Clan: Sandā

Kekkei Genkai: Thunder Style

Elements: Raiton - Futon

Specialization: Ninjutsu - Taijutsu

Location: Land of Lightning [ Scattered ]

Clan History: Originating from the Land of Lightning, this branch of ninjutsu appears to be most commonly affiliated with Shinobi from the northern Shinobi nations. However, there have been rare instances where Shinobi from the southern nations have managed to unlock and utilise this devastating line of techniques. In more recent years, the Thunder Style arts have become affiliated with the Land of Sound, thanks to the reign of both Muramasa and Murasaki. Thanks to the awe-inspiring power of the Thunder Style techniques and their rarity, this branch of ninjutsu is classified as a Secret Technique by every Shinobi nation in existence.

Kekkei Genkai Description:The Thunder Style (天術, Ikajutsu),  is an advanced form of Lightning Release, which allows its users to generate bursts of thunder for several offensive and defensive purposes. As its name suggests, Thunder style allows its user to generate and manipulate thunder at will, giving them the power to repel oncoming attacks and shatter every single bone in their opponents' bodies. Some techniques within this branch of ninjutsu actually combine both Lightning Release and Wind Release, creating attacks that can decimate entire villages and mountains in the blink of an eye. The thunder generated by Thunder style is actually a result of the user manipulating their chakra into microscopic air pockets, which then explode simultaneously, creating blasts of thunder. Users of Thunder style ninjutsu tend to be physically strong and durable, as the shock waves created by the thunder hold the potential to damage the user if used improperly. As such, Thunder style users hone their body to such an extent that most of their attacks will not damage them severely if they backfire. Because of this, all Raiton and Fuuton have a -1 effect on their body.

Because of the sage heritage, members have a 20% decrease in WC learning and training Senjutsu


Drawbacks: Relying on their thunder style, members are unable to learn a third or fourth element.

With such dependence on Taijutsu, members are unable to learn Bukijutsu.

Relying on the Nintaijutsu, they are unable to learn Genjutsu.


Kekkei Genkai Jutsu:

Thunder Style Technique:

Howling Beast:

Breaking The Silence:

Limitless Pressure Gauge:

Lightning Release can already create shockwaves using intense vibrations (i.e. sound, which composes thunder). I would prefer if you made this a clan which specializes in it, to avoid locking it to your own element. With all the talk of air pockets, though, you should have Wind as another element for this clan.

added futon, replaced release with style.

removed +1s.

Yuuto Uzumaki wrote:Originating from the Land of Lightning, this branch of ninjutsu appears to be most commonly affiliated with Shinobi from the northern Shinobi nations. However, there have been rare instances where Shinobi from the southern nations have managed to unlock and utilise this devastating line of techniques. In more recent years, the Thunder Style arts have become affiliated with the Land of Sound, thanks to the reign of both Muramasa and Murasaki. Thanks to the awe-inspiring power of the Thunder Style techniques and their rarity, this branch of ninjutsu is classified as a Secret Technique by every Shinobi nation in existence.

This doesn't belong in the KKG description. This can go in the history.

Yuuto Uzumaki wrote:Users of Thunder style ninjutsu tend to be physically strong and durable, as the shock waves created by the thunder hold the potential to damage the user if used improperly. As such, Thunder style users hone their body to such an extent that most of their attacks will not damage them severely if they backfire.

This needs some limits or guidelines. How much damage does their naturally durable bodies reduce? I would suggest doing a -1 rank in damage against all Thunder Style techniques or something along those lines.

You are also gonna need some more drawbacks. You are getting a WC reduction, increased durability, and the Thunder Style. What are the Thunder style's weakness as an element? I'd say at least 2 more drawbacks.

Yuuto Uzumaki wrote:Name: Thunder Style Technique
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: D-rank
Type: Offensive - Defensive
Element: Raiton - Futon
Range: 10 feet
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: Instant
Cooldown: 3 posts
Description: The fundamental technique of the Thunder Style arts, the Ikaton no Jutsu allows its user to generate microscopic air pockets that explode to produce thunder. It also allows the user to manipulate any preexisting thunder, as well. Constantly active, the Ikajutsu is the technique upon which all other techniques within this style revolve around; and, thanks to its versatility, some have called it the most useful. This technique augments any Lightning Release techniques used, increasing their strength and the user's capability to perform them.

This is gonna need some work. It does too much as a D-Rank, as it can be used for offense, defense, is maintainable, augments Raiton, and has a short cooldown. You are going to have to Increase the cooldown to at lease 5. Get rid of the augment section as well. If it is constantly active as you say, it's duration needs to be "Maintainable" and add the chakra cost for keeping it active. Also, We need details as to what kind of damage this jutsu can do. How many jutsu/attacks can it defend against? Keep in mind that this a D-Rank, so it won't be much. Of course, if you want to up the rank, it might be able to do a little more.

Yuuto Uzumaki wrote:Name:Thunder Style: Howling Beast
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: D-rank
Type: Offensive - Defensive
Element: Raiton - Futon
Range: 10 feet
Specialty: Ninjutsu - Taijutsu
Duration: Instant
Cooldown: 3 posts
Description: After channeling their chakra into the palm of their hand, the user of this technique can create several microscopic air pockets are their fist. Once a target has been chosen, the user can either punch the target directly, or punch the air in their general direction, popping these air pockets and causing a shock wave to ripple out. This shock wave holds the potential to break bones at close range, and send opponents flying backwards at long range. The strength of the technique increases with the user's rank, as Jounin users are capable of generating shock waves that can level entire housing districts.

This needs some work as well. How fast does this shock wave move? How wide is the wave? More details please. Also, a D-Rank is not breaking bones in any situation. You will need to reduce the damage considerably. You also need to state how far the jutsu can knock back a target. Lastly, Jutsu have set strengths depending on their rank, not the users. If you want it to get stronger as you get stronger, this will need to be a scaling jutsu.

Yuuto Uzumaki wrote:Name:Thunder Style: Breaking the Silence
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: D-rank
Type: Offensive - Defensive
Element: Raiton - Futon
Range: 10 feet
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: Instant
Cooldown: 3 posts
Description: By channeling their chakra into their throat, users of this technique are able to create dozens of microscopic air pockets inside of their mouth. These air pockets then burst open once the user opens their mouth, releasing a deafening blast of thunder outwards that can repel objects. This blast deafens the opponent and acts as a diversionary tactic, allowing the user to either escape or perform another attack. In extreme circumstances the blast has been known to damage the opponent's ear drums, causing them to bleed from their ears and be put through immense physical trauma.

Once again we need a radius/dimensions for how big this wave is as well as speeds for how fast it travels. How many attacks/jutsu can it repel? Also, define extreme circumstances in which it damages the opponents ears. Lastly, it won't be making them bleed or putting them through immense physical trauma from a D-Rank attack .

Yuuto Uzumaki wrote:Name:Thunder Style: Limitless Pressure Gauge
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: C-rank
Type: Offensive - Defensive
Element: Raiton - Futon
Range: 10 feet
Specialty: Ninjutsu - Taijutsu
Duration: Instant
Cooldown: 3 posts
Description:After channeling chakra into the palm of their hand, the user will create hundreds of air pockets, condensing them into a single ball. This ball rests in the palm of their hand, glowing from the chakra holding the air pockets together. If the user manages to successfully hit their opponent with this ball, then the air pockets will burst, releasing a shock wave that does both external and internal damage to the opponent. The shock wave holds the potential to rip open skin, break bones and damage organs. It is believed that this technique is based off the principles of both the Chidori and the Rasengan.

Okay, this is going to need to be a higher rank jutsu to be approved. Chidori and Rasengan are both A-Rank, so probably around that area. If you are want to keep it at C-Rank, you need to reduce the damage it can do by a considerable portion. Also, this is gonna need an increased cooldown, probably like 4 or 5 posts.

Overall, your jutsu need some fleshing out and are OP for D and C Ranks. If you need an idea of what the jutsu here on Saga are capable of, please check the jutsu guidelines in the guidelines forum.

Bump this when the edits are made and a mod will take another look at it.

Bump

With such dependence on Taijutsu, members are unable to learn Bukijutsu.
Relying on the Nintaijutsu, they are unable to learn Genjutsu.

These needs to be change to something else more damaging. Banning a spec isn't a drawback, seeing how it doesn't force nothing on the user. My suggestion is given them a +1 to spec, or an unbalanced negative trait, etc.

Name: Thunder Style Technique
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: D-S rank
Type: Offensive
Element: Raiton - Futon
Range: 10 feet
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: Instant
Cooldown: 3 posts
Description: The fundamental technique of the Thunder Style arts, the Ikaton no Jutsu allows its user to generate microscopic air pockets that explode to produce thunder. It also allows the user to manipulate any preexisting thunder, as well. The Ikajutsu is the technique upon which all other techniques within this style revolve around. The damage is internal, the force being external. It scales with the rank of the user.

D-rank: The internal force can cause minor dizziness and nausea from pushing on organs. The external force is capable of fending off 3 projectiles, one D-rank jutsu. This force can travel at 25mp/s

C-rank: The internal force can now cause disorientation, the nausea can cause projectile vomiting, and the victim will experience a feeling of falling from the force. Externally it can fend of 4 projectiles or one C-rank jutsu. This jutsu can travel at 25mp/s

B-rank: The jutsu has now come to a fatal stage, able to now rupture organs it will not initially kill the target, but pain now over comes the body from the internal force. Externally it can now fend off a strike of a sword, or one B-rank jutsu. The jutsu can travel at 65mp/s

A-rank: Internally the jutsu can rip open the stomach, kidneys, liver if the force is created at close range. While at the maximum of 10 feet it will still cause heavy pressure on organs causing multiple ruptures that will kill the target if not treated. Externally two sword strikes can be fended off or one A-rank jutsu. The jutsu is now capable of moving at 85mp/s.

S-rank: One blow from 10 feet is capable of now ripping apart any organ in the body, massive bleeding will take place and disorientation takes complete and full effect, nausea causes projectile vomiting. Externally, the jutsu can fend off one empowered strike, or 3 sword strikes, or one S-rank jutsu. The jutsu now travels up to 105mp/s.

From D - B specify that they can only defend against basic projectile/strikes. Either decrease the speed of the wave or decrease the damage dealt - will not be maxing out on both.

Name:Thunder Style: Howling Beast
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: D-S rank
Type: Offensive - Defensive
Element: Raiton - Futon
Range: Close Range
Specialty: Ninjutsu - Taijutsu
Duration: Instant
Cooldown: 3 posts
Description: After channeling their chakra into the palm of their hand, the user of this technique can create several microscopic air pockets are their fist. Once a target has been chosen, the user can either punch the target directly, or punch the air in their general direction, popping these air pockets and causing a shock wave to ripple out. This shock wave holds the potential to rupture organs. the jutsu scales with the user, becoming more devastating at every rank.

D-rank: The jutsu will not cause any noticable change within the victim, but the power of a strike externally will cause major bruising. Nor can it knock the target back

C-rank: The jutsu can now internally effect the victim, if struck at part of the body that has an organ beneath it, the target will feel large pressure on the organ of choice, the effect may vary depend on the organ, but will not be fatal. The jutsu will only knock the target back 3 feet.

B-rank: The strength of the jutsu is now able to crack and break bones inward. The force internally is now able to rupture the victims organs and cause minor internal bleeding, though not fatal, it can become lethal if untreated. The jutsu will only knock the target back 5 feet.

A-rank: With a direct impact on any important organ, the force is able to rip apart organs at the seams, creating a powerful shockwave that will ripple the opponents body and knock them back 10 feet. Externally the force of impact will tear apart muscles, making movement impaired.

S-rank: A direct impact anywhere on the body will have a near fatal effect. The shockwave will now internally shake the targets body and rip their body apart from the inside out, afterwards the target is thrown back 20 feet at the speed of 105mp/s.

Detail the damage at C-rank.

Name:Thunder Style: Breaking the Silence
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: D-rank
Type: Offensive - Defensive
Element: Raiton - Futon
Range: 10 feet
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: Instant
Cooldown: 3 posts
Description: By channeling their chakra into their throat, users of this technique are able to create dozens of microscopic air pockets inside of their mouth. These air pockets then burst open once the user opens their mouth, releasing a deafening blast of thunder outwards that can repel objects. This blast deafens the opponent and acts as a diversionary tactic, allowing the user to either escape or perform another attack. In extreme circumstances the blast has been known to damage the opponent's ear drums, causing them to bleed from their ears and be put through immense physical trauma. The cone of the effect spreads roughly betwen 3-15 feet depending on the rank of the user.

D-rank: The jutsu at this point has no considerable use, the shockwave moves at 25mp/s and causes slight dizziness, the screech is annoying and is primarily used to create opportunity.

C-rank: The jutsu at this point is able to cause disorientation through double vision and slight nausea. The shockwave now inflict minor bruising and pushes back the target one foot, the wave travels at 45mp/s.

B-rank: Now able to fully disorient a person, the target will experience double vision and feel dizzy from the screeching noise. The noise will cause minor pain in the ear drum. The wave will now cause major bruising and push the target back 3 feet. The shockwave moves at 65mp/s

A-rank: The jutsu will now cause bones to crack under the pressure of the wave, the noise so deafening that the target cannot hear anything else during its duration. The target will projectile vomit and most likely fall from the dizziness induced on them. The wave will throw them back 6 feet. The shockwave moves at 85mp/s

S-rank: The jutsu is capable of fully destroying the eardrum and causing blood to pour from the ear. The target will be thrown a full ten feet away at the speed of 105mp/s with the shockwave. Internally organs will be ripped apart and bones break inward.

This is slightly confusing. You mention that the effect of the clone spreads 3 -15ft, but it in the range it says 10ft, change one or the other to make it uniform. Detail how long the dizziness, double vision, etc. last for.


Thunder Style: Limitless Pressure Gauge
-Increase the cool down by at least 2[/quote]