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1Myōsome. Empty Myōsome. Sat Oct 29, 2016 1:23 am

Gen

Gen


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Myōsome Clan: 妙染一族, Myōsome Ichizoku
Location: Scattered (Wanderer Only); can never join Iwa or Kiri.
Specialization: Ninjutsu.
Elements: None.


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Clan History: This Bloodline began first as a Hiden, practiced in its imperfect form by a loosely-bound group of people: otherwise non-notable ninja who shared a desire to know more about the secrets of chakra. As with all things, however, the desire for knowledge slowly transformed into a lust for power. Their development of various techniques was upset by the Second Shinobi World War, although the heavy and widespread conflict of the Third served as a perfect time for the gang to collect test subjects and further their research into the workings of their new - and forbidden - jutsu. Three months after the Third Shinobi War ended, the stronghold they had managed to keep until then was destroyed by the rubble dislodged in the Tragedy of Yosuga Pass; before this, they were humble neutral residents of the border between Earth Country and Water Country.

Nearly a decade passed, and one of their ilk had his Kekkei Genkai stripped from him, though the manifestation was not as potent as a natural user of the style, even if the thief's chakra certainly made his techniques impressive. In the centuries that followed, however, they branched out, staying hidden underground. Few lived to see their techniques and tell the tale, and even those have been lost to history's weave.

Struggling out of the raging sea of time, their blood is fortified. It's filled with hate, with resentment. With longing.

Members: Hiruko (Stolen Kekkei Genkai)


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Kekkei Genkai: Myōsome. NRfWg3r Advanced Chakra Control, Dark Release ⌠高度チャクラ制・冥遁, Kōdo Chakra-Sei: Meiton

Kekkei Genkai Description: Dark Release is an outdated misnomer from earlier times, as it has been discovered that it is not an advanced nature transformation. Rather, it is pure control over mental and physical energies; as such, having "KKG" in the Specialization section of a jutsu is enough to distinguish a technique as using Meiton.

A user of 'Dark Release' can exert much more acute control over their own chakra than those without, making exceedingly complex jutsu even at low ranks. This strong form of chakra control can even control others' chakra using jutsu, either in the form of controlling their jutsu or directly siphoning chakra. Supplementary jutsu that control chakra, when used by a Myōsome, ignore bonuses to interaction, such as from Senjutsu. (This negates both the Myōsome and the opponent's bonuses to interaction. Jutsu and effects that grant a full +1 rank in power are not negated, and this does not ignore elemental interaction.)

Dark Release requires users have a mark on their palm, as this is the primary entrance to the secondary chakra pool. Concentrated Tenketsu form this mark, giving those with it a total of 403 rather than 361; Each Meiton marking may be different, but always consist of two identical shapes overlapping in some fashion. Jutsu that require hand seals allow the caster to absorb chakra through the mouth, as well.

Chakra Absorption:
Dark Chakra Pool:

Lambent Darkness: A wielder of Dark Release will only fall unconscious from chakra exhaustion when their normal reserves are below 10 and their Dark Chakra is below 20.

Forays by Limitation: Being devoid of elements and thus never actually needing to devote time to learning how to use them, those of this clan have extra time to learn new disciplines and further their knowledge of the ones they possess.

Myōsome start with three Specializations, and may train their Quaternary to S-rank, for 6000 and 9000 words respectively.

Drawbacks:

  • Due to their constant absorption of others' elements, over time it warped their own ability to create Nature Transformation. Myōsome do not start with, nor can they ever learn, an element. This does not stop them from using others' via stolen chakra, it simply means they cannot generate the change in nature by themselves. However, this also means they cannot steal Advanced Elements made of two other elements, because they cannot recombine them into one again.

  • Myōsome start out not being able to control chakra very well at all, not just that of others. Their tertiary spec starts at D-rank, with their secondary and primary at C and A-rank, respectively.

  • The Dark Chakra pool starts every thread empty, and must be filled manually by absorbing chakra. A Myōsome has the following limits to their Dark chakra pool:

    D-rank - 20 chakra
    C-rank - 30 chakra
    B-rank - 40 chakra
    A/S-rank - 50 chakra
    SS-rank - 60 chakra

    If more chakra is absorbed than one's Dark Chakra pool can hold, even 5 more, it ruptures, causing moderate internal bleeding. If the entire pool was filled at once, it instead causes severe hemorrhaging. After the Dark Chakra pool ruptures, techniques that absorb chakra will fail for the rest of the thread.

  • Absorbing a Senjutsu technique deals damage to the Myōsome of the technique's rank -2, which is constrained to the absorption area; through the hand seal would deal damage to the arm's muscles, and through the mouth would injure one's organs. If one possesses Senjutsu, this drawback is negated.

  • Due to their inclination to absorb it so easily with their Meiton, Myōsome have less endurance towards Ninjutsu, taking 1 rank higher in damage from opponents' attacks that primarily use Ninjutsu as their offense. (Offensive techniques that use Ninjutsu for support, such as Crescent Moon Dance or a speed boost, do not gain this advantage.)



Last edited by Gen on Sun Nov 27, 2016 9:20 am; edited 12 times in total

2Myōsome. Empty Re: Myōsome. Tue Nov 08, 2016 10:11 pm

Ayakashi

Ayakashi


S-rank
You have a LOT of work to do here.

You have a lot of fluff general restructuring that you need to do throughout the app, you should keep your points simple, brief and easily understood throughout, as the app is a little hard to follow, you have a good layout sure, but what's in it is a little hard to digest.

As for that chakra pool for dark chakra, no, i remember telling you this on the earlier app, it needs to be a LOT lower. Used for additional costs, to pump up specific jutsu, sure, but not 180 extra chakra at SS rank. This pool should not be comparable to a seijutsu pet. not even a little.

You're also super thick on drawbacks, you only need drawbacks at a ratio of 1:1.

3Myōsome. Empty Re: Myōsome. Tue Nov 08, 2016 10:51 pm

Gen

Gen


D-rank
tried streamlining some descriptions.

lowered the dark chakra pool maximum counts. please keep in mind that this must be filled manually by casting jutsu to absorb chakra; it's not like it's a ready-resource, such as a seijutsu pet's chakra pool.

i wasn't the one who wanted to add all of them in the first place; however, please reiterate what's-balancing-what so i don't accidentally remove too many drawbacks.

thank you for the help in getting this going again.~

4Myōsome. Empty Re: Myōsome. Wed Nov 16, 2016 3:34 am

Ayakashi

Ayakashi


S-rank
" This pool should not be comparable to a seijutsu pet. not even a little. " - me. The upper end of this technique should be like, 50/60, not 100/180. Remembering that you can refill it. it doesn't need to be large, also, if its too big, that drawback of it overfilling, functionally never matters.

"People of this lineage tend to be rather....Eccentric, that word taken as it will be. They can begin with a fourth positive Special Characteristic, but must balance it with two negative SCs instead of one." -no, you have enough stuff.

Rest is okay-ish

5Myōsome. Empty Re: Myōsome. Wed Nov 16, 2016 4:16 am

Gen

Gen


D-rank
I've removed the SC drawback, which seemed to be the least potent of all of them, in the absence of a recommendation as requested above.

Nerfed the chakra pools, and removed Eccentric~

6Myōsome. Empty Re: Myōsome. Thu Nov 24, 2016 6:02 am

Ayakashi

Ayakashi


S-rank
50/60 =/= 70.

And here my job ends, please contact Jean/ bokuden for any approval on this clan, as it is canon and it is not within my power to approve. :)

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