Clan: Kamizuki

Kekkei Genkai: Psychic Genjutsu [Shinreijutsu - 心霊術]

Elements: /

Specialization: Genjutsu

Location: Konohagakure no Sato

Clan History: The Kamizuki clan has resided in the forests of Konohagakure since before the founding of the village; long ago the clan was one of monks and priests and scholars that recorded the passing histories of the world. When the first Sage of Six Paths passed through their lands, they found that the message and ways of the Sage and his teachings, that of the ways of Ninshu, resonated within them to such a degree that within a single generation the clan had forsaken it's previous traditions and culture in favor of on based upon the ways and words of the Great Sage. As time marched on and the ways of Ninshu became the ways of Ninjutsu and the world moved toward that of the ninja, the clan was able to adapt and grow by incorporating these new ideas and such into their existence, and as such found that they were well suited toward one particular skillset above all else, that of Genjutsu. The mental arts had always been favored among the clan, so this was of little surprise to anyone within the clan, or that knew of their history.

When Konohagakure was founded, the Kamizuki were one of the early clans to immigrate to it; they had lived in the region for so long that it was treated as natural that they would join the foundling village. While never a major player in politics, nor heavily famous among the Ninja as many other ancient clans grew to be, the Kamizuki have held their own and maintained an identity within the village, and they continue to flourish to this day.

Kekkei Genkai Description: This clan is heavily Genjutsu based, and have been for generations. The clan prides itself on it's mental prowess, and because of this fixates heavily on it. While not deficient in other areas of ninja arts, they have always just found that Genjutsu arts come easier to their people. Due to the extreme focus on the mind and the power within; the clan has unlocked a special ability: Telepathy. Over the generations this ability has been honed and expanded to a massive degree; making the clan powerful telepaths. They are able to communicate with large groups of people without so much as a second thought; and rarely show any real effort when using this skill. In order to unlock this ability, the Kamizuki clan member must have Genjutsu as their primary Specialization. Because it is a passive ability, it takes the place of a positive SC, however it does not need to be balanced by a negative SC.

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[b]Name:[/b] Kamizuki Telepathy
[b]Type:[/b] Passive Clan Ability
[b]Description:[/b] The most famous ability of the Kamizuki; this skill allows any clan member to communicate via thought. This skill cannot be used to acquire information that the user would not normally have access to, nor can it be used to 'read minds' or anything of the sort. Combat usage is restricted to direct teammates and clansmen.

Drawbacks: Due to the clan's extensive focus on the mental aspect of their beings, they have become progressively weaker in many physical aspects. Their bodies tend to be frailer than others, and they are never able to develop the same levels of strength that others do. As such, all Kamizuki suffer a -2 tier to their STR stat, which cannot be changed via positive SCs, items, abilities, or jutsu. All members of the clan must also take the Frail SC, which cannot be balanced with a positive SC.

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[b]Name:[/b] Frail
[b]Type:[/b] Negative
[b]Description:[/b] This individual is incredibly physically frail. They bruise easily, and their bones are more brittle than most. Where most individuals would suffer a simple fracture, an individual with frail will suffer a broken bone. Wounds they receive also bleed for longer without medical attention.

Members:
Kekkei Genkai Jutsu: Name: Laughing Man
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: B
Type: Supplementary
Element: /
Range: Within Hearing Range
Specialty: Genjutsu
Duration: 2 posts
Cooldown: 5 posts
Description: A simple auditory Genjutsu; the user merely has to laugh to trigger the effect. The target, upon hearing the initial laugh; begins to hear countless echos and variations of the same laugh. For the first post; it sounds as though you are locked in a room with dozens of people all laughing as loudly as possible directly into your ear; causing serious disorientation and confusion. In the second post the user is rendered temporarily deaf from the sheer amount of over stimulation; causing the brain to shut off the sensory input from the ears until it realizes that the noise has stopped. During this post the target is rendered stunned, as the physiological overload is enough to cause the brain to overload, and as such the body is unable to act due to the broken circuits from the brain to the body itself.

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[b]Name:[/b] Laughing Man
[b]Canon/Custom:[/b] Custom
[b]Rank:[/b] B
[b]Type:[/b] Supplementary
[b]Element:[/b] /
[b]Range:[/b] Within Hearing Range
[b]Specialty:[/b] Genjutsu
[b]Duration:[/b] 3 posts
[b]Cooldown:[/b] 5
[b]Description:[/b] [b]Name:[/b] Laughing Man
[b]Canon/Custom:[/b] Custom
[b]Rank:[/b] B
[b]Type:[/b] Supplementary
[b]Element:[/b] /
[b]Range:[/b] Within Hearing Range
[b]Specialty:[/b] Genjutsu
[b]Duration:[/b] 2 posts
[b]Cooldown:[/b] 5 posts
[b]Description:[/b] A simple auditory Genjutsu; the user merely has to laugh to trigger the effect. The target, upon hearing the initial laugh; begins to hear countless echos and variations of the same laugh. For the first post; it sounds as though you are locked in a room with dozens of people all laughing as loudly as possible directly into your ear; causing serious disorientation and confusion. In the second post the user is rendered temporarily deaf from the sheer amount of over stimulation; causing the brain to shut off the sensory input from the ears until it realizes that the noise has stopped. During this post the target is rendered stunned, as the physiological overload is enough to cause the brain to overload, and as such the body is unable to act due to the broken circuits from the brain to the body itself.

Hiya

So just a quick and probably irrelevant note to start, as the telepathy thing is like a minor ability of the Yamanaka, you may have to share that ability with it as it takes presidence as the canon clan. But as the clan treads on site rules, I doubt there's any plans to make the clan (at least in it's canon form).

KKG:

looks fine, the telepathy is nicely restricted.

Drawbacks:

"As such, all Kamizuki suffer a -2 tier to their STR that cannot be overcome."
Would like you to change the wording of this around to say that their strength cannot be raised, instead of 'cannot be overcome'.

Jutsu

Rising Moon

Too strong for a C rank, either choose 2 senses to fool over 2 posts or 1 over 3

Laughing Man

As stuns start at B rank, this should be scaled back a bit, although I do like the fact that it has a ramp up to that point. I think it would be balanced if you took off the third post.

So just a quick and probably irrelevant note to start, as the telepathy thing is like a minor ability of the Yamanaka, you may have to share that ability with it as it takes presidence as the canon clan. But as the clan treads on site rules, I doubt there's any plans to make the clan (at least in it's canon form).

Well, honestly, originally the Telepathy was able to be taught outside of the clan, but I new there was likely no way that was going to be allowed. Otherwise I have zero issues with it being eventually shared/borrowed if/when the Yamanaka was ever made.

"As such, all Kamizuki suffer a -2 tier to their STR that cannot be overcome."
Would like you to change the wording of this around to say that their strength cannot be raised, instead of 'cannot be overcome'.

Clarified as requested.


Rising Moon basically effects visual and tactile sensation anyway; because you're visually seeing the world shift, the rising into space, the moon eating you, etc; and tactile because you feel the change in temperature/suffocation/etc, all of which are existing entirely in the brain. If someone pops up and introduces outside stimulation it would break the effect. Given how the jutsu works, the only difference between it lasting two posts and three posts is that more would happen in the first post; so I honestly don't see why that would actually help to balance it more.


Laughing Man has been adjusted. Would this be more acceptable?

Rising Moon

Pop it down to 2 posts. I'd also like you to add a high C perception level in which the target can see the faint outline of objects within 10 metres and a mid B in which the illusion is faint compared to the real world.

Laughing Man

Make it single target only.


do these two and you're good to go

Rising Moon

Pop it down to 2 posts. I'd also like you to add a high C perception level in which the target can see the faint outline of objects within 10 metres and a mid B in which the illusion is faint compared to the real world.

Given the nature of the illusion, that would... basically make it pointless.

Once entranced, during the first post the target perceives that the world has had it's gravity turned off; literally, there is nothing holding them to the ground. No amount of grasping or holding onto objects will stop the target from lifting into the air.

If they can 'see' the regular world around them, it defeats the entire purpose of the illusion. I'm not trying to be difficult; just trying to make sure that we're both on the same page as to what this jutsu actually does. A basic perception check is fine with me, it had something similar to that in the ran check of the original version.

Rising Moon

All jutsu like this should have some sort of perception level at which it can be seen through, or at least some form of counterplay. If you can find an alternative that suits you better then you are welcome to suggest it. It's not like a sp. jounin and higher will get easily trapped by a C rank jutsu.

Okay, for the sake of getting this clan approved so I can use Hiroyuki, I've removed Rising Moon from the clan jutsu.

Anything else, my good sir?

nope. looks good!

1/2 Approved

hmmmmm...