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1Chikyūtatchi Clan Empty Chikyūtatchi Clan Thu Jul 30, 2015 10:57 pm

Ayu

Ayu


D-rank
Symbol:Chikyūtatchi Clan 35i9jea


Clan: Chikyūtatchi

Kekkei Genkai: Earth Imbue Defense

Elements: Doton as a Primary Element

Specialization: Ninjutsu as a Primary Specialization

Location: Iwagakure

Clan History: The Chikyūtatchi were among the very first clans to accept the way of the ninja arts during the establishing times of the Shinobi. Their roots originate in the Land Of Earth, where they once thrived as a native people. Primitive and ritualistic, the Chikyūtatchi had their own way about them, the way of the earth. Their traditional beliefs aligned with a benevolent environmental outlook, believing themselves to be the chosen guardians of the very earth itself. Protecting their lands and keeping their soils fertile was of utmost importance, so much so, that this sacred belief trumped even the care and protection of their own kin and tribesman.

Over the early years of the shinobi, many ninja attacked the grossly native Chikyūtatchi, utilizing ninjutsu to overcome their spears and arrows to beat them into submission and seize their most coveted lands. In desperation, the remaining Chikyūtatchi sought the mercy of a nameless ninja that proved to express sympathy in their plight. In exchange for safe passage and navigation through the Land of Earth, this nameless ninja agreed to teach them the ability of their enemy, ninjutsu. It proved poetic how the Chikyūtatchi gravitated towards the doton nature, coincidentally affirming their belief as guardians of the earth.

Their essence with doton natured ninjutsu manifested with an emphasis in defense as their attacks with the element proved dull, where as their utilization of it towards defense proved durable beyond expectation. After decades of passing along the knowledge of ninjutsu throughout the tribe, the Chikyūtatchi managed to salvage and protect the small remainder of their lands. After their success, the surviving elders of the clan decreed it their responsibility to protect their immediate lands with this new gift and remain true to their ways.

Kekkei Genkai Description: Those of the Chikyūtatchi Clan have an innate will to protect using the very earth itself. As such, their utilization of doton ninjutsu naturally manifests in an overwhelmingly defensive manner.

  • Clan members receive +1 tier to their Strength & Endurance stats.
  • Doton ninjutsu techniques that are already defensive in type are naturally augmented to defend up to 2 techniques of a rank higher, 3 techniques of its own rank, or 4 techniques of 1 rank lower. Hybrid techniques Ie. Offensive / Defensive or Defensive / Supplimentary do not recieve increased defensive parameters.

Drawbacks:

  • Must take Ninjutsu as a Primary Specialization.
  • Must take Doton as a Primary Element.
  • May only have a total of two specializations.
  • Clan members cannot learn any additional elements.
  • Raiton techniques hit the clan member at +1 rank in Damage.
  • Offensive Doton techniques hit at -1 rank in damage.


Members: Chikyūtatchi, Ayu

Kekkei Genkai Jutsu:
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Last edited by Ayu on Mon Aug 24, 2015 4:24 pm; edited 12 times in total

2Chikyūtatchi Clan Empty Re: Chikyūtatchi Clan Fri Jul 31, 2015 4:43 am

Ayakashi

Ayakashi


S-rank
General

I need you to do a bit of re-wording. Also using this coding.

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Is way nicer than using spoilers, can you swap it please...

KKG

So, basically, your non defensive techniques can take more punishment before dissipating... I would like you to add the 1 of one rank higher, and also, as nit-picky as this may seem, i would like you to separate the "they're treated as defensive with X toughness.'' and make it more like "Their doton non defensive techniques can be used to block or intercept other techniques, and take X to be destroyed."

3Chikyūtatchi Clan Empty Re: Chikyūtatchi Clan Fri Jul 31, 2015 2:37 pm

Ayu

Ayu


D-rank
Edited to the best of my understanding. Hopefully I captured what you meant.

Also, I amended the clan location to Iwagakure.

4Chikyūtatchi Clan Empty Re: Chikyūtatchi Clan Sat Aug 01, 2015 3:11 am

Ayakashi

Ayakashi


S-rank
KKG

"Doton ninjutsu techniques that are already defensive in type are naturally augmented to defend up to 2 techniques of a rank higher, 3 techniques of its own rank, or 4 techniques of 1 rank lower." - Remove this please, as this is an advantage which you are not going to be able to get in conjunction with your other one. I understand the thought pattern, but, I personally think that creates a clan that is WAY too strong. You would have S rank defensive jutsu which can block 2 SS rank offensive jutsu, as well as offensive jutsu which are harder to break. I will allow one, but not the other. ^_^ so you have to choose... And I should be telling you to increase the chakra cost, not decreasing it. I'd like that undone as well, Staff are still on the fence about whether or not that is something we'll let fly on clans yet~

Feel free to give clan members a couple of +'s to stats, as an earth clan, a few bumps to endurance seems like a good idea.

Drawbacks

Looking good.

Jutsu

Sure you want no free jutsu on this clan?

5Chikyūtatchi Clan Empty Re: Chikyūtatchi Clan Sat Aug 01, 2015 5:37 pm

Ayu

Ayu


D-rank
KKG:
  • Made my decision on one advantage
  • Removed the chakra decrease
  • Added 2 tiers to Strength & Endurance stats


Jutsu:
  • Added three clan jutsu


6Chikyūtatchi Clan Empty Re: Chikyūtatchi Clan Tue Aug 04, 2015 3:44 pm

Ayu

Ayu


D-rank
Bump, been a few days...

7Chikyūtatchi Clan Empty Re: Chikyūtatchi Clan Fri Aug 07, 2015 8:26 am

Ayakashi

Ayakashi


S-rank
Sorry, was busy with getting back to my own country <3

KKG

1/ you can only have a maximum of +3 passives from a clan: Note, that if you have +3 in a clan, you cannot receive +1 tier bonuses from positive SC's. As there is a maximum of +3 passive stat tiers a ninja can have at any time from items, clans and Positive SC's. (Taijutsu and Techniques can boost you higher.) So, you need to reduce this +2 to 2 stats by 1. (+2 to one and +1 to another.) And expect to have to pay for that in your negatives. Each +1 is generally considered one advantage each which needs to be counterbalanced. Just a heads up :)

Drawbacks

Fantastic, well balanced, i was gonna chew you out for not having good enough drawbacks, i am pleased to see i was wrong <3

Jutsu

1/ So it allows you to move a defensive technique that would not otherwise move. It seems ok <3 I would just mention that impact with a person doesn't hurt, but pushes them back to the range. Cooldown should be something like: 1+1 per rank above D. please.

2/ This jutsu translates to: -10 chakra remove raiton weakness from one doton jutsu... hmmmmmmm I'll allow it for now, but i reserve the right to change my opinions on this.

3/ I'd like you to lower the defensive properties by 1, so they would be 2D and 1C each. And you could add that when two are lined up in front of one another they can block 4D, 2C or 1B. But that would be about it. Also, i would like a speed they eject from the ground. Also, how do they move underground? I might wanna reword it as they generate enough chakra to raise three triangles simultaniously. Otherwise you create the image of, if an opponent makes you move, the triangles created below you, that you are delaying, do not.

Unless that's the intention. :)

-Aya

8Chikyūtatchi Clan Empty Re: Chikyūtatchi Clan Fri Aug 07, 2015 10:21 pm

Ayu

Ayu


D-rank
OOC: No worries, sorry I did not know you were traveling. Thanks for still replying though.

KKG:
Changed to +1 tier each

Jutsu

1/ Changes made.

2/ Just wanted say thanks for this one and to let you know that it is not just a random removal, clay is actually an electrical insulator, so the property reasonably gives way to the effect.

3/ Changes made. Also the triangles are stationary from the point they are cast, so the do not move underground, not even the delayed ones. I added that point in the jutsu as well.

9Chikyūtatchi Clan Empty Re: Chikyūtatchi Clan Mon Aug 10, 2015 11:14 pm

Ayu

Ayu


D-rank
Bump

10Chikyūtatchi Clan Empty Re: Chikyūtatchi Clan Mon Aug 17, 2015 2:27 am

Ayakashi

Ayakashi


S-rank
KKG

Fine~

Just add a thing saying that: (hybrid techniques Ie. Offensive / Defensive or Defensive / Supplimentary don't get have increased defensive parameters.) and we're sweet. You can literally copy paste that.

Drawbacks

Fine~

Jutsu:

  • 1/ good to go
  • 2/ Is coolio
  • 3/ is sweet.


Make that one last change and you should be good to go.

11Chikyūtatchi Clan Empty Re: Chikyūtatchi Clan Mon Aug 17, 2015 3:03 am

Ayu

Ayu


D-rank
Last change made, added it to the second bullet under KKG.

12Chikyūtatchi Clan Empty Re: Chikyūtatchi Clan Mon Aug 24, 2015 3:43 pm

Taede

Taede


D-rank
Red Clay: Please bump down the range a little, and perhaps some hand seals?

Triple Defense: So, it provides defenses equal to three D-rank jutsu....do this technique's defensive counts take into consideration the clan's Kekkei Genkai?

13Chikyūtatchi Clan Empty Re: Chikyūtatchi Clan Mon Aug 24, 2015 4:34 pm

Ayu

Ayu


D-rank
Red Clay: Bumped down the range and specified hand seal requirement.

Triple Defense: All defensive doton techniques used by the clan member are effected by their clans ability. So this defensive doton technique, like any other, only specifies the defensive prowess of the jutsu and does not account for the clan ability in addition.

14Chikyūtatchi Clan Empty Re: Chikyūtatchi Clan Tue Aug 25, 2015 6:15 am

Ayakashi

Ayakashi


S-rank
All of your clan jutsu need to 'include' your clan ability as the jutsu as it is written is the point of reference for the technique. you're not getting a really powerful jutsu and then having it buffed by the clan kkg. the reason i let you have the 3 C rank walls was because i took your KKG into account. if that's not the case, drop all the defensive stats by 1 rank.

15Chikyūtatchi Clan Empty Re: Chikyūtatchi Clan Tue Aug 25, 2015 11:29 pm

Taede

Taede


D-rank
Red Clay: Also just noticed....how does Doton make Doton no longer weak to Raiton if it's the same nature transformation? It's not just the produced effects of the jutsu that are weak or strong against each other, it's also the very chakra they're comprised of.

16Chikyūtatchi Clan Empty Re: Chikyūtatchi Clan Wed Aug 26, 2015 1:54 pm

Ayu

Ayu


D-rank
You denied my entire clan ability via pm Taede so all of this is no longer necessary.

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