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1The Kurotsuki Clan Empty The Kurotsuki Clan Thu Nov 07, 2013 6:57 pm

Uchiha Izanami

Uchiha Izanami


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The Kurotsuki Clan Wolf-moon-tattoo



Clan: Kurotsuki.

Kekkei Genkai:
All Fiction.



Elements:
Nothing specific.



Specialization:
Genjutsu (Kugutsu is off-limits).



Location:
Hi No Kuni/ Scattered.



Clan History:
 



~The rebirth of the rebirth of the Kurotsuki clan~

Like any other normal shinobi clans, the kurotsuki clan lived to serve a certain village, but the shinobi world kept evolving, the clan was left out, a weak clan no more no less, the clan was fed up with its weakness, they chose a certain specialization to completely master which was the beginning of their rebirth.

The clansmen continued training genjutsu for years eventually they completely mastered it. The clansmen were still viewed as weaklings, but once the first shinobi war began, they showed the world the true power of the kurotsuki clan, people in konohagakure viewed them as heroes powerful allies to the leaf, which was then that they came to the thought...

The Kurotsuki's clansmen were only respected after they gained power, unlike before when they were disrespected and ignored and viewed as weaklings, The clan despised that, they disliked  being looked at as tools but in the end, they were viewed as such, when they weren't very useful they were hated, but now that they are useful, they are loved, people in the end  didn't look at them as humans, but as mere tools of war.

The second war and the third war, and the fourth war passed, they were by then known as the phantoms of death, even konohagakure feared them but still loved them, a meeting was held, the four nations would threaten an all out war on konohagakure if they didn't dispose of them, the clans loyalty was too strong to be severed however, from spies they received a word about konoha's leaders having second thoughts, which was the beginning of the fifth war, one hundred shinobi defected they were all from the kurotsuki clan, the clansmen formed a Nukenin group of S-ranks which terrorized the whole shinobi world, they became blood thirsty and ever so hateful, they were called the Night Parade Of One Hundred Demons, killing many kages and terrorizing the five great nations, but little could they do after the all out war the clan was wiped out with few survivors, all were mere children, the five great nations took in these children and re-educated them in order to avoid the massacre  that occurred long ago, both sides received devastating damage, but still their legacy continues living.

Their history was buried and forgotten, and now they are nothing but genjutsu specialists the only ones who are familiar with their horror are the current kages which are informed of their existence by previous kages that lived their horror.












Kekkei Genkai Description: The Kurotsuki clan began as any other clan of normal shinobi, but due to the violence that existed in the shinobi world no normal shinobi is capable of surviving, thus, they started training on genjutsu, eventually they mastered the arts of genjutsu, years and years passed and eventually they created the ultimate clan's four techniques, the only ones capable of  using these techniques are the Kurotsuki's clansmen.




The Clan's Powers



  • being so powerful and flawless in Genjutsu they receive +1 to all genjutsu techniques


  • members of the clan  are masters of genjutsu all genjutsu techniques receive -1 against them.


  • the clan members are capable of easily seeing through genjutsu of their own rank(for example: a genin is capable of seeing through a D-rank genjutsu.)



Drawbacks:


  • Clan members focused mainly on genjutsu leaving other spec in the back of their heads, and so all clan members have 25% additional word count to any specialization training and learning.


  • clan members were never friendly with puppeteers, since genjutsu doesn't work on puppets, Kugutsu techniques gain an additional  power against clan members gaining +1 rank in strength and efficiency.


  • Due to their focus on Genjutsu all clan members are incapable of learning a fourth spec or a fourth element .


Members:


Kekkei Genkai Jutsu:





All Fiction(すべてフィクション):








Fictional Pain(架空の痛み):











Fictional Direction(架空の方向):











Fictional erasure(架空の消去):



Last edited by Uchiha Izanami on Mon Nov 11, 2013 6:58 am; edited 4 times in total

2The Kurotsuki Clan Empty Re: The Kurotsuki Clan Fri Nov 08, 2013 5:43 pm

Uchiha Izanami

Uchiha Izanami


D-rank
alright, is ready for review

3The Kurotsuki Clan Empty Re: The Kurotsuki Clan Fri Nov 08, 2013 7:50 pm

Morrigi

Morrigi


D-rank
You need more drawbacks to balance the clan's bonus. Like several more.

The first jutsu needs to have a trigger, and it's lower ranges are a bit high for being a radius. Note this also dosn't mean that the target's attacks always miss, you still have to actually dodge the attacks.

Jutsu number two. What do you mean by "power" reduction. Also when the genjutsu ends so to does the effects it causes as the body then realizes that it was fake. You could leave behind some lesser negatives, but if you want the full effect to remain you need to maintain it. Also do each of these rounds accumulate, to an eventual 2.5 reduction in power and reaction time?

The fourth jutsu. Sense it is just a defensive jutsu you can have it block one rank higher than it's own rank/two of it's own rank before the jutsu is used up. Also put a hard cooldown on this one, sense you would just activate it when you think you have been hit by a genjutsu, which would only mean 2 turn cooldown, which is a little low. Also it being able to be SS is a no. Your clan should not give you a free SS jutsu. Not only is it a very large personal training point, but it would be skipping a large requirement for getting one(the training). Plus it would mean that clan members would never be able to learn their own personal SS jutsu sense all of these count against the max jutsu known.

For jutsu number 1 and 3 you don't really do much at the different ranks, just would be harder to break. Is that intentional?

4The Kurotsuki Clan Empty Re: The Kurotsuki Clan Sun Nov 10, 2013 11:49 pm

Uchiha Izanami

Uchiha Izanami


D-rank
FIXED

5The Kurotsuki Clan Empty Re: The Kurotsuki Clan Wed Nov 27, 2013 5:47 am

Yuudai

Yuudai


D-rank
You can move Kugutsu being forbidden to drawbacks, as it's not a specialization of the clan.

For you KKG description, you state it's easier for members of the clan to see through genjutsu, do you mean it works similar to Ace Eye in the sense they are able to pick out details that others of the same rank would miss?

All fiction; "the user is capable of showing the attacks thrown at him by the victim connect while they missed" Reword that part as it's confusing and difficult to follow. When you mention reducing reaction speed, is that of the jutsu? If so, that makes no sense.

"This genjutsu also allows the user to manipulate time and whatever the user sees." Whoa... This needs limits. I'd remove this portion of the jutsu as it adds on way too much. Also, being able to see the future is a big no, as that leads to powergaming.

Fictional Pain; The A-rank version shouldn't be able to give 2 full debuffs.

Fictional Direction; Your ranges are way too far. Look at the jutsu rule for the appropriate ranges per rank for radius jutsus.

6The Kurotsuki Clan Empty Re: The Kurotsuki Clan Thu Nov 28, 2013 11:20 pm

Gi

Gi


D-rank
Also note "the clan members are capable of easily seeing through genjutsu of their own rank(for example: a genin is capable of seeing through a D-rank genjutsu.)" is denied, due to that copying and then some the sharingan's ability. At the very least it has to have a chakra cost.

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