 5m it travels, to a maximum radius of 50m. This radius causes Major 2nd degree burns on-contact. Upon detonation, the singularity causes Minor 4th Degree Burns to anyone within 40m of the blast zone, and enough force to fully break bones to anyone caught within 80m of the blast zone.


Old Jutsu
Name:  Tempest Glide (嵐の流れ ~ Arashi no Nagare)
Canon/Custom:  Custom
Rank:  C
Type:  Supplementary
Element:  Futon
Range:  Self
Specialty:  Taijutsu
Duration:  Maintainable
Cooldown:  Duration + 3
Description:  Suutei gathers his chakra allowing the wind nature to flow from within his body.  The chakra is slowly expelled from his body, as this process occurs his body begins to levitate 3 inches from the ground.  This is due to the wind chakra expelling from his body, like exhaust vents.  With the wind nature at his full disposal Suutei may perform acrobatic, and even mid air maneuvers more efficiently.  Suutei is able to glide at speeds of up to 25 m/s, and ascend up to 10 meters into the air.  The jutsu also allows Suutei to hover while in air, up to a maximum height of 10 meters.  Suutei must pay 5 chakra for every post the jutsu is active.






Updated Jutsu
Name: Oya's Blessing (おやの 擁する ~ Oya no Yōsuru)
Origin: Custom
Rank: B-Rank
Type: Utility
Element: Fūton
Range: Self
Specialty: Nintaijutsu
Duration: 2 Post(s)
Cooldown: 4 Post(s)
Hand Seals: Tiger→Dog→Snake→Dragon→Ox→Bird→Monkey→Hare→Rat→Boar→Ram
Description: Channeling the the Wind Nature chakra from within the user body acts as a ventilation or exhaust duct forcing them to levitate half a meter from the ground. Because the user is levitating above the ground, they are physically unaffected by terrain (chakra and non chakra) based ailments, aside from this the user is able to ride the waves of the wind. This makes the users Speed, two tiers higher than their Speed Stat, but decreases their endurance by two tiers due to the increased buoyancy. (i.e not using technique User's Speed is B-0 and Endurance is B-2, but while using the technique Speed becomes B-3 and Endurance becomes C-2)


Old Jutsu
Name:  Tempest's Barrage (攻撃の嵐 ~ Kōgeki no Arashi)
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: C-Rank
Type: Offensive
Element: Futon
Range: 0-5m
Specialty: Taijutsu
Duration: Instantaneous
Cooldown: 3 Posts
Description: Suutei charges at the target with intentions to strike and before landing the hit he leaves an after image of himself in front of the target.  Suutei then attacks from a different angle with a chance to leave a second after image if needed.  A maximum of 2 afterimages can be created. The force behind each attack depends on the level of strength Suutei has.  Each afterimage requires 15 chakra.






Updated Jutsu
Name: High Speed Movement (高速ムーブメント ~ Kōsoku Mūbumento)
Origin: Custom
Rank: C-Rank
Type: Utility-Stealth
Element: -
Range: 0-5m
Specialty: Taijiutsu
Duration: 1 Post(s)
Cooldown: 2 Post(s)
Hand Seals: Movement or Voluntary Motion
Description: The user is able to move to any point within a 5m radius of themselves. The user does so by moving at 55 m/s in one single motion which is beyond their own capabilities, and traditional sight alone is unable to track this motion. When the user moves from point A to point B, an after image is left behind, and these afterimages are visible to someones traditional sight.

Grave of Flames: In regards to the ‘50 radius’, please use the values listed in the jutsu guidelines. Everything else seems fine.

Oya's Blessing: Change ‘Utility’ to “Supplementary”. Otherwise this is fine

High Speed Movement:
-Change ‘Utility’ to ‘Supplementary’.
-’Movement’ is not an activation, it needs to be a specific type.

Everything: remove the cooldown posts

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