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1The Inugami Empty The Inugami Fri Jul 11, 2014 3:51 am

IIZEDII

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The Inugami 19811022


Clan: Inugami
Kekkei Genkai: Human Hound
Elements: N/A
Specialization: Kuchiyose[Must be taken]

Location: Scattered

Clan History: The clan originated from nothing but an experiment, indicating, the clan was not born, but created, through scientific means, they were created as merely a weapon to use in the war against other great nations, by an underground group serving ass soldiers, pawns for simple  wars, mere weapons, use them, and once they're broken, they're thrown like yesterday's garbage, not even bothering to lend them a moment of silence, they acted on nothing but commands, should one even attempt to go help  a one of their own, they're immediately killed off, they were taught: the only reason of their existence is to fight, they shouldn't feel any connections or attachments, the only thing they should do is to serve their masters.

However, they still felt emotions, and it is these emotions that destroyed a part of kirigakure, the clansmen led by inugami the strongest man among the human hounds, the plans made by this group would be exposed to the light of the public, and eventually were all arrested, but the hounds have committed treason despite their situation they were wanted criminals, they knew so and still they fought for their precious lives, until they were found in the storms of Sunagakure by the the Hokage, the Hokage whom adopted them into the hidden leaf village.
They began acting like normal humans, socializing with others, fighting for their beliefs, and remaining loyal to the village hidden behind the leaves, they may be not from the fire nation, but having been accepted by it, acknowledged by it, that alone was enough, to light the flames of the village within them.

They were known to have good relationship with the inuzuka, since both clans symbolized dogs, but each had their own way of fighting, while the inuzuka had the attributes of dogs, the Inugami were half dogs, but nothing stopped the clans from developing such a deep bond, most of the clan members served the inuzuka to express their loyalty.

Kirigakure, however, warned the hidden leaves village, and threatened to attack it, if they continue to harbor their wanted criminals, the clan was oblivious of that truth, but when a clansman spread the word, they wore the mask of betrayal, and abandoned the village, leaving a letter to the village's Hokage, informing him of their decision and that they'll continue to serve from the shadows, in secrecy, from then they remained a group of wandering shinobi, or scattered families.


Kekkei Genkai Description: The clan was not formed but created, through scientific means, of course. The first generation of the clan was the one infused with the cells and the chakra of a hound, and were not completely stable, the latter generations clansmen came much more stable, and are much more stronger, their DNA finally stabilized, reaching a balanced state, between a half dog and a half human. The clan's abilities are much more combat suited, which is why they were mostly shinobi soldiers, a nickname clansmen go by is: War's hell hounds.


Drawbacks:  N/A


Members: Heine Inugami Rammsteiner


Kekkei Genkai Jutsu:

Name: Hound's Howl 
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: D
Type: Defensive
Element: N/A
Range: 1  Meters radius
Specialty: Kuchiyose[Hound Human]
Duration:Instant
Cooldown: 4 posts
Description: The clansman summons the vocal folds of a hound for a moment, and let's out a loud howl, one that matches a trained ninja dog, the howl is a sound wave, created by the powerful vocal folds of dogs, and does not require chakra, summoning the vocal folds, however, does. The sound wave deflects E-rank projectiles(not enhanced by chakra), and pushes targets within one meters radius, five meters away.


Name: Hound's Struggle
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: C-S
Type: Defensive
Element: N/A
Range: N/A
Specialty: [Kuchiyose] Hound Human
Duration: Maintainable C-B:-5 Chakra per post/A-S:-10 Chakra per post
Cooldown: 3 post+maintained posts
Description: The user assumes the pose of a hound, as they summon  a giant structure of a dog's skeleton, the dog may be maintained, with different chakra costs, but despite the rank it can guard either from  two techniques of an equal rank, and three of a lower rank, or four when the jutsu is two ranks below.
Hound's size:
C: Height 6 meters/Length:  6 meters/ Width: 4 meters

B: Height 10 meters/Length: 8 meters/ Width: 6 meters
A: Height 15 meters/Length: 10 meters/ Width: 8 meters
S: Height 18 meters/Length: 12 meters/ Width: 10 meters


Name: Hound's Strike
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: C
Type: Offensive
Element: N/A
Range: 20
Specialty: Kuchiyose[Hound Human]
Duration: Instant
Cooldown: 7 posts
Description: The user assumes the pose of a hound, and focuses their chakra as they summon the structure of a hound's skeleton, the user then decides the direction of the strike(aims)and unleashes the attack, that must be done in one post as this jutsu is an instant jutsu. The attack is done by the large arm of of the hound, which merely strikes the opponent and disappears(hound size: Hieght: 4 meters/Length: 4 meters/ Width: 2.5 meters)

Damage: Major external bruising
Speed: 25 meters per second


Name: Hound's Sense
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: C
Type: Supplementary 
Element: N/A
Range: 20 Meters radius
Specialty: Kuchiyose[Hound Human]
Duration: Maintainable(5CH per post)
Cooldown: 3+Maintained posts
Description: The user closes his/her eyes, and summons the senses of a hound out of his/her modified cells, which enables the user of using them, the user's hearing and smelling senses enable him to sense the location of targets within 20 meters radius.



Last edited by IIZEDII on Mon Jul 14, 2014 6:42 pm; edited 8 times in total

2The Inugami Empty Re: The Inugami Sat Jul 12, 2014 11:14 am

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You can't have more than one scaling jutsu as free clan jutsu.

Also, if you want a 30 chakra passive boost to your pool, you will need more permanent, substantial, and unavoidable drawbacks.

3The Inugami Empty Re: The Inugami Sat Jul 12, 2014 12:51 pm

IIZEDII

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Bokuden wrote:You can't have more than one scaling jutsu as free clan jutsu.

Also, if you want a 30 chakra passive boost to your pool, you will need more permanent, substantial, and unavoidable drawbacks.
Edits made, thank you Bokuden.

Bump~

4The Inugami Empty Re: The Inugami Sat Jul 12, 2014 7:56 pm

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Hound's howl- D-Rank max knockback is 5m

Hound's struggle- Maintainable defensive jutsu can no longer block higher ranked techniques. Instead of saying 20m and lowers by 5m each rank, it would be simpler to just give it's exact size (length and height) at each rank individually.

Hound's strike- The way that the jutsu description is formatted is... hard to follow. Do you think you can clean it up a bit?

Hound's sense- Is this just a location thing?

5The Inugami Empty Re: The Inugami Sat Jul 12, 2014 8:31 pm

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Bokuden wrote:Hound's howl- D-Rank max knockback is 5m

Hound's struggle- Maintainable defensive jutsu can no longer block higher ranked techniques. Instead of saying 20m and lowers by 5m each rank, it would be simpler to just give it's exact size (length and height) at each rank individually.

Hound's strike- The way that the jutsu description is formatted is... hard to follow. Do you think you can clean it up a bit?

Hound's sense- Is this just a location thing?
Requested edits have been made, thanks for the fast reply~

6The Inugami Empty Re: The Inugami Sat Jul 12, 2014 11:17 pm

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Inugami Clan wrote:The clansmen are also faster than average shinobi gaining a permanent +1 to speed. Clansmen perception receives +1, permanent(This is thanks to their acute hearing and strong sense of smell).

Specify that this is a +1 tier, as opposed to a +1 rank, meaning if their Speed or Perception stat is originally D-rank, the clan boost would make it D-1, not C.

The +1 damage from Medical Ninjutsu ... does this mean that medical ninjutsu aimed to heal will not be affected, or will it be -1 rank in effectiveness as well?

For most of the jutsu - Sound is not an element, leave it blank if no element is required. For Specialty, it has to be existing site specializations, as seen here.

7The Inugami Empty Re: The Inugami Sat Jul 12, 2014 11:25 pm

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Edits made, thanks for your assistance.
EDIT:

Also the Human Hound is the specialty, kind of, these techniques are like abilities of the clan members, since they are dogs.

8The Inugami Empty Re: The Inugami Sun Jul 13, 2014 12:54 am

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In your KKG, instead of the extra note explaining what the boost means, just edit the sentence to say "gaining a permanent +1 tier to speed" - the same with the Perception boost and remove the note.

For drawbacks, taking +1 damage from Seijutsu is one full rank, not a tier - power and damage from specializations or elements are not measured in tiers, those only apply to stats. I'd also like an additional drawback that doesn't deal with having a weakness towards a certain specialization - it's a bit too situational, while your kkg grants permanent increase to your stats.

Jutsu:

Hound's Howl: Range would be 1 meter radius, not 5 m. Specify that only E rank projectiles not enhanced by chakra will be pushed away. For Element, remove "Sound" and leave it blank. For Specialty, this would have to require Ninjutsu, and in brackets, you can put "Hound Human" just to limit it to your clan.

Hound's Struggle: Again, specialty would have to be Ninjutsu, or perhaps Taijutsu, with Hound Human in brackets beside it. For your duration, rewrite it so that it's clearer. Something like this: C-B: -5 chakra per post, A-S: -10 chakra per post.

Inugami Clan wrote:or four when the jutsu is two tiers below.

Change tiers to ranks.

Hound's Strike: Ninjutsu for specialty, Hound Human in brackets. Describe the attack. Right now I see something about aiming, and unleashing an attack - but how does it work, exactly? Is the chakra moving away from the user's body, or does the user have to charge at the target themselves? Also, remove the (5 CH) note in the description - C rank techniques all cost 15 chakra to start, unless you mean for that 5 chakra to be additional (though unnecessary).

9The Inugami Empty Re: The Inugami Sun Jul 13, 2014 5:41 am

IIZEDII

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And bump, I saw it more appropriate as Kuchiyose since their cells are infused with dog cells, and that they merely had to summon out the abilities of a dog as something more....adequate? Also I changed the clan's drawback from being weak  to Seijutsu to having to take pharmacophobia which will make them very difficult to heal in a battle requiring much more time, and a higher rank healing technique than the needed rank.

Thanks for your help♥
And
Bump..!

10The Inugami Empty Re: The Inugami Sun Jul 13, 2014 10:41 am

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Pharmacophobia itself is a rather basic drawback that doesn't balance the free stats. You'll need something more.

11The Inugami Empty Re: The Inugami Sun Jul 13, 2014 8:18 pm

IIZEDII

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I am bumping this, I wasn't capable of thinking of anything more fitting so if the mods  have an Idea I welcome it with open arms, also thanks for your hard work ♥

12The Inugami Empty Re: The Inugami Mon Jul 14, 2014 6:18 pm

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I couldn't even really begin to tell you what you should do for your clan. My best advice would simply be to check out other clans for inspiration or ask for ideas in the chat box.

13The Inugami Empty Re: The Inugami Mon Jul 14, 2014 6:42 pm

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bump should be balanced now, thanks for your help.

14The Inugami Empty Re: The Inugami Mon Jul 14, 2014 7:28 pm

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You know, all of the clan jutsu are really more ninjutsu than Kuchiyose lol.

15The Inugami Empty Re: The Inugami Mon Jul 14, 2014 7:42 pm

IIZEDII

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I know ^^" but I reworded them fine you know I think, which added to the clan's uhhh what do you call it? Kekeigenkai, they were supposed to be abilities of the clan members, but I made that they summon the dogs chakra in their cells which allows them to use  their jutsus....
Yea, sort of a way to lock them to this clan, if that's fine with you

16The Inugami Empty Re: The Inugami Mon Jul 14, 2014 7:48 pm

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Manipulating cells is medical. You can't do that with kuchiyose alone.

17The Inugami Empty Re: The Inugami Mon Jul 14, 2014 7:58 pm

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Basic idea is that the dog techniques were sealed in them and that they use them by summoning them >.< nothing is written about seals on their cells but it's just the idea that their cells were modified

Can I get approval.......Please ;_;

18The Inugami Empty Re: The Inugami Mon Jul 14, 2014 8:01 pm

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And if you start getting into seals, that will require fuuinjutsu lol. What you've written is straight up ninjutsu. I can't just approve it as something else.

19The Inugami Empty Re: The Inugami Mon Jul 14, 2014 8:08 pm

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Bokuden wrote:And if you start getting into seals, that will require fuuinjutsu lol. What you've written is straight up ninjutsu. I can't just approve it as something else.
God Bokuden you're such a tease...Never mind this clan, a Hound is a hunter dog, guess I'll be a hunter, you can drop this clan X_X.

“A true hunter never returns empty handed...”


*ZED loses one tier in clan, jutsu, character, and item making*

20The Inugami Empty Re: The Inugami Mon Jul 14, 2014 8:17 pm

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I'm sorry lol, but specialization restrictions aren't flexible. If you just made them ninjutsu I would be able to work with them.

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