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1Izumo Clan[WIP] Empty Izumo Clan[WIP] Sat Jul 23, 2016 2:57 pm

Seiji

Seiji


D-rank
Symbol: Izumo Clan[WIP] Izumo_10


Clan: Izumo

Kekkei Genkai: Dojutsu: Kinkumogan (Golden Cloud Eye)/Ninjutsu: Fudansu (Wind Dance)

Elements: Wind

Specialization: Ninjutsu

Location: Kumogakure

Clan History:  Izumo is one of the older clans of Kumogakure. Once very prominent but have since fallen away into almost complete obscurity. They were known best for their blood line Dojutsu which turns the users iris a golden color. Throughout the history of Kumogakure the Izumo clan was the backbone for their information gathering divisions. Many of the Izumo family had been known to lose their mind or simply snap in their older ages. Some members, as they felt their mind caving to stress would sometimes leave the village for the safety of themselves and their family. Those who stayed thinking they were stronger than the sickness of their mind usually broke down at inopportune times.  
After the 2nd great ninja war the Izumo clan suffered a great lose as the clan’s most valuable scrolls were destroyed during a raid on their home. Within these scrolls was contained the knowledge of how to unlock, use, and master the Kinkumogan. Sadly over the many years that followed the Kinkumogan manifested less and less within the new generations until it was almost lost completely. Now the clan has but a handful of members capable of using the Dojustu and even less of them have been able to use it to its full potential. This has caused many of the clan members to take up mundane jobs just to help bring in money.
Currently the clan warrants little to no respect from its shinobi counterparts. Izumo has never been known for strong offensive techniques and since their decline they have lost the only skill that gained them any attention from the stronger families. They specialize in I form of wind release that helps them move quicker and with more agility but even that has little use in combat as it was designed to help with infiltration.
The Izumo clan is driven now more than ever to build themselves back up to the forefront of Kumogakure society. They intend to become the shinobi they once were, not allowing their past or current status to slow them down.

Kekkei Genkai Description: Kinkomugan – this Dojutsu in its basic form turns the user’s eyes golden leaving only a small dark pupil in the middle. It can advance to the Kodai Kinkumogan if the user masters the first form. To advance the character must have 3,000 Ryo, be Special Jounin, and must then make a 3,000 word training post. Kodai Kinkumogan changes the eye further appearing as the pupil becoming a slowly spinning whirlpool.
Kinkomugan (Rank C -10chakra per turn)
• With this active the user can gather information on techniques used against them more accurately. This information can be used to identify the same technique as it is used later, by the same or other shinobi. This information can also be taught to other shinobi to help them defend against the technique.
• The user can look quickly into a situation and see most details almost as if time was slowed while he was gathering information, still the requirement of the character to use this knowledge as best they can. This counts as a +2 tier perception.
Kodai Kinkomugan (Rank A -15chakra per turn)
• With this form active the user can see through low level Genjutsu by allowing the user to see the small details that show it as an illusion. This only works to break out of Genjutsus lower rank then the character using the Kinkomugan. Any Genjutsu same rank or higher are unaffected by this Dojutsu.
• The user memorizes anything they see while this form is active as if it were a photograph or video recording. This may be recalled as needed to share the information for strategy. These memories cannot be forgotten willingly. This can cause the user high levels of stress from memorizing horrible or disturbing events and images. This counts as an additional +2 tier perception.

Drawbacks:
• The Izumo clan members are unable to learn a Fourth element
• The Izumo clan are not good at Genjutsu and as such their Genjutsus are always counted 1 tier higher for chakra cost
• The Izumo clan are not physically strong

Members:

Kekkei Genkai Jutsu:
Name: Fudansu
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: D
Type: Supplementary
Element: Wind Release
Range: Self
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 1 post to create, lasts until stopped
Cooldown: 2 posts after stopping
Description:technique allows the user to force wind to move around them more easily as if making them more aero dynamic. It can also be used to push air around their feet and body to create a softer landing and thus less noise. The first use is most often used to allow the user to move faster in one direction but makes it harder to turn during this as the pressure of the air moving around them creates much resistance. This would count as a +1 tier speed and -1 tier reaction time. The second use forces air to react much like a pillow and keeping the user from hitting the ground or other objects at high rates of speed. This second use is for the most part the break system for the first part but it also serves to quiet the user’s footsteps and landing.



Last edited by Seiji on Thu Jul 28, 2016 6:45 pm; edited 1 time in total

2Izumo Clan[WIP] Empty Re: Izumo Clan[WIP] Thu Jul 28, 2016 6:07 am

Fukai

Fukai


D-rank
Hiya

KKG:

Ok so we've gotta be very careful not to give grounds for metagaming with this ability. This means that the mechanics of your ability needs to be expanded on greatly.
> Make an exhaustive list of what information can be taken via kinkomugan
> Explain how this information is obtained and give an example
We want to avoid a situation where a target begins to wiggle his pinky and you can just click your fingers and 'know' whatever you want to know. As such, 
> Explain that the properties of the jutsu must have been appropriately displayed before they can be picked up by the doujutsu.

"...To advance the character must have 3,000 Ryo"
is this ryo paid?

"This information can be used to identify the same technique as it is used later"
Suitable evidence for justification should be given in a pvp fight,
> Add in that a link needs to be provided to where the jutsu was first seen if this part of the ability is used against another user.

"This counts as a +2 tier perception."
> I would like this lowered to +1 tier, the kodai version to +2
+2 and +4 is too much
> Add in that these bonuses are for visual cues.

"see through low level Genjutsu by allowing the user to see the small details"
Most genjutsu will have a perception check which will require a perception level that a rank higher can get, so this ability will end up being kinda redundant. You can bump this up so that: 
> you can see these details for jutsu 1 rank above the user.
But conversely, 
> I want these details limited to those (small details only) in the perception check itself or some other small and appropriate detail if the check isn't present in the jutsu.
Needless to say,
> this ability goes for visual genjutsu only.


Drawbacks

You need a lot more here. Atm you have one weak drawback (element one) and the other two don't really have any bearing at all.

"The Izumo clan are not physically strong"
What does this actually mean when it comes to combat? I suggest either a -strength stat or negative characteristic.


Jutsu

Fudansu

"Duration: 1 post to create, lasts until stopped"
> Duration: mantainable
"Cooldown: 2 posts after stopping"
> Cooldown: duration + 2

"keeping the user from hitting the ground or other objects at high rates of speed"
I think you imply it but I would like another line just to say outright that
> this jutsu cannot be used to defend against an attack directly


Ok! Make those changes and post in modding requests when ready :)

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