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1Kamizuru Clan Empty Kamizuru Clan Sun Jan 26, 2014 10:03 pm

Wolfgang

Wolfgang


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Symbol: Kamizuru Clan Th?id=H.4717554675615994&pid=15


Clan: Kamizuru

Kekkei Genkai: Honey Bee Style

Elements: Any though Only one

Specialization: Ninjutsu/ Summoning

Location: Iwagakure

Clan History: Many many years ago they attempted to lead an invasion force into Konohagakure, only to be repelled and largely killed by the more experienced Aburame clan. They had lost so badly that they lost their status and respect in the village and their numbers began to fall to the few remaining members left. Apparently, the First Tsuchikage was one of its members.
Throughout the years the members of this clan had brought their numbers up but had barely gotten their name known at much as it used too.

Kekkei Genkai Description: The members of this clan are able to summon and command bees and wasps, reminiscent of the Konoha Aburame clan, though the bees are not housed within their body and have to be summoned, though not in the usual fashion for the small bees.
They can also generate honey and bees wax or use their bees to generate it.
The members of this clan do not use the generic hand seals used for the Summoning Technique. Instead, they stick their right thumb into the palm of their left hand.

Drawbacks: Members of this clan cannot learn Katon or Raiton.
Any jutsu that are not Bee or Wasp based take 10% more word count then they normally would.

Members: None at the moment.

KKG jutsu:



Last edited by Wolfgang on Wed May 07, 2014 10:05 am; edited 2 times in total

2Kamizuru Clan Empty Re: Kamizuru Clan Wed Jan 29, 2014 4:41 pm

Wolfgang

Wolfgang


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Bump

3Kamizuru Clan Empty Re: Kamizuru Clan Fri Jan 31, 2014 9:53 pm

Wolfgang

Wolfgang


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Bump

4Kamizuru Clan Empty Re: Kamizuru Clan Mon Feb 03, 2014 7:07 pm

Gi

Gi


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the KKG description and what not are good.
As for jutsu: Your speeds are more or less all a bit high for the rank boundries outlined in the jutsu guidlines, to the point where at some levels you are nearly doubled the speed, please be so kind as to bring thes numbers more in line. Cut back on the number of bees summoned at lower ranks. 10 bees, which are already agile and self guding, are going to be nearly impossibly to dodge already. having a swarm of them is a bit over kill for a D rank.

For the honney jutsu. At C rank what does the honney actually do, besides require C rank and a post to get off, and is annoying? Any reduction to speed, or reflexts or anything?
Also in general does the honney stack from multiple bees, and how?

For the last jutsu: yes they are weaker than a normal B rank, but you are also going to be launching a great deal of stingers at once, probly around 15 if not more. The speed range should be more in the 70s than 80s.

You are more than welcome to get a second opinion on these jutsu. Summoning isn't my forte

5Kamizuru Clan Empty Re: Kamizuru Clan Mon Feb 03, 2014 7:20 pm

Wolfgang

Wolfgang


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Fixed it, and i assumed since the bees are normal bee sized that D rank summon more then one so i clicked each on down on numbr and speed

6Kamizuru Clan Empty Re: Kamizuru Clan Wed Feb 05, 2014 7:48 pm

Gi

Gi


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approved

7Kamizuru Clan Empty Re: Kamizuru Clan Tue May 06, 2014 7:19 pm

Keiko

Keiko


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Requesting edits made to the clan jutsu for revamp.

Honey Bee Summoning: To be honest, three times the duration is quite insane for the cooldown. This can be decreased to twice the duration.

Kamizuru Clan wrote: though normal taijutsu can not hit them hard enough to actually do damage to them due to their size and weight.

^ Clarify this. What is it about the size and weight that makes it hard to do damage? Also specify that the speeds you've given are how fast the bees can fight and decrease the speeds to 10 m/s, 20 m/s, 30 m/s, 40 m/s, 50 m/s respective to rank.

Bee Honey Generation: Change the decrease to reaction time according to the new rules, only integers, no 0.5s. Also specify that the infusing of honey must be done in the same post that the bees are created, assuming that these bees are created by another technique.

Thousand Bee Stings Technique: Decrease the speed of the stingers to 50 m/s.

8Kamizuru Clan Empty Re: Kamizuru Clan Wed May 07, 2014 10:05 am

Wolfgang

Wolfgang


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I belive i have fixed the jutsu

9Kamizuru Clan Empty Re: Kamizuru Clan Mon May 12, 2014 6:34 pm

Keiko

Keiko


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Bee Honey Generation: There's a decimal point on your -1 to reaction time for the C rank, please remove that. C rank needs a drawback if you're going to cause a -1. Additionally, for both ranks, having the required strength should be enough to move their limbs, and shouldn't be limited to only a certain number of bees.

10Kamizuru Clan Empty Re: Kamizuru Clan Mon May 12, 2014 7:55 pm

Wolfgang

Wolfgang


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Could you explain what i need to change, XD i misunderstand

11Kamizuru Clan Empty Re: Kamizuru Clan Wed May 14, 2014 8:34 pm

Noriko

Noriko


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Bee Honey Generation: There's a decimal point on your -1 to reaction time for the C rank, please remove that. <---Exactly what it says. On one of your "-1"s, it is a "-.1" and that is all.

C rank needs a drawback if you're going to cause a -1. <---you cannot cause a 1-tier debuff at C-rank unless the jutsu has some sort of drawback.

Additionally, for both ranks, having the required strength should be enough to move their limbs,<---She's saying the 1 post to take off should be nixed.

and shouldn't be limited to only a certain number of bees.<---I think she misunderstood, as I think you meant you can only use this technique on 2 bees (rather than having the entire bee colony explode into honey on someone).

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