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1Daremo[Jutsu Update] Empty Daremo[Jutsu Update] Fri Jan 25, 2019 4:07 pm

Daremo




S-rank
Numbing Agent :

Aggressive Pathogen:

Extremophile Mimicry:


Mortal’s Enverate:


Pestilence Blessing:




Spectre of the Plague:



Faux Avatar of the Diseased God:



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2Daremo[Jutsu Update] Empty Re: Daremo[Jutsu Update] Fri Mar 29, 2019 11:55 pm

Hika

Hika


D-rank
Daremo wrote:
Numbing Agent :

Aggressive Pathogen:

Extremophile Mimicry:

Feast of the Jikininki :

Mortal’s Enverate:

Defense of the God:

Epidemic Eradicator Virus:

Needle Hell:

Pestilence Blessing:

Suppression Medical Field:

Dormant Horror:

Numbing Agent needs to be B-rank or higher - note tht on the "Effects Per Rank" list, replicating SCs starts at that rank.

Accelerating Pathogen needs a duration in the appropriate field. Additionally, there should be a limit to how many 'pathogen' techniques this can accelerate in a given target before its effects end.

Extremophile Mimicry is approved, unless you wanted this to protect against jutsu-based asphyxiation. (In that case, it would need values for defending against suffocation.)

For Feast of the Jikiniki, I would like you to choose one form for the Air spreading to manifest. It already has three different methods of transmission. Touch method needs to specify that the jutsu cannot activate as stated after the duration has elapsed.

On Mortal's Enervate, do these actions compound only on a single location, or can they occur and stack simultaneously in different areas? How do you/the target determine what area is affected when the target uses chakra? Actually, that doesn't make sense given the descriptor of the jutsu, please clarify how activating jutsu/item abilities would stress the bones.

Stalwart is Approved.

Epidemic Eradicator Virus does two things - the inverse of the full +1 jutsu boost normally bestowed at A-rank, as well as a cleanse and (I think) a damage-heal. I recommend just using defensive values to negate effects; otherwise, please give a description as to how reducing the rank of a paralysis/etc technique would affect it.

Sharp Hair Spear: Needle Hell is Approved.

I'm not sure how I feel about the Blight's Curse. I appreciate the thematics of jutsu archetypes, but names can be applied to anything. You might consider a small aside detailing what types of techniques this affects - such as 'techniques with the disease/pathogen descriptor that deal necrosis damage' - instead of or in addition to the self-imposed name restriction.

Suppression Medical Field is Approved.

Dormant Terror is Approved.

3Daremo[Jutsu Update] Empty Re: Daremo[Jutsu Update] Thu Apr 25, 2019 9:42 pm

Hika

Hika


D-rank
Daremo wrote:
Numbing Agent :

Aggressive Pathogen:

Extremophile Mimicry:

Feast of the Jikininki :

Mortal’s Enverate:



Epidemic Eradicator Virus:

Pestilence Blessing:




Spectre of the Plague:



Faux Avatar of the Diseased God:


Numbing Agent is approved.

Aggressive Pathogen is approved.

Extremophile Mimicry is approved.

Feast of the Jikiniki is approved.

Mortal's Enervate is approved.

Epidemic Eradicator Virus is approved. (Keep in mind that external immobilization, such as binding, won't be affected here.)

Blight's Curse - "Additionally, the chakra corrupts the partner jutsu giving none ‘necrotic’ techniques an additional effect of causing major 1st-degree necrotic tissue damage, along with causing in a 2.5cm radius for two posts."

Causing what in the radius?

Merging with Demonic Vapors - Stealth max effect, plus a weird variable-range Sensory effect? This is difficult to measure. Additionally, you say you can take on the properties of any miasma/fog jutsu of yours that you come into contact with; does this persist after you break contact with your miasma?

Faux Avatar of the Diseased God: You're not spending any more chakra than any other S-rank. Why is there a debuff associated with viewing it using a sensory jutsu?

The Range value says 75, but the Description says 100.

This technique has max radius range, max duration, mid damage scaling to max, buffing of other jutsu cast by the user, and that Perception debuff.

This jutsu isn't even a Senjutsu. You should have 2 max values here, 3 if it's a Senjutsu.

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