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1Senju, Yokochima [Jutsu List Update] Empty Senju, Yokochima [Jutsu List Update] Sun Aug 03, 2014 2:14 pm

Yokochima Senju




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Academy Jutsu:

Suiton Jutsu:

Doton Jutsu:

Mokuton Jutsu:


Medical Ninjutsu:



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2Senju, Yokochima [Jutsu List Update] Empty Re: Senju, Yokochima [Jutsu List Update] Mon Aug 04, 2014 9:42 pm

Mikage

Mikage


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Liquid Bullet Technique: Please give this a new name and mark it as Custom, as we already have a library version of the Teppodama technique. This needs a duration, as well as the number of bullets that can be fired per post. Decrease the speed of the bullets according to the new jutsu rules for each of the ranks. Damages may be increased a tad according to new jutsu rules as well, if you wish.

Hidden Earth Technique: This wouldn't just be arms length if the entire body is moving through the earth. Change the range to "self", as well as a max distance (and depth) that you can travel through the earth. Also state the speed at which you can move in the earth, and state what you can do (i.e.. if you can perform jutsu and whatnot) in the earth.

Minor Creation Technique: Please see the jutsu guidelines and change the damage accordingly. This also needs a range, a duration, and a higher cooldown.

Sensor Pollen: Drop the range to a 15 m radius, with just a set duration. Cooldown needs to be at least two posts more than the duration. Remove everything about how the different types of elements apply and simply state that any Fuuton technique can blow the pollen away.

Daisan no Me: I'd like a -1 tier to user speed to make up for the potential increase in perception from the extra eye. Change cooldown to "Duration + 2 posts".

Timber Wolves: Remove the 1-inch cut damage from the charging attack, and decrease the biting damage to 1.5 inch cuts.

Great Forest: This seems really similar to the clan technique Sprigs Cutting Technique … I would prefer it be changed so that it isn't as similar, or replaced with an entirely new technique.

Sprigs Cutting Technique: Please replace this with the new revised version in your clan.

World of Trees Wall: Same as above, replace with new version found in your clan. You may also add in the new Wooden Clones technique in your clan into your jutsu list.

Deep Forest Emergence: This has been removed from your clan, please remove it. It may be learned later on when you reach the appropriate rank.

3Senju, Yokochima [Jutsu List Update] Empty Re: Senju, Yokochima [Jutsu List Update] Mon Aug 04, 2014 11:19 pm

Yokochima Senju




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I have done all of those things. Also i have deleted the Great Forest Technique for now, i will apply for something different later today. If i happen to run out of time, please consider my Jutsu List finished for now.

4Senju, Yokochima [Jutsu List Update] Empty Re: Senju, Yokochima [Jutsu List Update] Mon Aug 04, 2014 11:33 pm

Mikage

Mikage


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Hidden Earth: Please specify whether that -1 is -1 rank, or -1 tier.

Daisan no me: Same as above, this one should just be a -1 tier.

Sensor Pollen: Just give it one set duration, regardless of whether its in air or on the ground. For the extra three posts of tracking outside of the radius, give it an extra maintenance cost of -5 per post.


5Senju, Yokochima [Jutsu List Update] Empty Re: Senju, Yokochima [Jutsu List Update] Tue Aug 05, 2014 2:19 pm

Yokochima Senju




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Done.

6Senju, Yokochima [Jutsu List Update] Empty Re: Senju, Yokochima [Jutsu List Update] Tue Aug 05, 2014 11:40 pm

Mikage

Mikage


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Your jutsu list update is Approved.

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