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1Enjō Clan  Empty Enjō Clan Sun Nov 24, 2013 8:43 pm

Rinao

Rinao


D-rank
Symbol: Enjō Clan  N9GVg30


Clan: Enjō [炎上 ~ Incineration]

Kekkei Genkai: Kemono o nenshō [獣を燃焼 ~ Burning Beast]

Elements: Katon(Main)

Specialization: Taijutsu or Bukijutsu + Ninjutsu

Location: Scattered

Clan History:
The Enjō used to be nothing but a ragtag group of people who had nothing in common but one thing; Their amazing skill with and manipulation of the fire element. At first only a few of them were any type of warrior, and it was this select few who would be the first to come up with the teachings of the Enjō people about the proper way to tap in to their gifts as literal pyromancers. Eventually, marrying within their own group and accepting in those rare few who popped up through the centuries led them to be a highly concentrated group mostly found in the land of Fire. However, they were independant of Konohagakure or any other village.

This was mostly due to their haughty, unpredictable natures and tendency to have tempers as hot and volatile as their chakra. They flourished as their own society who worshiped their own set of elemental Gods and Goddesses, but this was just another reason to make the other shinobi weary of these unusual people. They were secretive, hostile at best, and refused outside interference even at the worst of times. Greedy with their techniques and even wealth unless they needed something from those not allied with their own people. Even allies, however, were at arm's length at best. This is probably why their downfall was so painfully ironic.

About 16 years ago to the day, an upstart of this family decided he would challenge the leadership of the clan. His name was Korei, son of the current leader who preached peace and friendship. He was the first in a long line of leaders who actually wanted to change their loner ways and embrace the world outside of them. Korei wanted them to shun these ways and claimed his father was weak. They split the entire clan in to two warring factions who burned down their own village in an effort to see who was more worthy of leading the clan to their futures. In the end, however, their numbers were greatly reduced and the few survivors scattered from the shame of ruining the bright future of the Enjō because of their lust for destruction and intolerance of defeat.

Kekkei Genkai Description:
Essentially, their KKG is the ability to more freely manipulate their heavily fire-sided chakra than average shinobi. This means that there are no hand signs needed to perform Katon jutsu and they have a boost of +1 in all Katon based techniques. Whether these be clan based, taijutsu/bukijutsu combo techniques, or straight ninjutsu. Also, their adeptness through the ages as close combat fighters raises either their Taijutsu/Bukijutsu(has to be their first specialty) by +1.

Drawbacks:

  • They can never take Suiton/Doton as an element, and Suiton/Doton deals +1 damage to them.
  • Users can not have a Bukijutsu boost for ranged weaponry(Such as Kyujutsu), or practice Kugutsu.
  • They must take on the Hesitant Element as a negative SC as counting towards their 3.


Members have been known to experience small sparks coming from their hands and crackling along their skin when experiencing high emotions such as anger or sadness, but this stops happening around Special Jounin level except for very rare occasions. These 'sparks' are uncontrollable otherwise and can start fires that are also uncontrollable. These sparks and the fires they create can burn friend and foe alike, not just flammable material. They can not control who is burned. As well, fires created from the sparks can very easily burn the host just as any other fire can.

Members:
Leader Reserved.

Kekkei Genkai Jutsu:

Name: Tōsō supāku (闘争スパーク ~ Combative Spark)
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: D-S (+1)
Type: Defensive/Offensive
Element: Katon
Range: 0~2 meters (+2 meters per rank)
Specialty: Taijutsu/Bukijutsu + Ninjutsu
Duration: 2-6 posts.
Cooldown: x1.5 duration (Rounds up)
Description:
This technique is one of the basic techniques of the clan that uses Ninjutsu to enhance their body or weapon(s) with Katon chakra. While no hands signs are necessary to do this, the user must still hold perfectly still for a moment to concentrate the chakra in the center of their body and push it outwards from this point. It'll manifest as flickering flames across the user's body, pooling mostly at their hands to deal the most damage and giving them a claw like appearance. All of these flames can branch out from the user's body at any given time to wrap around objects or enemies and cause damage. At it's weakest (D Rank) It can cause 1st degree to moderate 2nd degree damage (C Rank) it can cause major 2nd to 3rd degree burns, (B rank) would be major 3rd degree to 4th degree burns. (A rank) would be major 4th degree burns and severe tissue damage and incredible, debilitating pain. These tendrils able to be cut/disintegrated temporarily like regular rope before the flames simply recreate themselves out from the user's body.

The flames on the user's body can only be temporarily doused with regular water --these flames are the equivalent of their very chakra manifesting outside of their skin-- but any fires started from contact with combustible materials (that are not on the user's body) coming in to contact with it is very easily doused like any other fire.

Name: Bakuhatsu-teki shōkyaku (爆発的焼却 ~ Explosive Incineration)
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: D-A (+1)
Type: Offensive
Element: Katon
Range: D- 3 meters (+2 meters per rank)
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: Instantaneous
Cooldown: 6 posts
Description:
This technique requires no hand seals. Katon chakra is centered in the body, and then forcibly shot out to combust the very air at a maximum of 3 meters out from their body. This can be used to explosively push enemies/projectiles away and keep this fiery wave going for as long as the maximum distance of the jutsu's rank. At it's weakest (D Rank) It can cause 1st degree to moderate 2nd degree damage (C Rank) it can cause major 2nd to 3rd degree burnsr, (B rank) would be major 3rd degree to 4th degree burns. (A rank) would be major 4th degree burns and severe tissue damage and incredible, debilitating pain. Everything in it's path is likely to either catch fire if it's combustible or have it's surface turned incredibly hot if it's a heat conductor.

It's impossible to retract the wave once it's given free reign. While the wave is in progress, the user can not move. However, this technique moves at a rank above itself. So a C rank wave would move like a B rank, and so on. These flames act as any other regular fire, and can burn not only enemies and objects, but friends and the user as well.

Name: Dōmu-gata no infāno (ドーム型のインファーノ ~ Domed Inferno)
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: C-S (+1)
Type: Defensive
Element: Katon
Range: C- 5 meters (+2 meters per rank)
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 2-4 posts
Cooldown: Duration x2
Description:
This technique, as with others, requires no hand seals or preparation. The user simply must center their Katon chakra and thrust it out in to a dome like shape of thick flames that manifests at a minimum of 5 meters out from their body according to which rank is being used. Within it the air is surprisingly cool as the hot air is being pushed outward from within the dome. There is a 2 foot wide hole within the dome's ceiling as to not suffocate it's occupants, and this is the only exit/entry point that isn't through the flames. Techniques that only target sections of the sphere will only temporarily break the sphere open, and without being dissipated by the user or by a large enough technique to take the whole thing out at once, the broken section will simply be recovered in flames from the others intact sections. At it's weakest (C Rank) it can cause major 2nd to 3rd degree burns, (B rank) would be major 3rd degree to 4th degree burns. (A rank) would be major 4th degree burns and severe tissue damage and incredible, debilitating pain.

It can passively set flammable objects touching it on fire, so using the larger sizes in small places can cause more harm than good. Able to set trees and foliage on fire, and even nearby buildings, which can trap the user and their allies in a true inferno that does not dissipate with the technique. However, enemies can also be trapped in this. The user/allies/lucky enemies can move freely within the dome.



Last edited by Rinao on Wed Nov 27, 2013 1:27 pm; edited 8 times in total

2Enjō Clan  Empty Re: Enjō Clan Mon Nov 25, 2013 9:47 pm

Gi

Gi


D-rank
The clan requires more drawbacks to balance out the large bonus you have. Things like not being able to take bow or water really isn't a drawback due to the clan specialising in the opposite. What does 50% more effective against a katon shield actually do? If the jutsu is a full rank higher it breaks the shield, other wise it only weakens it and requires another to break it.
The random sparks thing, can these flames hurt people/burn stuff?

Combat spark: This should have a +1 after the rank due to your clan's bonus to katon. What is a medium boiling point metals?(item rank) keep in mind this is already doing full offencive abilities(not factoring in the bonus). Being able to specifically destroy items of similar rank it it's own thing. Also at S rank you don't get to melt all metals, because that would include SS swords and stuff, and even a +1 pure item breaking S jutsu dosn't get to simply break SS items.
You are coating yourself in fire, it is specifically weak against water, yes it is chakra fire, but then again a suiton jutsu is also chakra water.. which fire is weak to. Also ignoring all fire is a plain no, because that would mean you could block S/SS katon stuff with a single C rank jutsu.

Explosive Incineration: Basicly the same kind of stuff as above. How fast does the wave travel? This honestly seems like it could just be two separate jutsu, one that is a blast, one that is a shell.

3Enjō Clan  Empty Re: Enjō Clan Tue Nov 26, 2013 12:41 pm

Rinao

Rinao


D-rank
Alrighty then.

Took out the -1 katon attacks against them, hopefully that balances it out a bit more. Made changes to the jutsu according to the things pointed out, and separated that last one in to two jutsu. Not sure why that didn't occur to me before. Hopefully this works a little better.

4Enjō Clan  Empty Re: Enjō Clan Wed Nov 27, 2013 2:17 am

Yuudai

Yuudai


D-rank
You're going to need a bit more on the drawbacks to balance this out. As it stands, you currently have a +1 to Katon and a +1 Bukijutsu/Taijutsu, both of which are pretty significant boosts.

"They can never take on Suiton as an element, and Suiton deals +1 damage to them." You may want to reword that to "They can never take Suiton as an element, and Suiton deals +1 damage to them."

You'll need another significant drawback for the other +1 that your KKG provides. Also, the hesitant SC isn't necessarily a drawback unless you state they cannot take a positive to balance it out.

"The who is not controlled." What?

Combative Spark; You mention D-rank jutsu, yet your jutsu rank doesn't include D-rank what-so-ever. Fix that. Also, melting weapons, of any rank, seems like it can easily be abused, given that you don't state how long it'd take to melt weapons. Also, what if your cooldown lands on 4.5 posts (3 post duration). Mention that it rounds up.

Explosive Incineration; Same thing with the melting aspect.

Domed Inferno; Melting again.

5Enjō Clan  Empty Re: Enjō Clan Wed Nov 27, 2013 1:31 pm

Rinao

Rinao


D-rank
Edited accordingly. Took out the melting stuff because, on second thought, the flames/heat probably isn't concentrated enough for that. Fixed that Cooldown thing too.

Wasn't sure what to do for drawbacks, which is mainly why it was like that. I added Doton to it in hopes that'll even it out, since you can't really burn dirt.

6Enjō Clan  Empty Re: Enjō Clan Thu Nov 28, 2013 11:01 pm

Gi

Gi


D-rank
This clan still has a higher level of bonuses that it does drawbacks unfortunatly. Getting a bonus to two groups(katon, and bukijutsu) is more powerful that having a weakness to two groups(suiton and katon). Not getting a boost to one sub spec isn't that much of a problem, since you can very easily never have it inpact you. The hesitant SC isn't really a drawback unless you state they cannot take a positive to balance it out.

For your first jutsu please instead of giving a range have the duration more set, like 2 +1 per rank above D. How is it a defencive jutsu by chance? Aside from that I only have a problem with water not being able to shut down the jutsu, fire is after all particularly weak to water.

Your second jutsu, have the +1 from katon means you get to increase one aspect of the jutsu's power. It seems you have two, one for damage(the burns) and one for speed(it moving one rank above it's own rank). You get to pick one.

For the third jutsu please define what it takes to break through/disrupt the barrier. Keep in mind that a normal defencive jutsu dosn't do damage of equal rank as an attack jutsu, and only blocks two jutsu of it's own rank, or a single one of one rank higher.

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