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1Vitam, Clades [Jutsu Registration]  Empty Vitam, Clades [Jutsu Registration] Sun Apr 13, 2014 8:58 pm

Bellum

Bellum


D-rank
Academy Jutsu:

D-Rank Jutsu That Need Approval:

C-rank Jutsu That Need Approval:

Only going for three of my freebies at the moment.



Last edited by Bellum on Mon Apr 14, 2014 10:48 pm; edited 2 times in total

2Vitam, Clades [Jutsu Registration]  Empty Re: Vitam, Clades [Jutsu Registration] Mon Apr 14, 2014 9:14 pm

Keiko

Keiko


D-rank
Academy Library techniques, along with Clan Jutsu (if applicable) are automatically approved and can be moved into your jutsu list.

Stahp: Full body paralysis cannot occur at this rank.

Tunnelling: Give a measurement to the size of the hole (should only fit one person at a time), and how deep the tunnel is (and this should be quite shallow, given that it's a D rank technique). Specify that the tunnelling of the holes is done at regular user movement speed.

Don't Move: "Through means of genjutsu" isn't specific enough. Are they seeing something? Does it just force paralyzation - meaning it's easy to identify as genjutsu and thus easily freed from it? This also isn't getting a 40 meter radius, if you want a radius effect, use the radius measurements from the jutsu guidelines, and drop the duration to a single post. The trigger also cannot be user's sight range, it will have to be something inherently avoidable (even if the chances are small) by the targets.

3Vitam, Clades [Jutsu Registration]  Empty Re: Vitam, Clades [Jutsu Registration] Mon Apr 14, 2014 10:47 pm

Bellum

Bellum


D-rank
Keiko wrote:

Don't Move: "Through means of genjutsu" isn't specific enough. Are they seeing something? Does it just force paralyzation - meaning it's easy to identify as genjutsu and thus easily freed from it? This also isn't getting a 40 meter radius, if you want a radius effect, use the radius measurements from the jutsu guidelines, and drop the duration to a single post. The trigger also cannot be user's sight range, it will have to be something inherently avoidable (even if the chances are small) by the targets.

I would like to argue for my technique.

If one's character is intelligent to notice that the paralysis is genjutsu related then they would be able to do whatever they need to escape it, though there are techniques similar to it that aren't genjutsu so they would need some sort reasoning behind it if they wish to Kai, though they can obviously just Kai out of suspicion.

I suppose I used the word 'radius' in a confusing manner and will proceed to edit it out so as to lessen further confusion.

Ranges per Rank | Detonation radii
E Rank - 0-10m | 1m radius
D Rank - 10-20m | 2-3m radius
C Rank - 20-40m |3-5m radius
B Rank - 40-70m | 5-10m radius
A Rank - 70-100m | 10-25m radius
S Rank - 100-150m | 25-50m radius
SS Rank - 150+ meters | 50m+ radius

As per the ranges for C rank jutsu, the jutsu merely allows the user to stun any victim within his vision as long as they are within 40 meters of him.

From my understanding the jutsu's trigger CAN be the user's sight range as specified in the jutsu rules section here:

Genjutsu
Subject to some debate on its usefulness, genjutsu is a technique which focuses around illusions, by infiltrating chakra by the means of a trigger into an opponents chakra system to cause varying effects by disturbing their flow in certain areas and in certain ways. This could be anything from causing false sensory input, changing the target's perception of reality, or even mentally wearing out the opponent. Thus ALL genjutsu need a trigger, be it by sighting an opponent within a certain range, creating sound, sending a gust of wind infused with yin chakra or by many other unique means... these triggers however, though crafty in nature, MUST BE INHERENTLY AVOIDABLE, however hard it may be to do so, it must be.

One can avoid it be not being in my line of sight.

Everything else has been edited according to your wishes.

4Vitam, Clades [Jutsu Registration]  Empty Re: Vitam, Clades [Jutsu Registration] Tue Apr 15, 2014 12:41 am

Yōsei

Yōsei


S-rank
No stuns at C-rank sorry. Try that jutsu again at B-rank with a drawback or A-rank.

Don't Move is denied.

5Vitam, Clades [Jutsu Registration]  Empty Re: Vitam, Clades [Jutsu Registration] Tue Apr 15, 2014 2:04 am

Bellum

Bellum


D-rank
Uhhh, does that mean the other genjutsu I have that stuns arm and leg movement is denied as well, or may I edit my C rank genjutsu to have the same effect with a larger range?

6Vitam, Clades [Jutsu Registration]  Empty Re: Vitam, Clades [Jutsu Registration] Tue Apr 15, 2014 4:14 am

Yōsei

Yōsei


S-rank
I think your D-rank is also too much as it is. Full arm and leg restriction is too much on a D-rank.

also denied.

7Vitam, Clades [Jutsu Registration]  Empty Re: Vitam, Clades [Jutsu Registration] Tue Apr 15, 2014 12:21 pm

Daraku

Daraku


D-rank
Tunneling - Put in some way for people nearby to feel the tunnels being created, or lower the range to 10 meters. Also, increase the cooldown to at least 5 posts.

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