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Cadareria Wincester.

Cadareria Wincester.


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Junn Shageki Dynasty  [Done / Wip[I might need help getting it sorted] Naruto_Gun_Clan
Clan: Junn Shageki Dynasty

Kekkei Genkai: Āmuzu Suringur [ Arms Slinger ]

Elements: Chikyū [ Earth]

Specialization: Bukijutsu [Kyujutsu + one other Bukijustsu] This can must take Specialist as a special-characteristics

Location: Mizu no Kuni

Clan History: The Junn Shageki Dynasty was founded only recently when a large group of youngters between ages of 10-28, who of which all had hard lives losing everything they had...Family, belonging, money with pretty much nothing but the shirt on their backs.  They all had the same idea to go to the Wilderness in Mizu no Kuni to hunt for wild beast  for food using heir skills as fighters at which point they all attacked the same large animal at the same time in perfect unison despite not having a clue any of the others were even their .... and so it was founded.

These people were forced to live through and off the land often become targets for criminal minded people forcing them to learn how to fight. All Junn Shageki Dynasty members found themselves using everyday objects as weapons slowly moving up to more effective weapons leading them to become specialists and develop, keen eyes making them very effect users of Bukijutsu.

90% of these members did not have a clue what a ninja was let alone how to train to be one,in fact they did not even know they were actively using Bukijutsu this is due before the joining they were outcasts living solo on the will to survive and any weapon they could find.

over time the group became a group of travelling merchants working with each other to survive but to also find people in the same boat and to invite them into the guild training them in the art of weaponry.  

Kekkei Genkai Description: Āmuzu Suringur is fully about using Kyujutsu weapons with secondary options through Bukijutsu forcing the people of Clan to take specialist and Ace Eye as special characteristics. along with Kyujutsu as one of the 2 Bukijutsu sub specs.
 
Drawbacks:
Can only have have 2 specialization [Bukijutsu [starter and one more] due to lack of knowledge of ninjas ways along with special characteristics Hesitant: Specialization and One Track Mind

Members:N/a soon [Wincester..Cadareria]

Kekkei Genkai Jutsu:

1.
Name: Projection Flip
Canon/Custom: Custon
Rank: C
Type: Offensive
Element: N/A
Range: [depends on weapon]
Specialty: Bukijutsu
Duration: instant
Cooldown: 4 post
Description:
15 chakra
if you have launched an attack from a firearm or swung an attack from a weapon which is at least 5 meters long, you can then flip the attacks projection,
So if you swung a sword from your left shoulder towards the right it would then be as you swung from your right shoulder to the left [ same with a bullet in relation to your shoulders] will count as 2 attacks,  The second attack is like it already happened though in relation to time with original attack.
Best to explained it visually would be its like i am horizontal flipping a picture
for example use move attack with > angle i then use Projection Flip and its now become a < angle.
Puts Chakra into the shot but it acts more like a string to the attack then. using this jutsu you slap the back of string[shoulder sort of area] and move it to the other shoulder flipping the attack. [this is visible and a gray line from the shoulder, to back of projectile].

Damage is limited by justu Rank though type[depends on projectile]
1.Bullet bruises, 2. blade cuts. 3.fire or similar burns.

Name: Reload instantly
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: C
Type: Supplement
Element: N/a
Range: N/a
Specialty: Bukijutsu
Duration: instant
Cooldown: 3 post
Description: allow you to reload a gun, Due to being a unit of animation the damage will be reflected/Limited by the justu Rank:[bullets will do minor bruising, or minor 1st degree tissue damage]
pours Chakra into the gun making bullets inside the gun, weather it be the chamber or Clip.
15 chakra

Name: Impact
Canon/Custom:Custom
Rank: A
Type: Supplement
Element: Primary Element of user
Range: N/a[ depends on weapon
Specialty: Bukijutsu
Duration: instant
Cooldown: 2 post [scales up based on rank]
Description: Inserts chakra into your weapon charging them to inflict more damage based on rank of this skill.
25 chakra| 10 chakra per turn

Fire Element :can deal major 3rd-degree burns and possibly even 4th-degree tissue damage

Earth Element:Will pierce directly through an individual causing great pain and damage.

Water Element: causing major damage on the insides of target leaving the out side unharmed. shatter bones and damage organs additionally water hits for a 10m knock-back

Wind Element: Cuts right through the individual after would continues to travel on other side of them... pulling them back 10m [

Name: Pressure Chakra shots
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: D-S
Type: Offensive
Element: N/a
Range: N/a[depends on weapon]
Specialty: Bukijutsu
Duration: instant
Cooldown: 3 post
Description: Put a bit of Chakra into projectile which can apply pressure to the project tile, turning it and such[with mind]... at same time that Chakra could be forced into 2 directions focusing around the centre splinting it in 2 by force, using same mean to turn bullet just in a conflict seance.
Splinting the bullet will cause the damage of each part to lose 1 rank of damage. Additionally control of projectile control is limited to 0-90 degree angles, and Horizontal/vertical motions through barrel rolls.
Damage will scale with justu
D=Minor bruising
C=Major external bruising (possibly able to fracture bone)
B=Able to break bones with concussive force
A=Pierce directly through an individual, or shatter bones
S=Able to rend people apart with ease, crush even bone to dust



Last edited by Cadareria Wincester. on Fri Aug 29, 2014 7:59 am; edited 7 times in total

Hayato

Hayato


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When you say chukka, I believe you mean chakra. Please edit it to say that.

Clans can not have SS-Rank jutsu. And you may only have one S-Rank or scaling jutsu as clan jutsu, not two.

One does not simply change the route of projectiles or split one to two. It must have a mechanism, which most likely needs to be it's own jutsu.

Reload instantly: What is the mechanism this is working through? an arrow won't just magically move itself from the quiver to a drawn bow.

Projection flip: once again, I need a mechanism for this to be viable. And you should probably elaborate more clearly exactly what is going on in this jutsu because I'm not really sure by this write up.

Impact: if it would have different results depending on what element is used, those must be stated. this really seems more like a maintainable jutsu. If not then it would simply last a post or a single attack. Giving it "charges" in the way it is now isn't something we really work with. And damage based on the rank of the jutsu needs to be specified as far as what it would do at each rank.

Cadareria Wincester.

Cadareria Wincester.


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Spoiler:
Well figured this just be easy to reply before editing, so you don't need to read again and again.

Can you briefly just start rank wise what i am allowed because the clan guidelines: (What jutsu is unique to your clan? There can be a max of four - with a limit of 1 S / SS rank jutsu, and 1 Scaling Jutsu.) just so i know for sure. anyway moving onto the mechanism of each one in how i picture.

1. Projection Flip well best to explained it visually would be its like i am horizontal flipping a picture
for example use move attack with > angle i then use Projection Flip and its now become a < angle.
i didn't think of a mechanism at the time but what i could think of was, put the chakka into the shot but it acts more like a string to the attack then. using this jutsu you slap the back of string[shoulder sort of area] and move it to the other shoulder flipping the attack.

2.
Reload instantly: well in terms of gun your poor chakka into the gun making bullets inside the gun , though i see your point this might not work with a bow.. since a gun has a magazine to act as a casing for it, while a bow doesn't.

3. Impact i will make as a maintainable
[i know i need be more detailed, here and such but wanted to run the concepts for each element see if viable first]
Fire : D ....... C........B.........A.........S
First Degree Burns....Second Degee ....so on [ S ignites target]
Wind = just be more powerful cuts, with knock backs
Water = Focus on damage internally with knock backs
Earth = just more stronger each level.


4.Additional skills are the changing of projectile routes, along with being able to split 1 into 2.

well this i wanted to be a passive that everything fired people from this clan, put a bit of chakka into which can apply pressure to the project tile, turning it and such... at same time that chakka could be forced into 2 directions focusing around the centre splinting it in 2 by force, using same mean to turn bullet.

thank you and if you have any ideas, outside of standard review things fell free to hit me

Hayato

Hayato


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You're allowed up to 4 free clan jutsu. They can be of any rank except for SS. But you may only have one free scaling jutsu or one free S-Rank (Can be scaled to S).

Projection flip: For counterplay purposes, the additional attack would need to be clearly visible.

Reload instantly: We don't really use modern guns on Saga. You can't have like, a submachine gun for example. Because of the speed restriction put on projectiles at rank trying to use modern guns would also be problematic. But if you are using chakra to create a unit of ammunition, then the damage that unit created is capable of dealing would be scaled to the rank of the jutsu.

Impact: Details regarding what level of damage is acceptable at a given rank is outlined in the jutsu guidelines.

4.) It can't be a passive thing. It needs to be a jutsu, or it can't exist in that form.

Cadareria Wincester.

Cadareria Wincester.


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Bump edited the jutsus in main thing.

Hayato

Hayato


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"Chakra" not chakka or chukku

"Can channel chakra into weapon used for buffs in damage, speed, noise hiding and more creative stuff. [can channel their chukka into themselves unless having a second specialization."

This entire bit is largely unnecessary. Chakra flow through weapons is an inherent trait of bukijutsu. Chakra flow through one's body is taijutsu.


(What is your clan bad at?) needs to be removed in the finalized write up.


I'll be back to deal with the jutsu.

Cadareria Wincester.

Cadareria Wincester.


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Ryūsei wrote:"Chakra" not chakka or chukku

"Can channel chakra into weapon used for buffs in damage, speed, noise hiding and more creative stuff. [can channel their chukka into themselves unless having a second specialization."

This entire bit is largely unnecessary. Chakra flow through weapons is an inherent trait of bukijutsu. Chakra flow through one's body is taijutsu.


(What is your clan bad at?) needs to be removed in the finalized write up.

I'll be back to deal with the jutsu.

Made the changes em.. not sure if men't to bump but bump

Bokuden

Bokuden


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In the kkg, are they taking those special characteristics without taking drawbacks?

In the drawbacks, I'm assuming they are taking Hesitant (Element). If they are already unable to learn more than two specializations, Hesitant (Specialization) isn't really a drawback. If not, you could remove that bit. They both do the same thing more or less.

For the projection flip jutsu, what kind of damage would the second attack be doing. Being a C-Rank jutsu, it's lethality potential is kind of limited.

Reload instanty, you could use chakra to create ammunition, but like the previous jutsu, its damage capabilities are limited by its rank.

Impact: How is the water version doing only internal damage while leaving the outside untouched ?

Pressure Chakra Shots: I'm fine with this increasing damage, but there has to be a limit as to how much control they have over the trajectory of the shot. Also, unless splitting the shot drastically decreases its damage potential, that part would probably be better served removed.

Cadareria Wincester.

Cadareria Wincester.


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Bokuden wrote:In the kkg, are they taking those special characteristics without taking drawbacks?

In the drawbacks, I'm assuming they are taking Hesitant (Element). If they are already unable to learn more than two specializations, Hesitant (Specialization) isn't really a drawback. If not, you could remove that bit. They both do the same thing more or less.

Well in terms of special characteristics, i have it so far that they are taking 2 positive and 2 negative. Hesitant Specialization and one Track mind.

And you miss read the drawback..they can only use 2 specialization
because they have hesitant [specialization]

The characteristic = -1 specialization and clan causes an additional -1 specialization
they also have the negative one track minded
This works out as a 2 for 2
Specialist & Ace Eye vs Hesitant with an additional -1  and one track mind.
If i need to reword it let me know
[quote="Bokuden"]For the projection flip jutsu, what kind of damage would the second attack be doing. Being a C-Rank jutsu, it's lethality potential is kind of limited. Edited to say C rank damage[type depends on projectile] Like a bullet cause bruises, blade = cuts or if it was some sort of fire round it would burn.

Reload instanty, you could use chakra to create ammunition, but like the previous jutsu, its damage capabilities are limited by its rank.
Changed word reflected to Limited, though i still think reflected bet word.

Impact: How is the water version doing only internal damage while leaving the outside untouched ?simply the bullet will dissolve/ disappear on impact but the kinetic motion of the bullet will still be travelling through the body of target.

Pressure Chakra Shots: I'm fine with this increasing damage, but there has to be a limit as to how much control they have over the trajectory of the shot. Also, unless splitting the shot drastically decreases its damage potential, that part would probably be better served removed.

edited [ that splitting shot will lower damage rank by one and that control is limited to 90degree turn[tops] or horizontal /vertical barrel roll motions

Bokuden

Bokuden


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Specify that the Hesistant they are taking is Hesitant: Specialization. If not, it changes the effect.

Any instance where you mention a jutsu being limited by jutsu rank needs to be replaced by exact values appropriate for that rank, which can be found in the jutsu guidelines.

Impact: The duration is instantaneous, meaning that this is a single fire round, therefore it should not have a maintenance cost. Also, how exactly does this work? Would you just be firing a round purely of concentrated chakra of that element?

There needs to be a mechanism of how you are manipulating the flight path of the projectile after it is mid air, fuuton maybe? A 90 degree instant turn is way too sharp. I'd honestly prefer if you could manipulate the flight patterns, but that they were set upon firing (So you could curve a bullets flight, but not indefinitely).

I'm also not sure what you mean by conflict seance. I'm torn about even allowing the split shot in this form, especially since this jutsu is already doing damage and allowing flight pattern manipulation.

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