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1Tenkai Empty Tenkai Mon Apr 10, 2017 4:18 pm

Anon Brier

Anon Brier


D-rank
Symbol:Tenkai 21cinwj


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Clan Name: Tenkai
Location: Scattered
Specialization: Ninjutsu
Elements: Any[Primary will determine aura color]


Tenkai HhU72Pp
Clan History: Very little is known about Tenkai, as much of their history has been wiped from the slate. They were originally a powerful clan of 'Kings' hailing from Konohagakure no Sato and lived in Harmony with remnants of the Uchiha and Senju clans, but kept themselves from being a prominent power in Konoha for their own ease. After the fourth great ninja war many of the clan members were lost in the battles and the rest scattered to the four winds, becoming more mysterious and reclusive than ever.
Members:None


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Kekkei Genkai Name: Aura of Regicide
Kekkei Genkai Description:The Aura of Regicide is the name given to the Tenkai Clans' notable Kekkei Genkai, named thus due to reputation claiming that theirs was the power required to topple kings. The KKG in effect is fascinating, members of the clan are capable of expanding their spirit chakra beyond their body as a translucent coloured aura based on their primary element. Techniques using this kkg control their aura as either an ethereal or physical force with the use of their jutsu. Additionally, allies at the will of the user can be bestowed with a limited variant of the Aura of Regicide and its effect for a short time, making it one of the few abilities in the natural world that can be temporarily bestowed upon others.

Aura Effects:


  • The Art of Bestowal: Bestowal, is, in effect, the act of giving an ally a crystallized piece of the user's soul which can project a 1m radii aura (+1 meter radii per rank above Genin) that is deducted from the users' 'core' aura at the cost of 25 charka. The effect lasts for up to 5 posts or until the crystal is broken, in which the separated soul returns to the Tenkai clan member it belongs to. The ninja who has the crystal bestowed on them is able to use aura-techniques from the clan members' jutsu list as long as they are bestowed with the crystal, as long as the ability they attempt to use has an effect radii equal to or smaller than the amount of aura they control. The beauty of the art of bestowal, is that the soul acts largely on its own living instinct, as it is a living fragment of the clan members spirit and not the person it is given to. This allows them to temporarily tap into their souls' skill set and empower themselves. The target who has the aura bestowed upon them has two options for knowing which jutsu can be used. First: They can have been told or taught by the Tenkai beforehand and picture the jutsu in their mind, using the aura to shape it as they will. Second: they can spend 15 of their own chakra into the crystal to have the information transmitted to them via soul link. This is temporary, however and they will not remember upon losing the aura.

  • Aura Control: Those who are bestowed with an Aura get a +1 tier boost to their reaction time stat so long as they control it.


Drawbacks: While the Tenkai clan benefits much from the use of their aura, expressing their spirit externally is an art that is intrinsically linked with flowing and controlling their spirit chakra external to the user's body. To this end it 'requires' ninjutsu in order to use effectively, as well as an uninterrupted flow of their own chakra. To this end, should the user be hit with Genjutsu, Medical Ninjutsu or another technique which is able to interfere with or alter the flow of the user's chakra, the flow of their spirit can be temporarily negated, requiring the removal of the genjutsu or seal and then a single post in order to recover to the point the clan member can 're-summon' their aura.


  • Environmental Vulnerability: While bestowed with or actively using an aura, the area the ninja is in becomes pre-disposed to the elemental effect of that aura. This effect in turn offers a 'path of least resistance' to techniques of opposing elements. While an aura is active on the clan member or any beneficiary, techniques which would be good against the elemental nature of the aura they are using, deal an additional rank of damage to the ninja using the aura.

  • Thinly Spread As much of the chakra of the Tenkai clan is external to their body, unable to be used as fuel for their chakra system, they receive a permanent reduction of 20 chakra from their chakra pool, much like they have had a limb removed.



Last edited by Anon Brier on Sat Apr 15, 2017 1:31 am; edited 3 times in total

2Tenkai Empty Re: Tenkai Tue Apr 11, 2017 9:57 pm

Sol

Sol


D-rank
These auras either are direct buffs to jutsu (Wind/Earth), have an auxiliary effect that is essentially a jutsu (Water), or don't seemingly bring anything special to the Kekkei Genkai (Fire/Lightning).

I recommend you take another look at your abilities and think about what common thread they should apply to. Suiton has a passive aura, but Earth grants debuffs and Wind gets extra damage. And then...Katon and Raiton really don't get anything tangible.

I actually almost missed the fact that it costs chakra. Please add values for its use.

That said, I really, really like the 'bestow' idea. However, the target should at least need to have some knowledge of what kinds of jutsu the Tenkai has. Even if the shard can execute the jutsu for them, what if they have no idea what techniques it is capable of using?

3Tenkai Empty Re: Tenkai Tue Apr 11, 2017 10:10 pm

Anon Brier

Anon Brier


D-rank
Editted everything, the aura itself is a passive thing, and the clan members have 20 less chakra for it. To weaponize it in jutsu would cost chakra relative to the jutsu. So D-Rank would be the cost for a D-Rank and so on.

4Tenkai Empty Re: Tenkai Wed Apr 12, 2017 12:17 am

Sol

Sol


D-rank
The KKG description describes the aura as a 'maintainable jutsu', which is what confused me as to its chakra cost. Please remove this reference to evade further misunderstanding.~

Your Bestowal is A-OK.

Katon's looking good! Flavor effect while in the aura, with appreciable but non-compounding damage dealt on direct, extended contact with the aura-bearer's body...

Suiton needs some clarification; if it manifests as a mist, why are you able to see through it? (Even a user of Kirigakure no Jutsu is subject to their own technique's implications, for example.)

Raiton's paralysis is...vague? 'Coming into contact' with what? The aura, or the aura-bearer physically? I'm not a huge fan of its inability to be surmounted at so low a rank, and doubly so as an aura, compounded by the fact that you don't need to maintain it with chakra.

Doton, how does this trigger? You say 'impacted', so this seems to only apply if it's weaponized and connects with the target. (Please rephrase if this is not the case.) In addition, tacking on a -1/2/3 for free on every jutsu you use with this aura is a lot. Consider a B-rank jutsu; it costs 20 chakra to use a -2 as a standalone technique. You can see where this saves a ton of chakra overall.

Fuuton is a bit like the above, though less so. It happens immediately on contact with the aura, which is much more potent than the Fire aura, which requires direct contact for an entire post to damage.

Please refer to the Jutsu Rules' ranges for your lower ranks.

5Tenkai Empty Re: Tenkai Wed Apr 12, 2017 12:41 am

Anon Brier

Anon Brier


D-rank
There, editted and reworded. Should be good now.

6Tenkai Empty Re: Tenkai Fri Apr 14, 2017 4:55 pm

Sol

Sol


D-rank
If the paralysis is going to stay, the chakra cost needs to scale with the effectiveness. The auto-scaling Endurance floor for a flat 10 chakra is a pretty hefty thing, no? (That said, it should scale with your ninja rank with a flat tier, rather than with what seems to be your Endurance tier?) Also, is it "a bit of" immunity or actual immunity? To what extent does a victim resist this after the first time?

Overall, I'd reconsider putting something as powerful as paralysis on a single element given the others' more passive status. Debuffing the opponent's RT while in range might be a good alternative.

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For Water, how far ahead of you does the mist clear out when you move?

Wind, you don't specify whether it's contact with the Aura or contact with the person who has the aura.

7Tenkai Empty Re: Tenkai Sat Apr 15, 2017 1:31 am

Anon Brier

Anon Brier


D-rank
Completely rewrote the effects of Lightning and made edits to the other two.

8Tenkai Empty Re: Tenkai Mon Apr 17, 2017 2:28 pm

Sol

Sol


D-rank
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