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Mako

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Clan: Kuraudo

Kekkei Genkai: Furasshuaizu Path (Doujutsu)  Yuga Aizu Path (Doujutsu)

Elements: Primary: Raiton Secondary: Any Tiertary: Any (Furasshuaizu Path Only)

Specialization: Bukijutsu (Swordsmaship) Secondary: Any Tiertary: Any (Yuga Aizu Path Only)
Location: Scattered (Exception of Kumogakure)

Clan History:

The Kuraudo clan was the most skilled yet secluded clan of Kumogakure.  Though they lived in secrecy they were by far the strongest within the Village of Kumogakure.  The clan was known throughout the village as the "Killers within the Clouds". The founder and leader of the clan was Shinra Kuraudo.  Shinra was a master in the Art of Swordsmanship as well as a Master Sealer and Ninjutsu Specialist.  Shinra alone created the 2 paths of the clan, the Furasshuaizu Path or Flash Eyes and the Aizu Goon Path or Roaring Eyes.  Upon creation of the paths Shinra unlocked both and passed the techniques down to his two children.  Shinra had 2 sons, the eldest Izuru, who was 34 and the youngest, Angeal who was 29.  Izuru was trained by his father in the Furasshuaizu Path, and Angeal was trained in the Yuga Aizu Path.  The both of them achieved great fame in being the strongest within the village as well as being granted the titles of Sannin

Kekkei Genkai Description:
All members receive a sword of their liking, as long as their Rank allows them to wield it.

Furasshuaizu Path
The Flash Eye Path comes from invigourous and death defying training in ones elements.  With this members that choose this path acquire +1 Rank in each of their 3 starting Elements.
(Primary: SS Secondary: B Tiertary: C)

Yuga Aizu Path
The Graceful Eye Path comes from intense and hard training in ones specialties.  With this members that choose this path acquire +1 Rank in each of their 3 starting Specialties.
(Primary: SS Secondary: B Tiertary: C)

Shandian

The perfection of the Kuraudo clan, the Shandian born from their strong affinity to the Raiton element.  This technique is available to all members of the clan.  

The user is able to control their clans powers using thier special eyes that are given by the Clan’s Kekkei Genkai. While active, Any Raiton Technique of any level that is directed to the individual, is automatically powered down by 1 tier.  The user then can reflect the same technique back at the original user with a power increase of +1 tier.  Due to the powerful lightning alignment the members of the Kuraudo Clan have, they receive -25% word count requirement for learning Raiton Techniques.  Along with their divine mastery of the sword the members of the Kuraudo Clan have, they receive a -25% word requirement for learning Bukijutsu Techniques.

While active the technique consumes 10/15/20 Chakra per Post.  

This Doujutsu has stages, as every normal eye technique :

Standard Eyes
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The user has a normal eyeball that hasn’t any special ability. This Stage is acquired upon character creation.

Stage 1
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At this stage, the user is able to see the chakra of life beings that are within a 15 meter radius.  The user can also counter any Elemental techniques that is B-Ranked or less as long as the user has the elmental alignment that is superior.  The user can also use any technique that is of 1 tier greater than their capabilities.  (Ex: A Chunnin could use an A-Rank technique instead of capping at B-Rank.)

This stage can only be acquired by:  
Achieving C-Rank/Chunnin with a Training Thread of 1500 words
Achieving D-Rank for a Training Thread of 2000 Words and a 1000 Ryo Payment.

Through the high affinity of Raiton Chakra that the clan is tied to, while the Raitogan is active the user receives +1 tier in speed.

Stage 2
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At this stage, the user is able to see the chakra of life beings that are within a 30 meter radius.  The user can also counter any Elemental techniques that is A-Ranked or less as long as the user has the elmental alignment that is superior.  The user can also channel chakra through their weapon.  The user can also use any technique that is of 1 tier greater than their capabilities.  (Ex: A Chunnin could use an A-Rank technique instead of capping at B-Rank.)

This stage can only be acquired by:
Achieving B-Rank/Special Jounin be acquired by a training thread of 3000 Words
Achieving C-Rank/Chunnin a Training Thread of 3500 Words and a 1500 Ryo Payment.

Through the high affinity of Raiton Chakra that the clan is tied to, while the Raitogan is active the user receives +1 tier in speed and reaction time.

Stage 3
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At this stage, the user is able to see the chakra of life beings that are within a 60 meter radius.  The user can also counter any Elemental techniques that is S-Ranked or less as long as the user has the elmental alignment that is superior. The user can now manifest a weapon made of pure Raiton Chakra, this weapon is qualified as an A-Ranked Weapon.  The user can also use any technique that is of 1 tier greater than their capabilities.  (Ex: A Chunnin could use an A-Rank technique instead of capping at B-Rank.)

This Stage can be acquired by:
Achieving A-Rank/Jounin followed by a 6000 word training thread.
Achieving B-Rank/Special Jounin, 3000 Word Training Thread and 2000 Ryo Payment.

Through the high affinity of Raiton Chakra that the clan is tied to, while the Shandian is active the user receives a +1 tier in speed, reaction time and *Elements/Specialties.  

*This ability is granted depending on the path taken by the user.  Ex:  A member of the Furasshuaizu path would earn the +2 in Speacialties.

The Shandian requires little action, the individual simply performs the half tiger seal channeling their chakra to their eyes.

Drawbacks:

  • No members are allowed to have a Fourth Element/Specialization.
  • No members are allowed to learn/use the Specialization, Taijutsu.
  • No members are allowed to learn/use the Element, Fuuton (Wind).
  • All training done by members to increase the level of thier Specialization/Element is increased by 50%
  • All members of the clan that face against a Fuuton or Taijutsu technique, take +2 damage.  (Ex: A C-Rank Fuuton technique would do A-Rank Damage.
  • All clan members start with a chakra pool of 140, rather than the normal 150.

Furasshuaizu Path
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Members who take the Furasshuaizu path receive a -1 demotion in their starting specializations.  (Primary would start and A instead of S)

The Special Characteristic, Trained, may not be used to counter this.

Members who take the Flash Eye path cannot learn a 3rd Specialization.

Yuga Aizu Path


Members who take the Aizu Goon path receive a -1 demotion in their starting Elements.  (Primary would start and A instead of S)

The Special Characteristic, Elementalist, may not be used to counter this.

Members who take the Yuga Aizu path cannot learn a 3rd Element.

Members:

  • Gaiken, Kuraudo
  • Eita, Kuraudo
  • Kaien, Kuraudo

Kekkei Genkai Jutsu:
Kirin's Roar:
Lightning Cannon:

THE IDEA FOR THE CLAN WAS ALL OWYDELU'S
Original Creators: Owydelu Senju and Rinshi Hyuga
Original Eyes: Owydelu Senju
Remade Eyes: Rinshi Hyuga



Last edited by Rinshi on Wed Dec 11, 2013 10:42 am; edited 6 times in total

2Kuraudo Clan (Revamp) Empty Re: Kuraudo Clan (Revamp) Mon Dec 09, 2013 11:22 am

Mako

Mako


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COMPLETE

3Kuraudo Clan (Revamp) Empty Re: Kuraudo Clan (Revamp) Thu Dec 12, 2013 8:03 am

Mako

Mako


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BUmp

4Kuraudo Clan (Revamp) Empty Re: Kuraudo Clan (Revamp) Thu Dec 12, 2013 10:47 am

Daraku

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Question: why did you revamp this? You seem to have made some major changes even though the way this clan was before was completely fine. You separated the clan into two paths, which may have been fine if it was a normal clan, but considering this is doujutsu clan, it's a bigger deal. You added more to the kekkei genkai without giving it a sufficient amount of drawbacks to balance it. And you even changed the effects of the doujutsu so that it offers more +1s, it can absorb any elemental technique rather than just Raiton, and it becomes a sensory technique once it reaches its final form.

Moving on, few big things you're going to have to change. First, starting with +1 in not one or two but THREE elements/specialties? No, that is way too much. Especially not a primary one; no starting with SS in anything. Starting with a +1 in a secondary element/specialty is more than enough, two more +1 is past the line. Next, you get a 25% discount on both Bukijutsu spec training and Raiton jutsu training AND a free sword in addition to a doujutsu. You're going to need to balance these heavily by giving the clan some serious drawbacks or get rid of something.

Honestly, I preferred the clan before this revamp, but it's not my authority to tell you to change it back, so make those edits and we'll continue.

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