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1The Shiniki Clan Empty The Shiniki Clan Fri Jan 23, 2015 7:21 am

Shiniru

Shiniru


D-rank
Symbol: The Shiniki Clan -ie-clansymbolmadebyme


Clan: The Shiniki Clan

Kekkei Genkai: Yoroi

Primary Elements: Katon and Doton
Secondary Element: Suiton

Specialization: Ninjutsu and Taijutsu

Location: Konahagakure

Clan History: The Shiniki Clan are a loving Clan that seeks peace through power. This is their way. They have been around for as long as the Senju Clan and the Uchiha Clan. They were initially an ominous religious cult known as the Shiniki, who once worshipped a deity called 'Shiniru'. Initially, the Shinikis' belief was that 'Shiniru' was an Omnipotent being made of molten lava that craved power for the sake of maintaining peace. These beliefs influenced generations upon generations of members of the cult. The cult had been influenced in such a way, that they even mastered their skills to the extent where they managed to even mimic their deities. As decades past, the Shiniki cult came to be recognized as the Shiniki Clan, and although their ways remained the same and they still sought peace through power, their religious ways dwindled and eventually ceased to exist. 'Shiniru' became a lost legend, that many forgot.

The Shiniki Clan initially had their own village, away from the other Shinobi villages, but had decided to join Konahagakure after hearing how it had formed through a truce, how it had formed through a treaty of peace. The Shiniki Clan was fond of this peace, for it followed their ways, so they stayed and became apart of Konahagakure. For years they have stayed with Konahagakure, and they continue to do so, helping out the village they now consider family in any way they can.

Kekkei Genkai Description: Yoroi is both a complex and simple Kekkei Genkai, using both Ninjutsu and Taijutsu. Yoroi literally means 'Armor' and as it says in the name, what this Kekkei Genkai does is literally form armor over the uses body using both Futon and Doton Ninjutsu. Yoroi can be activated after the user has performed three hand seals, tiger, snake and dragon in that order for 3 points. Once it has been activated, the users body can either be engulfed in fire, or earth, or even both. Although this Kekkei Genkai was designed to be a defensive technique, it can too be used an offensive, which is where the Clans skills in Taijutsu can come into play. Only members with either Katon or Doton as their primary element are able to use this Kekkei Genkai.

Drawbacks:
Hesitant (Elemental):

The Curse of Yoroi 1:

The Curse of Yoroi 2:

Members: Shiniru Shiniki

Kekkei Genkai Jutsu:
Yoroi - Saisho:

Yoroi - Daini:

Yoroi - Saigo:

Shirushi Yoroi:

2The Shiniki Clan Empty Re: The Shiniki Clan Tue Feb 10, 2015 4:02 am

Ayakashi

Ayakashi


S-rank
Hello, I'm the New clan mod, >.> Again. So, without further adieu.

KKG Description:

You Say Futon, while meaning Katon. Katon is fire, Futon is wind.

I would also ask that you read your KKG description aloud to somebody. Some of it does not make sense in its sentence structure.

You also mention something about 3 points... Of which I am confused what you mean, we don't really have a point system here. You could be talking about how much chakra the jutsu costs, but, that would entirely depend on the rank of the armour, or, you could mean 'posts' but the armours seem maintainable.

Jutsu:

Yoton (Lava release.) Is the advanced element release which allows a person to 'control' molten rock by combining Katon and Doton chakra. Similar to Hyouton (Ice release) and Mokuton (plant release) Lava release is clan locked, and you cannot use it, i am sorry. So, lava techniques would need to be removed. I'm sorry, though there are likely other ways you could combine these two elements. Perhaps have the rock armour (in combined mode) bound together with katon? The less solid Katon would create gaps in the armour, but make it lighter, and while it would not have the same offensive capabilities as full fire, it would have more than full rock. (So, it would be like the happy medium.)

Also, in the duration, you would only say how long the user can have them on for. In these cases, only one word is necessary. "Maintainable." The downsides you can put in the description.

Saisho: Additional chakra losses for use of this technique over 2 turns you would need to say are additional to the normal cost of maintaining these techniques, (which is 5 per turn normally for a C rank)

You're going to need to state the depths of the wounds over the body. Like 1/2 inch? 1/4 inch?

Okay, now, here's a crux. A PURELY defensive technique can standardly block, 1 jutsu of 1 rank higher, 2 of equal rank, and 3 of one rank lower, as well as make basic attacks negligible, unless they're 2 ranks higher. A PURELY stat buffing jutsu at C rank can give you +1 tier to a single stat, but must incur a negative effect to compensate.

You both have a higher defensive capability and +4 tiers on this C rank jutsu, which, is way too much. I would like to see this jutsu, and the others brought down to these standards please~



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3The Shiniki Clan Empty Re: The Shiniki Clan Tue Feb 10, 2015 5:07 am

Ayakashi

Ayakashi


S-rank
Oh, and can you say you can't balance Hesitant with a positive SC? please~

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