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1Akata Clan Empty Akata Clan Fri Sep 06, 2013 8:46 pm

Takeshii

Takeshii


D-rank
Symbol: Akata Clan AtakaCrest-Copy


Clan: Akata Clan

Kekkei Genkai: Takagan (Hawk Eye)

Elements: Wind and Lightning

Specialization: Ninjutsu, Bokijutsu (Onojutsu and Kyujutsu), Kuchiyose (Birds of Prey), Seijutsu (Birds of Prey), Fuuinjutsu

Requirements: If one wishes to create a character, in order to acquire the Doujutsu. They're character must start with Ace Eye, and Born Ill.

Location: Scattered

Clan History:

The Akata Clan is a relatively young clan, in fact their clan history only goes back about 200 years. The founding member of the Akata Clan, Akata Karasu, was a shinobi of Kumogakure, and a renowned scout. Legendary for his powers of perception. One day, he was out on a mission when a giant hawk was said to pick the young shinobi up and bring it to the mountain of the Taka Tribe of Giant Birds of Prey. These birds taught Akata Karasu many things, but the most important thing they gave him was his Doujutsu, the Takagan. Named after the tribe that gave it to him.

With this new doujutsu, his scouting powers went from being reknowned to being revered. Over the years until his death, he developed the doujutsu to its fullest potential, and wrote his knowledge down in the clan almanac. The second generation of the Akata clan was headed by his first son Akata Otoshi, who suplemented the doujutsu abilities with the Clan Martial Art which he developed by studying other arts and taking the best things from all forms available at the time, and combining them into a well-rounded hybrid style which he dubbed "Taka-Te" or Hawk Hand. He died at a young age, but not before giving his knowledge to his first son, Akata Kiyoshi. Akata Kiyoshi developed the clan's weapon styles, and created the clan's signature weapon the Chakram, which became a staple in all the clan's art. Unfortunately he was born with a prediliction towards other men, and so did not bare an heir.

A period of 100 years past, where the Clan remained stagnant, and ungrowing with no heir. The once powerful clan dispersed from Kumogakure and lost their roots. However, one day an heir was born in the original city Kumogakure. Akata Tsubame, the clan's savior. The first clansmen worthy of becoming the Clan's head, and so word was given to all the corners of the world that the clan was reborn like the mighty pheonix. Akata Tsubame inherited the Clan Almanac containing in it all of the Clan's knowledge, and jutsu. He grew into a very respectable shinobi, on an equal scale as the previous clan heads. He has high hopes for his clan's future and hopes to bring it to new levels. And hopefully regain the trust of the great Hawks, from the Taka Tribe.

Kekkei Genkai Description:

Hawk Eye: Hawk Eye is a Doujutsu which predominantly effects ones abilities of perception. One with this doujutsu will find that they have far greater accuracy, visual acquity, and visual range than normal. At every stage of this kekkei genkai, the weilder of the doujutsu can 'Zoom' their vision to a greater distance. Also at higher stages of the doujutsu, it will affect their visual scope, and further aid them. Asthetically, when this doujutsu is released, the sunflower in the center of the Akata eye grows, taking up more of the iris. At higher levels the sclera (white part of the eye) becomes darker. At the highest stage the eye resembles that of a bird of prey, the iris and pupil take up a great deal of the eye and the sclera becomes dark. Those members of the clan born with the capacity to use this jutsu later in life are also born with a unique disorder that is a double sided blade. On one side their visual prowess is far greater than normal, and their powers of perception are thusly boosted as well (Ace Eye), however they suffer from eye pains, migraines, and loss of visual focus when over-exerted (Born Ill).

This doujutsu has 4 stages, each has a requirement to unlock.

Standard
Akata Clan AtakaEyeNormal-Copy
This is the standard Akata eye. It offers no additional benefits other than standard eye sight.

First Release: Clarity
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This is the first release of the Akata Eye. In order to unlock this release one must be a D-Rank/Genin, pay 250 Ryo, and post a 1000 word training thread. The member must do a completely selfless action in order to protect another living thing.
Benefits while active:

  • +1 tier to reaction time
  • Zoom vision up to x5. (+1 Perception within Central Vision, -1 Reaction Time outside of their central vision.)

Passive Benefits:

  • Kinesthetic Awareness and Coordination: Members of this family have an enhanced sense of their own body. Because of this word count for Taijutsu and Bokijutsu are reduced by 50%. This passive skill is a permanent buff, that occurs whether or not the doujutsu is activated, and is gained as soon as the first stage is unlocked.

Chakra Cost: 10/post

Second Release: Hunt
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This is the second form of the Akata Clan doujutsu. It's owner must be a C Rank/Chuunin, pay 500 Ryo, and have a 2000 word training thread.

Benefits while Active:

  • +1 tier to reaction time
  • x10 Zoom (replaces x5 zoom ability, +1 Perception within their central vision, -2 Reaction Time within their peripheral vision)
  • "Hunting Sight" Ability unlocked.

    • Hunting Sight: While activated, the user's visual spectrum is darkened, however allies are painted blue, enemies and combatants are painted red, and mission specific targets are painted gold. This ability utilizes the knowledge of the shinobi using the techniques. Thus if a member of their team is a double agent, he will still be painted blue because the shinobi is under the impression that they are an ally. This ability uses visually ready body language cues, which the Akata clan member's Doujutsu picks up on, in order to decipher the intent of others. Those who appear to have a negative intent, or violent intent towards the user are painted red. Those who appear to have a positive intent, or passive/helpful intent towards the user are painted blue. People and Items which are mission objectives are painted gold.
      Chakra Cost: 15 additional Chakra/post. Must be activated during doujutsu.



Chakra Cost: 15 Chakra/Post

Third Release: Life
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This is the second form of the Akata Clan doujutsu. It's owner must be a B Rank/Special Jounin, pay 1000 Ryo, and have a 3000 word training thread.

Benefits while Active:

  • +1 tiers to reaction time
  • x25 Zoom (replaces x10 Zoom, +2 tiers to perception, -3 tiers to reaction time)
  • "Life Sight" Ability unlocked

    • Life Sight: When activated this ability allows the Shinobi to see all chakra sources within their field of vision, and for as far as they can see. The chakra sources are seen as masses of fiery white. The rest of their visual field is darkened similarly to Hunting Sight. The chakra masses take the shape of their source. So a human's chakra mass would take the general shape of a human. A deer's chakra mass would take the general shape of a deer, etc. Just because they can see all the chakra sources, doesn't mean that they can differentiate between friend and foe using this ability. On the contrary, they cannot. Please note that this sees the chakra pool. So beings that can reduce their chakra pool in order to avoid being sensed will also mask themselves from life sight. However it is imposible to completely reduce your pool to nothing, thus life sight could potentially still see someone masking themselves but to a much less degree, and it would appear to them as a MUCH smaller being (like a bug or something).
      Chakra Cost: 20 additional chakra/post



Chakra Cost: 20 chakra/post

Stage Four: Intent
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This is the fourth form of the Akata Clan doujutsu. In order to unlock this form, the shinobi must be an A Rank/Jounin, pay 2000 Ryo, and post a 5000 word training thread.

Benefits while Active:

  • +2 tiers to reaction time
  • x50 zoom (replaces x25 zoom). (+2 tiers to perception within their central vision, -4 tiers to reaction time within their peripheral vision.)
  • "Predator's Sight" Unlocked

    • Predator's Sight: When activated this visual ability projects the user's intention onto their visual field. If the user of this ability wanted to hit a water drop falling from the wing of an eagle with a senbon needle, while a gust of wind blew past. A visual line would be projected onto their field of vision showing where to throw the senbon, and the real time trajectory that needle would take once thrown. This ability uses common knowledge and readily percievable information in order to opperate. It also works in reverse, to track attacks by using the trajectory of the attack along with readily available information to tell the user where the attack will land before it does. This characteristic is MOST effective outside of a 5 foot area, and makes most projectiles pretty much useless against the Ataki who weilds this ability. This ability is purely intent driven, and whatever the user's intention is will be projected onto their field of vision, and nothing more. As a side effect, visual reaction and perception are increased by an additional tier while activated.
      Chakra Cost: 30 additional chakra/post




Chakra Cost: 30 chakra/post

Alternate Fourth Release: Truth
This eye looks the same as the fourth release. In order to unlock this form, they must have unlocked the fourth release, acquire ALL sight abilities, pay an additional 1500 ryo, and an additional 3000 word training thread. They must also do a completely selfless act of self sacrifice for another, where they almost died in order to protect the life of another. In addition, they must have an unbreakable bond with their pet bird (must be able to provide at least 3 threads to show evidence of this bond).

Benefits while Active

  • Same benefits as Fourth Release: Intent
  • x100 Zoom (replaces x50 Zoom, +2 perception in their central vision, -4 tiers reaction time within their peripheral vision)
  • Hunting Sight is now a free ability and always active while fourth release: truth is active. As an additional benefit, the visual field is no longer darkened while hunting sight is active.
  • "True Sight" unlocked.

    • True Sight: This is the combined ability of Life Sight and Hunting Sight. Chakra Masses of Life Sight are painted as with Hunting Sight. As an additional effect, this measures intent on a SEEMINGLY psychic level. Double Agents and Traitors, will be painted red as though they were enemies when using this technique. However, unlike the other sight abilities, zooming may NOT be used in conjunction with this ability.
      Chakra Cost: 40 additional chakra/post



Chakra Cost: 40 chakra/post

*notes: The average unobstructed visual distance for an average human with 20/20 vision for the sake of simplicity is about 1000 ft. When zooming their vision, the Akata clansmen's peripheral vision is narrowed a great deal pending on how much they zoom their vision, while their central vision becomes more clear. At the peak zoom (50x), objects within a foot of the viewer can be viewed to an almost microscopic level. To this effect, Zooming is MOST effective when stationary and hidden as it leaves the Akata clansmen increasingly vulnerable to a close quarters attack.


Drawbacks:

-All Members-

  • Members who wish to acquire the clan Doujutsu must begin with the Special Characteristic "Born Ill". (This is a Clan Weakness and cannot be counter-balanced.)
  • Members of the Akata Clan have difficulty breaking genjutsu. Pay double to break genjutsu. (this doesn't mean they can't recognize genjutsu, only that they have difficulty breaking them)
  • Akata Clan Members CANNOT take Genjutsu as a specialty.
  • Akata Clan Members have difficulty mastering extra elements. They must take the Special Characteristic "Hesitant (Element)".


-Takagan Users-

  • Zooming Vision removes peripheral vision, and leaves the user open to close quarters attacks. (-1 perception per stage zooming within their peripheral vision.)
  • Using the sight abilities darkens the visual field leaving them nearly blind with the exception of the additions to their visual field granted by the sight ability. (Predator's Sight is the exception).


Members: (Members of the clan can be updated here)

Kekkei Genkai Jutsu:

Name: Mini-Whirlwind Technique
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: D Rank
Type: Supplementary
Element: Wind
Range: 4 inches from palm
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: Impact
Cooldown: 2 posts for one, 3 posts for 2
Description: The shinobi simple focuses wind chakra into their hand in a swirling pattern. This creates a whirling mass of air in the palm of the users hand. One may create a whirlwind in both hands. When these two masses of air are pressed together they'll burst apart with enough force to stagger anyone within 3m of the blast and can disperse about 3m of smoke or dust within the same post. When pressed into the ground they can kick up about 3m of loose dirt or sand a peice. If pressed into a body of water it can cause a 3m wide whirlpool. If pressed into an enemy it can cause minor 1st degree wind burns. If two are pressed together into an enemy, it'll cause minor 1st degree wind burns, and knock the enemy up to 3m back

Name: Lightning Release: Lightning Disk Technique
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: C Rank
Type: Offensive
Element: Raiton
Range: 30m
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: Instant
Cooldown: 4 posts
Description: The user will use the Rat, Dog, and than Monkey seal than open they hand as though cupping a ball and using the same principle as Mini-Whirlwind technique but with Raiton Chakra, create a small disk of about the size of a CD between his hands. He can than fire this disk(s) up to 30m and fly 20m/s. On impact this disk cuts and burns a moderate amount (Minor 2nd degree burns and 1 inch cuts for the single disk, and major 1st degree burns and 3/4 inch cuts for 2 disks, and minor 1st degree burns and 1/2 inch cuts for 3.), and stuns the area it hits for 1 post (If it hits an arm it stuns the arm, similar to an electric jolt to that area). Up to three disks can be created, on one charge. However, the more disks that are created the weaker each disk is.

Name: Chakram Whirlwind
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: C
Type: Offensive
Element: Fuuinjutsu
Range: 5m radius
Specialty: Onojutsu
Duration: 1 post
Cooldown: 3 posts
Description: The user charges fuuton chakra into their chakram, and spins at high speeds with their chakram outstretched releasing hundreds of air blades around them. The blades fly at 15m/s up to 5m away. The technique can be performed in the air, or while jumping. The air blades are potent enough to repel E-rank projectiles. Enemies unfortunate enough to be caught in the 5m radius around the user will have their clothing shredded and suffer hundreds of 1/2 inch cuts to any exposed flesh.



Last edited by Takeshii on Sun Aug 10, 2014 2:04 pm; edited 9 times in total (Reason for editing : Revamp in progress)

2Akata Clan Empty Re: Akata Clan Tue Sep 10, 2013 7:58 am

Yōsei

Yōsei


S-rank
needs way more downsides for what its giving you.

for example, "Must take Born ill and cannot balance it with a positive special characteristic".

id like to see something about how much more susceptible they are to close quarters engagements while zooming in terms of rank. how much more susceptible are they while zooming?

also how does their doujutsu interact with Stealth based jutsu which conceal your chakra presence?

3Akata Clan Empty Re: Akata Clan Tue Sep 10, 2013 8:13 am

Takeshii

Takeshii


D-rank
Added two new weaknesses, and expanded on their Zooming weakness. Added a note at the end of Life Sight (which is the only sight ability that actually allows them to see chakra).

4Akata Clan Empty Re: Akata Clan Tue Sep 10, 2013 8:29 am

Yōsei

Yōsei


S-rank
Approved.

5Akata Clan Empty Re: Akata Clan Sun Aug 03, 2014 7:17 pm

Takeshii

Takeshii


D-rank
Revamped clan Kekkei Genkai, changed the benefits to the tier system, and added a speed boost to later releases.

6Akata Clan Empty Re: Akata Clan Sun Aug 03, 2014 8:39 pm

Bokuden

Bokuden


D-rank
The stat buffs are still too high. The eye might be able to give you a +2 to your physical abilities in total, but not +2 to two different stats, especially since the eyes come with other abilities. As a reference, the Sharingan and Byakugan now only give a +1 to reaction time now. You can have higher stat buffs than that, but that would be front loading your power into that aspect of the eye and force power away from the other abilities.

7Akata Clan Empty Re: Akata Clan Sun Aug 03, 2014 8:50 pm

Takeshii

Takeshii


D-rank
I removed the speed bonus, it only enhances reaction time now.

8Akata Clan Empty Re: Akata Clan Sun Aug 10, 2014 11:51 am

Sanosuke

Sanosuke


D-rank
Please describe what you mean by zoom for the takigan? It sounds like a buff to one's perception.

Mini-Whirlwind Technique: Change the range from impact to instant. And the range from 4 inches to contact.

Lightning Disk Technique: No stuns at C Rank my friend, please change that.

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